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"A Deeper Calm (poem)" by James Andrew Bowers

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My father and I took a Creative Writing class at Kankakee Community College in the autumn of 2000. This poem was the result of the first assignment in that class - we were supposed to write a poem that contained the words AIM, BOON, WISE, and DECAY. It was published in the 2001 edition of 'The Prairie Fire'.
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A Deeper Calm
part 1- To Heaven Was Sent...

parched lips,
cracked wide in the center,
spread
and reveal a few decayed teeth.
sound,
barely a whisper,
more a wheeze,
drifts up on rank air.
a prayer,
truly heart felt,
starts to rise from the stench
but is cut short by crackling coughs.

the dying man waits for his breathing to settle
and begins again.

parched lips,
cracked wide in the center,
spread 
and beg for forgiveness,
              for healing
              for another day's breaths.
a prayer
takes shape 
and speeds towards its goal.
it reaches the gates of pearl
and pleads its way into heaven.
in fields 
of ivory and amethyst
it finds a sympathetic ear,
the ear of an angel.
the angels whole body aches 
to hear the pain.
he stretches his wings and takes aim,
follows back along the path of the prayer.


part 2-And From Heaven Came... 

a bubble,
shimmering crimson,
expands
and explodes upon the dying man's lips.
a deeper calm
settles into an already quiet room.
The dying man raises his eyes
because he can no longer 
raise his head.

before him stands the angel.

"greetings, my dearest brother,"
lilts the angel's voice.
the man's jaw opens and closes
as if to speak,
but no sound issues forth.

the angel takes a corner of his robe
and wipes away the drying red freckles 
from the dying man's lips.
a muffled gurgle sounds 
low in the man's throat,
clearing the passage once again 
for the man to speak.

"wise angel, 
will you take away this cancer
that is eating me alive?"
"no, that I cannot do,
however,  I bear with me a boon,
and this I present to you."

a perfect, pale white hand 
reaches out and rests itself
on the man's rough, yellow paw.
a few seconds pass like hours
before anyone speaks again.

"angel, what is it you have brought me?"
"the greatest gift an angel may give."
 "but angel, my failing eyes see nothing before me."
"I thought all that carried faith
strong within their hearts knew that
just because you don't see something 
it doesn't necessarily mean it's not there."

and again time grates past,
ticking away on the dying man's 
rasping breaths.

"please, angel, forgive me if I ask again,
for my time draws short,
and I feel I must know,
what is it you have brought me?"
without a word,
the angel rises to his feet.
he takes a few steps from the bed,
spreads his wings,
and disappears in a shout of white light.
he leaves behind only an echo.
the echo of a single word-

"hope."




JAMES ANDREW BOWERS
NOVEMBER 16, 2000


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DateNameComment 
10 Jun 2001:-) Deanna Scott
Oh wow... you got this from those four words?
I saw a few comments complaining about your rhythm, or about your poetry being too prosaic. Poetry is, to me, image. It's power; it's the vividness imparted in few words, like "crackling coughs", "a shout of white light" and "time grates past, ticking away on the dying man's lips". And you've gone beyond image alone to say something significant. Your poetry is vivid and powerful... thanks for sharing it!
15 May 2002:-) Lisa Sanderson
Oh my.. I really like this one.. I'm not very fond of poetry but this is just fantastic.
16 May 200245 Eve
This poem is amazing! It's so personal and emotional, yet evocative of humanity as a whole. I especially loved the line "He raises his eyes because he cannot raise his head". The title is perfect.
12 Nov 200245 Jaenie Thompson <i_na
Lovely poem, Andy. You have a way with words. Thank you for sharing your work with me.
4 Dec 200245 Sarah Child
Andy, I think that this poem is beautiful! I started crying at the beginning of it because a good friend of mine is still trying to face the demon of her grandfather's coughing as he died of lung cancer. I like the message at the end, it is a good message and one that I am glad to hear. Thank you.
16 Apr 2004:-) Rachael Evans
Wow. How'd the Mods miss this one? Very moving, emotional, and touching. Well written James.
28 Aug 2005:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith
I love this! *nods head emphatically* I even love the title. It's very... deep...and.... calming. 2
20 Nov 2005:-) Patricia M. D´Angelo
Wonderful poem, wonderful thought. Hope is indeed a treasured gift, as sometimes it can seem so elusive.
3 Mar 2006:-) Ashley R. Wynn
See, I can tell I'm going to enjoy this Herscher Project thing. Already I'm two poems into the tour, and so far no rhyming. This just makes my day. . . err. . . night.
21 Jul 200945 Anon.
I read the words, then closed my eyes............so I could feel them.
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