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Kathryn Aliwoode

"Mermaid" by Kathryn Aliwoode

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A short poem about a mermaid.
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With eyes like the sea,

She swims along,

Effortlessly, gracefully gliding.

How nice to be a mermaid,

With a shining tail,

Shimmering hair, glittering eyes.

Eyes like the sea.

Eyes pure,

Eyes glittering.

Eyes like the sea.


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6 Feb 2005:-) Shannah Goss
Yay I can do the First Comment Dance *Attempts to dance then falls in clumsiness) Oops. Anyway, I like this one too, it gives good discription of the mermaid while still allowing you to use your imagination and come up with how she looks in your head.

:-) Kathryn Aliwoode replies: "*is flattered*"
10 May 2005:-) Sharon *Blackstaff* Black
The only thing I don't like about this poem is the line "How nice to be a mermaid"- I don't know much about poetry, but it seems to clash with the rest of the poem. Something about it being speculation while the rest is observation, I think.

1 Kathryn Aliwoode replies: "You have a point there...hmmm, must edit that"
1 Jun 2005:-) Rachel LA Simon
Ooooh Pretty...

:-) Kathryn Aliwoode replies: "*blushes magenta*"
25 Oct 2005:-) Dan Shevock
Nice little glimpse at a mermaid.

:-) Kathryn Aliwoode replies: "*doesn't know what to say*"
24 Feb 200745 Kyndra
Wow, with every word u wrote, i could picture it. Very good.
7 May 200745 Laura A. Farrar
Very beautiful! I enjoyed that greatly.
30 Jan 200845 Dragon’s #1 fan
I agree with sharon, but its an awesome poem! (sry 4 spelling) You can actually see a mermaid!
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 • Created by: :-) Kathryn Aliwoode
 • Copyright: ©Kathryn Aliwoode. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Eyes, Hair, Mermaid, Scales, Shiny, Swim, Tail
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Romance, Emotion, Love, Celtic
 • Views: 2172

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