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SciFi and Fantasy Stories: Discrepancies

Merfolk are actually quite similar to squid, especially if one goes by DNA. The DNA of a merperson is aproximately 99.967% identical to that of a squid. That is, of course, unless the squid is from another planet and so has no common ancestors, or perhaps its just something that was engineered to look like a squid in order to aid government conspiricies. Or, of corse, if its a robotic squid, because in that case it won't have DNA in the first place.

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“Hello, Stan,” she said, a mysterious smile playing on her face. “Come, Join our circle.” The rest of the circle turned to peer at him expectantly, the unity of their movements strangely disconcerting among the random flows of the water. They seemed identical, the multicolored fins and swathes of flowing fabric that some had, and even the simple fact that each had a different pattern of their scales, or color, or shape did nothing to disprove that idea.

Unaware that he had even moved, Stan settled down onto the ground next to her, sediment drifting up to glow in the light provided by the light in the center. They smiled. The world turned with forces unfelt in the blackly muted deeps as they sat, content in existing as one. The light provided by the object at their center petered out a few meters from the ring of merfolk, but they did not look out, only in.

Time passed, worlds of it.

Stan was one of them, he stared at the light and whispered the names of the lost with them. The darkness around no longer existed.

As one body, they contented themselves with nothing and all at the same time. Slowly, however, Stan began reclaiming a sense of self once more, aided by the nagging voice inside him, telling him, again and again, this isn't right.

The strange noises, like the howling of a lost soul or the screech of claws, or even, occasionally, the crack of strong jaws and the crunch of bone splintering between them drifted into the circle, but only one noticed, the one who had only joined, the one who heeded his cautionary side. The sense of wrongness greatened, to the point where he could not remain a part of the unanimous body.

But then, the others too drifted out from their stupor and opened their eyes as one. They had closed them sometime while they worked,

(worked on what?)

but now all focused on Stan, and waited.

Then she spoke again, the one with the mysterious smile, no, they all had mysterious smiles now, but Stan was certain this was the same one. “You, the newcomer, must join us in flesh and bone and a state of never ending peace.”

Stan wanted to flee. To escape. It would take so little to turn with one stroke of his powerful tail and swim up, away, out of this terrifying prison. So why couldn't he? Even as he thought this, his fins propelled him toward the light at the center, even as he tried exponentially more so to go in the opposite direction. But his muscles betrayed him to the thing he quickly approached and his arms even began to paddle towards it, although he did not yet know its nature. And... it beckoned to him. The fear he felt should have been enough to stop his movement, but the body he occupied had another, stronger master.

The light pierced him, forcing a total surrender of the mind, but not so quickly that he did not notice the nature of the light-source. It was a squid, no, a woman with the tentacles of a squid that glowed with the light of a star. And when she beckoned to him a second time with a sharply glowing blue arm, that was when the light pieced him. That was when his mind gave up all function whatsoever. That was when the world mercifully, but painfully, blacked out in a swirl of sparks.



“Hello, Stan,” she said, a mysterious smile playing on her face. “Come, Join our circle.” The rest of the perfectly formed circle turned to peer at him expectantly, the unity of their movements strangely disconcerting among the random flows of the water. They seemed identical, the multicolored fins and swathes of flowing fabric that some had, the pieces of fabric floating away from each with different shape and buoyancy, and even the simple fact that each had a different pattern of their scales, or color, or shape did nothing to disprove that idea.

Stan joined them without doing anything; his body moved of its own accord. He was watching a movie, one that he had seen before. He knew what would come next. They would join together, sort through the souls of eternity, and act as the judges for them all.

They would, yes.

But not yet.

The strange noises that reached them through the swirling currents by all but one, the one who had joined. The one who heeded his cautionary side, right?

Stan got up, then, rising from the soft ground of the deep and moved away. None stopped him, none hindered him. He turned and fled, and it felt so good.

So good.

“--of you to join us.” she almost seemed to beam at him. He still rested on the surface of that soft sediment, and had not moved at all. Just the wanderings of a restless mind. He smiled at the irony and settled back to watch the movie.

“You, the newcomer, must join us in flesh and bone

(metal)

and a state of never ending peace,” she continued, no, he, that square jaw and prominent nose belonged to no woman.

Then he realized. This was no movie. He had to escape, before it could get any further.

But his fins propelled him toward the light at the center, even as he tried exponentially more so to go in the opposite direction. But his muscles betrayed him to the glowing squid-woman at the center. And then it beckoned to him. His fear suddenly faded into curiosity. What had she said? Suddenly his body obeyed him and he swam closer. What had she said? It had a gender now that he wasn't so terrified of it.

And this time, the soft whisper reached him. “Heed the discrepancies. Before,” her voice was fading, “it all... falls apart.”

Then an arm swung outward in a brilliant flair and the whiteness cleansed all. Stan fell past the sparkles very quickly and the blackness filled him.



This time, as he stood outside the circle, Stan remembered the previous times completely, but had no control over his body. The black ocean, at this depth the comforting pressurized blackness that drew itself about him, beckoned to his imprisoned mind. But even as his thoughts drifted to the wonderful idea of somehow being free from this--

“Hello, Stan.” He said, that same smile impeccably in place. “Come, join our circle.” Although it no longer was a circle, but a square, Stan joined.

He smiled, a sad, contented smile, and grasped Stan's hand. The skin felt loose, as though it were not properly attached to the bone... or, whatever actually lay beneath. One jerk would reveal it, whatever it was underneath.

But his hand did not jerk, and Stan's other hand reached over to grasp that of the person next to him –whose face sagged, would that fall off first?-- and a ripple shifted around the square. It looked familiar, too. Perhaps he had not remembered everything after all, he realized uneasily.

He closed his eyes, or really, his body closed them.

Time passed, worlds of it.

Stan was one of them, he stared at the light and whispered the names of the lost with them. The darkness around no longer existed.

As one body, they contented themselves with nothing and all at the same time. Then something changed. Stan's eyes snapped open.

Bits of flesh drifted about the water. They floated, weightless among the water's mass. The square of merfolk was falling apart. As Stan watched, a large chunk of skin parted from the arm of a mermaid so lovely only a moment before and revealed metal plating and wires underneath. They all had their frames bared in places, now.

At the center, the squid thing was flickering. Her light came in unsynchronized spurts, and every so often the entire area around was plunged into complete darkness. Then her voice reached him, as discordant as the light. “free—eeee....”

Suddenly, his body once more was his own to control, and he quickly turned to swim away, far away, and paying no heed to the flesh loosening from his bones,

(metal skeleton)

fled.

Or tried. A hand with no flesh, simply exposed circuitry, closed around his tail and ruthlessly dragged him back, even as the ground faded into a pit, which drew them in, together like the most sadly beautiful ending to a romance novel, the light flashing around. The sparks returned and as the merciful blackness closed around him, he heard the discordant voice sigh, “Again?” with the most depressing sort of desperate hopelessness.



“Hello, Stan,” she said, a mysterious smile playing on her face. “Come, Join our circle.” The rest of the circle turned to peer at him expectantly, the unity of their movements strangely disconcerting...

The light at the center almost seemed to quiver. From his position outside the ring of merfolk, he thought he heard the words, “No more...!” drift from it.

Then he pushed the thought aside and settled down onto the ground next to the one who had invited him, unaware of even moving.



 
 

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27 Oct 200545 Blade Marilyn
Spooky, I love it. If this was deviantArt, I'd fav it. :ahoy:

10 Kim Schoonover (FreeBSD/i386 [moose] [ttyv5]) replies: "Comment From The Endoplasmic Reticulating Spline: I'm not putting it on dA.But I'm glad you found it spooky, thats what I was intending for!"
28 Oct 2005:-) Megan 'Angler' Proverbs
Not quite sure what the purpose of the squid lady was, but damn, that was cool. Very intelligently written, too, with parts of the story repeating but with 'discrepancies', alerting the character and the readers that something odd is going on. Beautiful imagery, too, and a great spooky atmosphere. Robotic merfolk. Me likes a LOT. Now, where did that fav button go? Damn...

“Hello, Stan,” She said" -- lowercase 's' in 'she'

"one that he had seem before" -- seen

"And the this time" -- then (or take out 'the' altogether, would be better)

"who's face sagged" -- whose

"a larch chunk of skin parted" -- large

:-) Kim Schoonover (FreeBSD/i386 [moose] [ttyv5]) replies: "Comment From The Army Of Fanged Peas: I'm not entirely certain what the purpose of this story is, or even why I bothered to write it... exept that I needed a story to upload... so...
um...ummm....well....well, thanks for pointing out the grammatical errors/mistakes/typos. *nods*"
17 Nov 2005:-) Tasia MacKay
Wow, this was very, very creepy. I'm impressed! It's so creative. I'd like to know more about this story. For example, What the heck???????lol What's going on? Why are they doing that? Why are they made of metal and who made them? Sorry..I guess asking tons of questions kind of ruins the story. Nice work. I don't know the answer to those questions myself. But now that you've brought them up, I wish I did.
2 Jan 200645 Brian Rich
Hi there, Kim(an anonymous dead cat). I was in the mood for something weird, wild and wacky. Since you are currently my favorite writer of the weird, wild and wacky I thought I'd stop by for a read. This was creepy indeed. I got some good visual creepy out of this one so good job on being descriptive.

Squid Lady: 'You are now one with the collective. Resistance is futile'

Stan: 'Help! I want my mommy.'ELFWOOD MODS: Surrender your soul. We have ultimate power of your submissions.RAHAH: *flees* Whah!!! Save Me!STAN: *holding meat cleaver* MUAHAHAHAHAHA- *is eaten by the squid-lady*THE CAT: Just... Don't ask. *looks at Brian imploringly*
14 Feb 2006:-) Andrew Law
thats VERY spooky!! I LOVE IT!! lol. very trippy, i have no real idea of what happened of course, but that may be down to the fact that i sorta flicked through as opposed to actual reading...if i did that, how is it that i love it and find it spooky? *drifts around in a confused state* hmm....What exactly do you hope to gain from reading my crap?Uh, I mean...
*paranoid*I'm glad you like it. I'm confused as well, just for different reasons. *shrug*
18 Aug 200645 Deep Brown
It's like...

a fractal story. (Self similiar, I think, is the word?)
It seems to mess with dimensions. Almost, like, he goes into the centre, then gets teleported outside the circle again - except that the circle is, I guess, slightly dissimiliar.


I'd :+fav: it on dA, but I can't, dammitall.

45 Kim Schoonover (FreeBSD/i386 [moose] [ttyv5]) replies: "I honestly have not the foggiest idea what you're taking about, there... sorry. Hmm, well, I get too many favs there, anyway. But this story would have gotten three? Wow. "
1 Sep 200645 Deep Brown
It's inside itself.

Like those images that show themselves inside themselves inside themselves... (Continue ad infinitum)

comprends?

1 Kim Schoonover (FreeBSD/i386 [moose] [ttyv5]) replies: "...I really don't. ^^;"
3 Sep 2006:-) N. E. Thrower
lol in the whole spirit of the thing...FAVE!! lol ^_^ that would be four faves. yup i can count *nods*

this is really sppooky. it's like he is doomed to repeat this moment of his life until everything ends. he will enver escape it, it seems, not even when he knows that it's all wrong, that it's not right.

one thing...how the hell does a robotic merperson stop from going rusty!??! or getting electricuted? ...a mystery to be sure...

1 Kim Schoonover (FreeBSD/i386 [moose] [ttyv5]) replies: "OoO!!! Maybe they are rusty! All of them! Ever stop to cosider that? O_O?Er...But seriously, thank you for reading, and I'm glad you like it. "
6 Jan 2008:-) Karen-Birgitte "Ellemerr" Borud
I’m gonna have nightmares now... O.o
Sweet nightmares. I’ll try to bring some cats. Most of them like fish.

:-) Kim Schoonover (FreeBSD/i386 [moose] [ttyv5]) replies: "Giant, robotic kitties to eat the robotic merpeople, yes... *rubs hands together, plotting*"
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