*Does the traditional, though never old, First Comment Dance*
Congrats Monti, it's finally on elfwood. I bet you feel proud. Hope to see more of this up soon.
~Jarrett

Tim J. Monti replies: "Thanks Trahey i love the dance. You'll have to show me sometime."

okay...now this is going to come from 1) a friend then 2) from a writer
hey tim! sounds great! love it lots! oh and thanks for putting me in there too! i love havin fire!! im like a serious piromanic sometimes....especially with pics of ppl i dont like right now...! lol

okay...now for the writer....
now...there's lots of room for improvement. the first thing i think u should look at is ur sentences. they're a bit choppy and short. get a thesorous and flip through it to find different words. you seem to use alot of the same words alot. the sentence structure is good though. you've got a clear idea and moving towards it smoothly. i like ur ideas and your characters are coming together well, though i wasnt sure if Kris was girl or guy for a while there...lol. maybe she's a heshe...lol anywayz...great work! i cant wait to read more!

Tim J. Monti replies: "Hey thanks for your opinions. This is the reason I wanted to get my work out, so that people can help me become a better writer. I hope your stories are going well. Keep commenting and try to have as many people as possible comment on my works. Thanks again."

Hey,
I really like your story. I'm Kelsey by the way...I'm friends with Meg and Jarrett. Anyway, I love the story!
Talk to you later...
Bye

Tim J. Monti replies: "Hey nice to meet you. thanks for your comments."

I googled you and found this... very interesting and a cool story