| 22 Aug 2003 |  Meuni7 | WoW. Beautiful poem. It's fitting. War... *~* Anyways, it's a really really really good poem. Lots of emotion. I hope you do more.   Christina Stoppa replies: "Thanx! I wrote this poem while I was in the process of reading 'The Wars' by Timothy Findley in English class." | |
| 25 Aug 2003 | Anonymous | Wonderful! I don't know how you managed to capture the mind so well using rhymes. Very good indeed.  Christina Stoppa replies: "Thanx!" | |
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| 27 Nov 2003 | Rebecca lianagem tobiano | Wow! You have a real talent with words.Keep them caming.  Christina Stoppa replies: "Thanx!" | |
| 9 Mar 2004 | Dracosilverwolf | Wow! That was really wonderful. If you're familiar with Tolkien's work (which I really think you are) then you would understand when I say that it sounds a lot like the battle at helm's deep! Keep the good work coming!  Christina Stoppa replies: "Thanx! I actually haven't read much of Tolkien - only a bit. I'll read more eventually." | |
| 5 May 2004 | Dee | it fits with double double toil and trouble from macbeth! hey i just thought of this, in shakespeare's time spears were popular, now 'home cooking is the rage so we can go from shakespeare to shake'n'bake you'll of course be Distinguished poet Ms C.S. Shake'n'bake ... u'll have to drop 'stoppa' of course, it'll be TOO common for you  i like the poem, deffinately puts you in the middle of the dingy tar-filled loud battlefield with all them bodies..  Christina Stoppa replies: "Thankkies! Wee! *dances around among covenant bodies* Wait... *stops to think* ...This poem isn't about HALO... *stops dancing and walks away*" | |
| 20 Sep 2004 |  Simi Landau *Muffin Queen* | Niftyness! I likes. The rhyming is great. The meter here seems to change from line to line, which makes the reading a little hard, but that's not a big deal at all. The first four lines (or thereabouts) are in iambic pentameter! I think! (Which would explain Dee's 'double double toil and trouble'! I get it! ^_^) Another great poem.  Christina Stoppa replies: "Thanx! This was really writen on the spur of the moment, so I'm not surprised that the rhythm is weird." | |
| 25 Jan 2005 |  B. Layne Weaver | Another very strong piece I really liked this one. It really expressed the terror and torment of war. Great job!  Christina Stoppa replies: "Thank you again!" | |
| 26 Jan 2005 | Harpoon | "The bodies within lay broken and shattered" You already used shattered to rhyme in the poem, may I suggest you replace this "shattered" with something like "battered"? Great work  Christina Stoppa replies: "Oh, that sounds great! I'll have to fix that. *scratches out shattered and writes in battered* Thank you very much." | |
| 22 Mar 2008 |  Désirée Ruth Dippenaar | Once again, great poem - and so sad! But you really described very well the horrors of war, not only describing the visible but also things like smell and the emotion... This poem is so good that whatever I write as a comment just won’t do it justice  | |
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