|18 Jun 2004|| Laurence Adrian MacCaskill|
I like the basic overall concept. I think it was a good idea.
"Antonius" on the medallion would have been even more obvious 'cause it would BE Latin and certainly recognizable to anyone familiar with the story. "Antoney", being a misspelling, only serves to confuse.
What do the black stripes and that whitish stuff in the lower left corner represent? Oh, after looking at the picture a while, I think they're some of Cleo's hair (?) and part of a gown (?). The relatively uniform, square-ended, black 'stripes' of hair confused me a bit - perhaps something a little more loosely flowing and curly with more loose strands would help convey the impression of hair (You didn't know Cleopatra was a redhead?).
I assume the background is intended to be a ceramic tile floor? Highlights and shadows along the edges of the tiles would add enormously as well as doing the 'grout' between the tiles in some different texture. It all looks dimensionlessly flat and 'painted'.
The 'gold' beads look like they've been dipped in honey. Was that intentional?
A little research to see what an 'asp' looks like wouldn't have hurt at all, either.
I realize if this was a school assignment you were probably rushed for time and it's more work to put in more detail - but as they say: "God is in the details."
|28 Jul 2006|| Anne Wipf|
Cleopatra, yes : I love the concept and the symbolism of the picture. Great composition.