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SciFi and Fantasy Stories: The Imprint of Blood (for Joelle)

this is the result of Joelle Duran's request after winning the 'really encouraging and useful comment award' and 100th main-page comment. it is part of the back-story for Hortanian from Clan of the Owl. in this he still carries his birth-name of Gavan. hopefully i will be able to continue this and finish the tale up to Hortanian's final transformation, and maybe flesh this section out more too. this piece does contain violence.

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The Imprint of Blood

Gavan woke to a surprised and agonized shriek close at hand, towards the mouth of the cavern nest. The sound was followed by scuffling and half-roaring, half wailing battle cries. The smell of blood flooded the air around him. He struggled to his feet and his back paw tapped into his littermate, Howell, also rising. Gavan could just see his outline in the dim light, wings up in a defensive posture and ears forward, straining to make out the cause of the commotion. His curving beak opened, panting in fear.

            “Who attacks?” he growled. Gavan bobbed his hawk-like head indicating that he did not know.

            Together they charged forward with only their sense of smell to distinguish friend from foe in the dark. Claws and beaks struck and scraped, tearing at muscle and sinew. Feathers and fur, soaked with brilliant golden blood matted and clung to them in the whirling havoc of the enclosed battle. Gavan felt a beak cut through his wing and take hold of the second joint from his shoulder. His assailant pulled back, tearing bone from bone and the wing swung useless. Gavan wailed and struggled to ignore the electric pangs that shot through his body at every movement. He charged forward, leaping upon the back of another griffin, one not of his pack by its smell, and he tore into its back with claws and beak. His victim reared, wings flailing and head twisting back, trying vainly to fight him off. The motion brought them both tumbling to the ground, Gavan beneath the other griffin, now dying as blood poured from an artery in it’s neck that he had severed with a long talon. But Gavan did not know this, for they had fallen against one of the entry stones at the cavern entrance and the combination of the impact and his enemy’s smothering weight, all awareness left him.

 

            When he woke, barely breathing beneath his slain enemy, the sickly winter sun was risen, and it illuminated the silver-dust snow along the slope. Gavan’s head was aching and the taste of blood had turned rancid in his mouth. He wanted nothing more than to quench his thirst with the snow, and clean his palate. As he struggled to move the acute twinge of his injured wing took his breath. Slowly and painfully he wriggled free and rolled away from the nest out into the snow. The welcome cold numbed his wound and he swallowed the snow, savoring its clean, crisp wetness against his tongue. As pain and thirst subsided he looked critically at his injury. The wing was nearly severed at the joint, dangling only by a tendon. I will never fly again. The thought terrified him, but he was a griffin of the Snowfeather and, though young, was a warrior. Fear was never a solution. He knew what must be done, and he hesitated only for a moment before striking forward to cut the remaining ties. He looked sadly at the chestnut feathers, flecked with cream that had once been the end of his wing.

Refusing to allow himself to dwell on the loss of his flight, he turned back towards the nest. It’s so quiet. Have they already left for revenge?  Weakly he climbed back up the slope.

            When he reached the cavern’s entrance the smell of congealed blood once again flooded his senses, but what made him uneasy was the fact that the blood smelled mostly of his pack members. A new fear tried to grip him, but he held it back and stepped gently among the mangled bodies.  The entire nest was covered in spatters of griffin blood, as if it had been gilded by a madman. Gavan distanced himself from the carnage with practiced concentration. Five… eight… nine………!  The sight of his littermate, throat torn, pulled him harshly back to himself. Howell’s creamy plumage and fur were soaked with gold, much of which was his own. Gavan knelt beside him and nestled his forehead in the feathers of his back. Not yet. No grieving yet. Get up #### you. Get up.

Forcing himself once again to his feet he continued his count of his own pack’s slain. The realization that the massacre was complete, but for him, came over his mind like a moonless night. The youngest of his packs cubs were gone; as was the tradition, the conquers would raise them as their own. Those that were too old, but not yet grown, had been cut down without a second thought. Gavan counted seven dead of the enemy, against his pack’s thirty-two, many of whom had been killed as they slept. In the daylight he recognized the markings of Skybeast pack members. Rage trickled into his veins and he began dragging their bodies from the cave and hurling them down the hillside. Cravens… not even clever, just cowardly.  By evening his strength was wholly spent, but at least his people would not be lying amongst their enemies.

            The last thing Gavan wished to do was walk through the cave-nest, now his family’s tomb, but the loss of blood and his strenuous activity of dragging his slain enemies away, had drained all strength from his body, and he needed rest, and food. It was impossible to step without treading on bodies, and Gavan convulsed every time he felt a stiff form under talon or paw. By the time he reached the cavern’s back he was nauseated, but he slipped past the Hoarding Stone, and into the chamber beyond. Here the cold stream ran even in the midst of winter, and in the rushing water lay a great stone, hollowed into a bowl. There the remains of the pack’s last hunt lay, preserved, for a time, by the water-chilled stone. Gavan retched, and considered leaping into the stream, to wash the scent of blood from his plumage and fur, but he knew that if he were to wet himself now, he would freeze in the coming night. There were no warm bodies beside which to sleep.

            With a warrior’s will, the griffin forced himself to eat from the chilled elk meat, and when he had finished he curled up beneath his wings. He slept uneasily by the gurgling water.

            He woke with the feeling that he was suffocating. Someone had sealed him in a tomb with the dead. Springing to his feet, he rushed to the Hoarding Stone, and found it still open. Blood-stench once again assaulted him, and he turned back into the inner chamber. Once again, he forced himself to eat, and when he felt himself capable, he began, one by one, to drag his folk into the inner chamber, by the softly singing water. He had woken late in the morning, and by the time he had moved the last body and pushed the Hoarding Stone into place with a back paw, the sun was nearly set.

            The dirge-chant came to Gavan, almost automatically. “Dead are my kinfolk, rising are their ghosts. Brave they fell, and far shall they fly, their prisons at last fall to dust.” His blood felt chilled in his veins as he left the tunnel. A layer of frost had covered the nine enemies he had tossed out upon the hillside, but the fresh, snow-laden night air, was clean, and touched him gently.

            I cannot stay here… they will come back and know that one, at least, survives; one to put a claim to vengeance. A gust of wind rushed by him, filling his chest with the humming feeling of flight. Not thinking, he spread his wings, and found one too light and still throbbing. He swore. They will track me, then, and I will be killed in a few days.  Nevertheless, he set out, towards the forest’s edge, where at least his enemy’s flight could not be much to their advantage.

            He walked to the south, though he had little hope of reaching his family’s ally pack, the Goldwood. The Skybeast would be aware of the danger and would be swift to hunt him. Unable to clearly see the moon, Gavan could not gauge time, but as he grew tired he stopped and dug himself into the rotting leaves to sleep. The memory-scent of blood touched his dreams, and he woke unrested. The sun had risen, and something in the forest about him felt out of place.

            Gavan became suddenly alert and he pricked his ears and scanned the surrounding trees for any sight or sound that would tell him why his flesh prickled. Whatever this was, it did not smell like a member of the Skybeast pack. No…feels too intense for that. His feathers fluffed in instinct. He was being watched. Eyes and ears swept the forest floor and canopy. A gentle scrape, as of something leaning against the bark of a nearby tree gave Gavan his observer’s position and he crept gently towards it. Instantly he was met with a pair of sharp, scarlet eyes. He leaped back and raised his wings defensively, heedless of his wound.

            The red-eyed griffin stepped towards him, curiosity in its expression. Gavan looked nervously at the ground beneath the stranger’s feet; its claws left deep imprints. The newcomer had colors strange to Gavan. His feathers, and even his fur was dark, almost metallic green and a pair of crimson stripes ran down his flanks and wings.

            “What… are you? You are not a griffin, though you look like one.”

            The stranger blinked. “No. I am no griffin.  My name is Atticus, what is yours?”

            “Gavan. What do you want?”

            “Nasty wound,” Atticus scrunched his eyes in a frown. “And tragic.”

            “I don’t need pity, or gawkers. Now go away!”

            Atticus cocked his head. “Then you want death? How do you plan to hunt like that? Stay. I will bring you food.” He turned, and before Gavan even thought to stop him he had darted off. Gavan did not wait, but continued southward. Every moment he stood still would bring the Skybeast closer.

           

That night he had barely dug himself a bed when Atticus appeared out of the trees, carrying a slain doe across his back as if it were a rabbit.

            “I told you to wait. You do not listen well.” He dropped the deer. “You eat first.”

            “Why… are you doing this? What are you?”

            “Great wrong has been done to you, I think.”

            “And why do you care?”

Atticus sat down, his eyes kindled with sickness. “I saw you, tossing your foes from the cavern… I watched you bury your kin. Tell me who did this…”

            Some thought at the back of Gavan’s mind, a thought that he could not quite pull forward, stopped him from answering. Instead he used his hunger as avoidance and sank his beak into the deer. The taste of blood shot through him and he retched from his unwanted memories of that taste. Atticus stood up, concerned.

            “What’s wrong?”

            “I…” he retched again. “I can’t… eat. Blood…”

            “You’re a griffin. What else is there for you to eat?”

            “Can’t… must starve I guess. I can’t taste that ever again. No more blood!” all the warrior pride broke away and Gavan rammed his head into the loam, tears wetting the feathers of his face. “Sky and Sun! What… how… Why did I live?”

            Atticus darted to his side, shivering. “Because our realm is a harsh and cruel place; because your name was not on that page of the Book. Perhaps, if you’re lucky, it’s because you have a purpose to fulfill.”

            “And who are you to spit answers at me!” Gavan drew back to strike at Atticus, but stopped short. It was almost like looking into a mirroring pool. Face to face, grief to grief, rage to rage. The difference was that Atticus’ pain had grown cold and rotted into bitterness. Atticus had answers, but Gavan was suddenly aware that they were not the answers he wanted.

            “You… want to avenge my pack…”

            “Don’t you?”

            Unwelcome visions crowded in on Gavan, of blood and shrieks of pain and fear.

            “No.”

            “What?”

            “No. I will not do what they did to me… I will not do it to anyone. How can you?”

            Atticus looked perplexed. “They murdered your family. Do they not deserve to die?”

            “If they do… have you killed?”

            “I have.”

            “Then, if they deserve death, why don’t you?”

            “… … … I do. ‘Blood cries out for blood.’”

            “And the more blood shed, the more cries rise.”

            “Yes.”

            “Kill me.”

            “What?”

            “I can’t survive without blood. I don’t want anymore shed on my account. I can’t even eat. Kill me. It will be a mercy.”

            “No... This is twisted. If all bloodshed is wrong then there would be no predators and balance would be destroyed. You’re not culpable.”

            “Twisted. You would feel guilty of my death, but not the death of my pack’s killers? That is twisted.”

            Atticus stood without speaking, watching Gavan intently. The true griffin shifted uncomfortably. I have no reason to fear his anger. I have nothing to lose. He kept repeating this thought to himself, until Atticus broke the silence. When he did, his tone was gentle, far from Gavan’s expectations.

            “You are a strange creature. I have not harbored a second thought about my path until now… I have not found enough reason to shift me from my course, but I think your words will never leave my mind. I would be sad indeed if I allowed the death of a creature capable of such thoughts. Perhaps there is another option.’

            “What do you mean?”

            “You asked me before, what I am. I am dragon.” With that, Atticus backed away from Gavan and he seemed to melt and expand. In his true form, the creature was massive, covered in dark green mail with twin arcs of crimson scales flaring out like fins down his flanks. His eyes were deep scarlet, as were his teeth and he had four tusks near the corners of his mouth, two jutting upwards and two hanging down. Two dark, red speckled, scaly wings were folded and lifted high above his head. The whole, long frame was supported on four nimble talons. Atticus rested his great head on the turf in front of Gavan, who sat trembling in shock and fear.

            “I will not see you dead. My elder brother is a master in the arts of the magi. It may be within his powers to help you.”

            “I don’t understand.”

            “Make you able to live without blood, perhaps. I think I will take you to him now.” With speed amazing in a creature of so great a size, Atticus flicked one of his wings forward and scooped Gavan up off the ground. Darkness seemed to crowd in on them until there was nothing Gavan could see. Then a brilliant crystal light flooded in on them, falling from the face of a large, pallid moon. Atticus’ scales glowed under its beams.

            “Welcome to my home.” 

            Gavan was too astonished to speak. All that came to his mind was a question. Did I survive?

           

 

 

 
 

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5 Dec 200445 D Joelle Duran
Thanks so much for writing this for me, Anne! I really enjoyed seeing more of wonderful Hortanian/Gavan. The story really quite well explains his learned revulsion of blood.
And it was great to meet Atticus in a story at last! I liked that scene when Gavan saw the similarity between them.
*blink, blink* wow you're right. i don't have him in anything else i have up yet... i hadn't thought of that!
And here are the obligatory nitpicks...

"half-roaring, half wailing battle cries" hyphen for both or neither.

"Feathers and fur, soaked with brilliant golden blood matted and clung to them" add comma after 'blood.'

"as blood poured from an artery in it’s neck" its

"for they had fallen against one of the entry stones at the cavern entrance and the combination of the impact and his enemy’s smothering weight, all awareness left him." I'd add a comma after 'entrance' and an 'at' before 'the combination.'

"As he struggled to move the acute twinge of his injured wing took his breath." Comma after 'move.'

"He looked sadly at the chestnut feathers, flecked with cream that had once been the end of his wing." add comma after 'cream.'

"came over his mind like a moonless night." Great piece of imagery!

"The youngest of his packs cubs were gone" pack's.

"A layer of frost had covered the nine enemies he had tossed out upon the hillside." Hmmmm--it was seven before. =)
*thwacks self on head* stupid, stupid. i changed it at one point and forgot to change it in both places. *thwack*

"A gentle scrape, as of something leaning against the bark of a nearby tree gave Gavan his observer’s position" comma after 'tree.' Also gentle/gently repeated in this sentance.

"Atticus sat down, his eyes kindled with sickness." sickness just seems an odd word here.
hmmmm, maybe.

"The whole, long frame was supported on four nimble talons" four talons? How can he stand on only four toes?
eh? hadn't thought of that. i have seen the word talon used for either the claw or the whole foot... but i guess i should change it...

Again, I really enjoyed this. I hope you are able to write more--I've got quite fond of your world and your characters. =)

1 A. Setliffe replies: "thank you! monster compliment! i had been worried that you would not like it. i am really glad you do. thank you for comming by! and i will see to the nitpicks over christmas. "
11 Jan 2005:-) Becca Lusher
Ah, Joelle got all the picks I had. The only other one I would add would be about his wing - could you clarify a bit more over how much of his wings he's lost. I know you say the joint, but there's more than one joint ^_^ It's just that you say he went to sleep beneath his wings, which would suggest that there's quite a lot of the other one left.
Just a thought.

Anyway, other than that this was well done. Poor Gavan, if there's ever a reason for not liking the taste of blood, there's one. I love his wisdom though, in growing to hate the taste of blood he's also understood the needless rage and anger of bloodshed - though you can also see Atticus' stand point. But cycle of violence and all that. Then comes the problem of if you don't do something then the other will think they can get away with it.
Argh!
*stops* I'll give myself a headache at this rate.
Like Joelle I liked the similarities between Atticus and Gavan, and their differences. Also made me wonder if Atticus followed him because he wanted to see him live, or because he wanted to help him avenge - motivation is always an intriguing thing.
Especially loved Atticus telling Gavan off for leaving, though he found him so easily. And the little hint with him being heavy footed - though as you'd already hinted Atticus was in this story I already knew it was him. I love your dragons, they're so wonderfully visualised and written.

More of this would not go amiss, poor Gavan. Great stuff, me dear ^_^

:-) A. Setliffe replies: "HMM i thought i had clarified it was the second joint fron the shoulder... and i should probably clarify sleeping under his wings. it's funny. sometimes, when i consider the problem of violence i feel like Gavan, and sometimes like Atticus. this world is so full of difficult questions, sometimes it is nice to isolate just one in the course of a story. i don't know what i would do without my dragons. *hugs atticus, who rolls his eyes* i will try to write more of this. glad you liked it! ^_^"
17 Jan 2005:-) Cecily ´SLWS´ Webster
A pacifistic warrior, soldier's soul drowned in blood...how awful that he cannot eat. Ever read ;Regenerationi>? There's a soldier in there like that.

Does he not feel that he is made more helpless by the loss of his flight? Does he even understand that fully, the enormity of being grounded, or is he constantly blocking it out?

this is still very rough... but i considered him still very much in shock. i think i would be. there is little or no research behind this so far, just feeling.

"his eyes kindled with sickness." Implies Atticus has a fever. I don't think this is what you meant. What did you?

it is actually kind of a fever, but in a mental sense. a force that compels him into vengeance. i'm considering re-phrasing it as people don't seem to get it. basically, the point i was trying to make is that gavan does not see the expression in atticus' eyes as healthy.

Strong, yes. That conversation at the end, so meaningful, could do with more feeling and gesture, I think. Silver oddness under that heavy moon...and yes I am in a hate and murder mood. I thought I'd adopt a griffin instead.

:-) A. Setliffe replies: "the conversation meant something to me when i wrote it. gavan and atticus each argue for one side of my psyche... the pacifist who is horified of killing, and the avenger who believes in defense of herself and others... the question is still not resolved in me, and i don't know if it ever will be. i like griffins... fierce and majestic. *walks over to her new-forming encyclopedia, opens it and pulls out an albino griffin cub. carries it over to Cecily* she needs a home. her clan see her as defective because of her sensitivity to light. At this age she is quite cuddly... and will still bond to people. if you raise her right she will learn to interact with people, and even to speak thier language, if a little awkwardly, but she will always be very griffin-like. *hugs baby griffin and hands her to cecily."
6 Feb 2005:-) B. Layne Weaver
How could I have missed a story for Joelle?

*shudders* The blood going rancid in his mouth is very unpleasant... but very powerful!

"I will never fly again." Another powerful statement. So much emotion in that one little line--pain, despair, bitterness.
Ah! And the completing of the severing of his wing! Brilliant, Anne.

"With a warrior’s will, the griffin forced himself to eat from the chilled elk meat, and when he had finished he curled up beneath his wings"--I don't know if anyone's caught this yet or not, but he only has one wing now, remember? 12

Am I wrong in thinking that he severed the tendon that was all that attached his wing? It seems like I caught a couple places where it read like he still had two wings.

Anyway, this was wonderful, Anne. So full of emotion. My eyes watered up a bit reading this.

Wonderful job!

1 A. Setliffe replies: "this is a rough draft... i need to get my $#@ in gear and edit both this and S.P. so much to do! not enough time! ack ack ack!"
18 Jan 2007:-) Clarion H. Hess
I love it!! It is amazing!! Where did you come up with it? (I hate it when people ask me that- I never know what to say, but I'm asking you anyway. Consider it rhetorical if you want... ) I love the imagery, the smells, the details, the dragon/gryphon. It's all great. You've got me off looking for more. I hope you've written and/or are writing more with this character. There's so much you can do with him. Great writing, keep it up!!!Anne: well it's a backstory for a secondary character in a larger work that is currently down for repairs. The characters have been with me for a long time, so all I had to do was write out the whys... There isn't much more to tell, but I could write more for you. The gryphon's life settles down soon after this... his form is changed to that of a human so that he can survive without meat, and he takes to living on the dragons' land and tending gardens and orchards there.
21 Oct 2007:-) Sarah J. Kinder
Just started reading here and found the story delightful, if sad. I can't say I've ever read a griffin story before so it was pretty unique from my perspective. Interesting that they live in "packs" I guess I would have thought prides for the lion half, since eagles are not very social. Anyway just an aside. 10 Anne: I probably should clarify it as a clan-type structure, actually... neither pack nor pride gives the right idea of the social-structure. Ultimately they are neither eagles nor lions anymore, though their origins are somewhat mysterious. thanks for bringing it to my attention! Being a fan of wings the "I will never fly again" line hit me right in the gut. Feel rather badly for Gavan having such horrible things happen to him and being unable to feed due to his aversion. As for constructive comments (looks like Joelle and the others hit most of the nitpicks already) I think the description is a tad shallow in places and could use just a bit of spice for added emotional umph. Anyway, otherwise very nice. 2

-SAnne: this is quite old and due for a revamp... I am currently re-organizing and refreshing my page, so this one is on the list. I will actually try and finish it this time around too. ^_~ thanks for dropping by! Glad you enjoyed.
8 Nov 2007:-) Lee ian juriet
This rocks! I like It! is there More?

:-) A. Setliffe replies: "depends on your definition of "more" I guess. A lot of my stories intersect, and these characters appear in other places, Gavan specifically, but as of yet there is no more of this specifically. I indent to complete it soon, though. Glad you like it!"
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