Document 3 out of 6 by Alicia 'Yohji-kun' Reese.

SciFi and Fantasy Stories: Morning Dew

Just a poem about two people who love one another, the narrator is my elven character Tulnea

Main Category: [Mystic]


	Beautiful falls the morning dew. Slowly I wake, looking for you. I smile when I see you, your sleep soft and true. A hand I brush across your face, softly, as not to ruin your peaceful blue. Beautiful sleeps my love this morn. Soft as a petal but a sharp as a thorn. A hand I lay on her stomach, ah, soon a child is born. Beautiful wakes my wife this day, Opens her eyes from her peaceful lay. Softly smile I do, grinning if I may. Beautiful then fell the morning dew, Slowly we woke, slowly we knew. Beautiful slept my love that morn, Soft as petal a child was born. Beautiful wakes my wife these days, Opens her eyes to see the both of us…in many ways.

Date	Name	Comment
16 Nov 2003	Stephanie Zayatz	Loading... This was about Tulnea? Dude, where've I been??....hehehe....very purdy! Alicia 'Yohji-kun' Reese replies: "Comment From The Drizzy: Yup, all about Tulnea ^_^ This might not get to you cause it wants to send to your netscape thingy? O.o well, that works.."
16 Nov 2003	Trish Bunny Saw	Loading... Oh, that is so touching. Soft and pretty. I love the way you open each line with an adverb, it lends such a beautiful style to the whole poem. first comment waltz... a polka is too gawdy for such a well-written poem Well done! Alicia 'Yohji-kun' Reese replies: " Comment From The Drizzy: hehe! waltzes along too Thank you much! I thought it would be cook (edits cook? bah, cool!) to start every stanza like that, heh. Wrote it in math class, I think last year....^_^ that has no relevance...relevence...hmmer...something like that! clicks to go check out hrr gallery"
19 Nov 2003	Sarah E. Askew	Loading... That was such a pretty poem. I really liked it. Alicia 'Yohji-kun' Reese replies: "Comment From The Drizzy: Thank you!"
21 Nov 2003	Stephanie Zayatz	Loading... Oh yeah, I should change that...changes Alicia 'Yohji-kun' Reese replies: "Comment From The Drizzy: Heh, yea"
28 Nov 2003	John 'Kazen' Blanchard	Loading... Hey, wow that's beautiful, yes I'll admit it, back off you you immoral society, I said it! Anywho, I...well I think I made it clear I like it ^^; hops off to some other writings Alicia 'Yohji-kun' Reese replies: " Comment from the Drizzy: hehe, thank you much."
15 Dec 2003	drew	Loading... I thought it was good, only point of critism is that the ryhming felt alittle forced, but i dunno, im not much for rhyming poems Alicia 'Yohji-kun' Reese replies: " Comment from the Drizzy: Yea, I didn't know what else to do...I just wrote it and tried to find some rhyming words, thank you though! loves helpful critism"
1 Jun 2004	Claire M.E. Gibson	Loading... Love the words, and the repetition. Very good rhyming scheme that makes sense.
24 Feb 2006	Erica	Loading... You are such a passionate writer! Take writing as your carreer! You'll be great!

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'Morning Dew'

SciFi and Fantasy Stories: Morning Dew