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"The Sound from the Attic" by Steve Doyle

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The Sound from the Attic

It was not a dark and stormy night.  It was a balmy summer's eve. 
I was not in the antechamber of an ancient castle upon a hill overlooking a tiny village. 
I was in my little house in my quiet little neighborhood. 
The sound of a giggling child emanated from somewhere upstairs. 
Except that I had no children. 
I did not light a candle or grab a flashlight to investigate.  I turned on the lights.  Perhaps some child from the neighborhood had snuck into the house (doors were open at this time of year, after all) and crept up the stairs undetected. 

Up I went.  There were only four rooms and each was absolutely devoid of children.  Except that I could hear one.  The sound seemed to be coming from the attic above.  But the only access to the attic is through a door in the ceiling.  A door which could not be opened quietly.  A door which a child couldn't even reach.  Nevertheless, it sounded as if there was something up there, so I pulled down the door and unfolded the stairs. 

Up I went.  I couldn't see a thing.  I returned to the kitchen to retrieve a flashlight.  No electricity in the attic.  Back up the stairs into the attic.  I flashed the beam in all directions.  Light crept into every corner of the room.  There in the naked beam of light I saw—nothing.  Only a lot of dust and the empty boxes that I had tossed up there after moving in.  There was the box for the computer.  Another for the television.  Yet another for the microwave oven.  Nothing out of the ordinary.  Except for the doll. 

I was startled when the flashlight beam fell upon it.  I did not remember ever seeing it before.  I picked it up.  It was very old and very worn.  A soft-bodied doll with a plastic head.  It was filthy.  I brought it downstairs and put it out with the trash. 

That's when the real haunting began. 

That night I distinctly heard the sounds of a little girl crying.  I needn't tell you that it sounded like it was coming from the attic.  At two o'clock in the morning, having had enough, I retrieved the flashlight and went once again up into the attic, where I found—nothing.  But the sound of crying didn't stop.  When I had opened the door earlier in the evening the sound of giggling had ceased immediately and hadn't returned.  But now I could still hear the sobbing of a child.  I climbed down from the attic, closed the door and decided to wait until morning to figure out what to do. 

In the morning all was quiet.  No sobbing.  It had stopped sometime during the night.  I chalked it up to an over-active imagination and went off to work. 

I returned home to the sound of running water.  I raced upstairs to find the bathtub overflowing.  I certainly hadn't left the water running.  At least I didn't believe I had.  I shut it off and proceeded to clean up. 

The sound of a child sobbing woke me for a second night in a row.  This time I didn't get out of bed to investigate; I was sure I would find nothing. 

The next day I returned from work to find toothpaste all over the bathroom.  It was everywhere.  The entire tube had been squeezed out.  I knew for sure that I hadn't done that.  I decided to keep the bathroom door locked.  That night more sobbing. 

The day after that I returned to find the contents of my closet strewn about the bedroom floor.  My shirts, shoes and trousers were all over the room as if someone had simply thrown everything into the air.  I decided to lock that door as well.  I also locked the door to the spare bedroom.  I was not convinced that locked doors would keep this mischief at bay, but I figured it couldn't hurt. 

That night there came a horrendous banging.  Someone was pounding on all the doors I had closed including the one to the room I was in.  It sounded like a full-blown temper tantrum.  I leapt from the bed and yanked open the door to the hall.  This time I was able to see nothing.  The banging stopped.  As I stood there staring at the empty hallway, the sobbing began.  It sounded as if it were coming from the attic.  I went back to bed. 

In the morning I went to work.  I returned to find an unmistakable message.  On the wall of the living room, in red crayon, were scrawled the words, “I WANT MY DOLLY”.  Having never before been the victim of a haunting and becoming more and more convinced that this is exactly what I was, I decided to give the "ghost" what it wanted.  Or at least a substitute.  I went to a toy store and bought a brand new Barbie doll, complete with a couple of different little outfits.  I brought the doll home, removed it from the packaging and placed it upstairs in the attic.  That night there was no sobbing. 

When I returned from work the next day, I was shocked to find the head.  Barbie's head was in the middle of the hallway that leads to the dining room.  Not far away was a leg.  And the other leg.  The two arms were close by as well.  The torso was on the dining room table.  Apparently the child hadn't taken to the gift.  I knew not what to do. 

That night the sobbing returned.  But I also had a dream.  I dreamt of a child.  A little girl about five or six years old with blond hair and blue eyes.  Her arms held the doll, the one I had thrown away, but it didn't seem to be very old.  Her eyes held a terrible fear.  The door to the attic was open.  Suddenly the hand of an adult gripped the girl's shoulder.  Still clutching her doll, she was made to climb the stairs to the attic.  Tears streamed down her face.  The door was closed.  I woke up screaming. 

In the morning I had a new understanding of my ghost.  She had been made to sit alone in that dark and dusty place.  But she had her doll to hold on to.  You can't squeeze a Barbie doll.  I made another trip to the toy store.  This time I found what I was looking for.  Not a duplicate of the doll I had thrown away, but a much better substitute.  This one could be clutched in the dark and held close. 

I haven't heard any sobbing since.  Just a giggle now and then.  And that's just fine with me. 

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25 Nov 200345 D Joelle Duran
*blinks, rubs eyes, blinks again*
Prose? In Stephen G Doyle's Library?!

In all seriousness, this was very, very good. You've taken your love of ghost stories and woven an enjoyable, touching tale. I like how you splinter the cliches at the beginning. Your narrative voice is great, too. A sensible, down to earth sort of person that's not too close-minded to solve a problem.

Very enjoyable. I may just have to come back and read it a few more times...
27 Nov 2003:-) Miss Loraina Tubbs
OOOOOO!! sooo cool!!! I love your gost stories/poems.. yeah... anyhoo, you are so talented!!!!! try to expand your horizons more, you've obviously got the talent. I loved this one!!! and i'm shocked and honoured that you replied to my request so quickly. GREAT JOB!!! It was more of a short, chopy style, but it totally fit with the theme and everything. It was kinda like a poem but more detail and more in a story-line format, obviously, considering it WAS a short story. lol.... You might want to consider starting a longer story or writing more short stories in different styles. but of course, I have nothing to complain about!! just a suggestion that can easily be ignored. ANYHOO!!! loved the plot, the origional ideas as always, and the voice of your writing. YOU ARE SO FREAKIN TALENTED!!! keep up the good work. *spams*

~*~*~*~*~*Queen Kyrie of Spam*~*~*~*~*~
28 Nov 200345 Maisha 'Elenwyn' Foster-O'Neal
this is great! glad you tried something a little difference, and yet at the same time, it totally sounds like you. your writing has a very clear theme and voice, and that's great because it's just... you. i really liked the 'it was not a dark and stormy night' and all that at the beginning, so creative! this is great! i wish i had a little ghost around my house, but i live in a new house sooo... hey, do you have ghosts in your house? i've talked to a few ppl who say they do, it sounds pretty unique... almost lucky. well then. rock on and keep writing! you should write something with a really morbid ending. that would be cool. well, not cool, but you know what i mean. i hope. oh, and thanks so much for linking me in your bio!!!
Peace out,
~*Elenwyn*~
29 Nov 2003:-) 'Princess' Laura Hewett
Wow, it seems I'm a bit late. Causing me to want to demand to know when you update. But of course, I'm not that mean. So I'll just check back frequently. *cupcakes* of course. And well deserving. I luvered it! Very cute. Barbie never was good for much was she? hehe.
29 Nov 2003:-) Rachael Evans
Awwww, that's nice.
Now, I hope I don't offend you because this is my own personal taste and opinion, but I'm not sure that I like the improper use of grammar, mostly in the beginning. I know that you meant to do it, and that's just the style of this particular piece though.
I do like this story, really I do. I'm glad to see it here in your gallery and look forward to more. I too have a fondness for ghosts ^.^ Keep it up!
26 Dec 200345 Heather 'Istara' Sluys
:21hivers, laughs at self:: the part about the severed Barbie body parts actually kinda creeped me out . . .

:-) Steve Doyle replies: "Have you ever seen mutilated Barbie? It's not pretty."
26 Dec 2003:-) Ben Cameron
I'm glad I found another prose piece in your library and I was not disappointed. I like how you set the story up at the beginning to be a completely ordinary house, in an ordinary neighbourhood. My favourite bit would have to be the dream at the end. Despite only a few sentences, it carries with the child's great fear. Out of interest, how come he had never seen the doll before?

You still have another three stories before you have to start deleting - how about another three short stories?
17 Mar 2004:-) Inger Marie Hognestad
This was a totally sweet ghost story. Great use of cliche negation in the beginning, it set the atmosphere and you kept it throughout the story. Very well done methinks. Only thing I didn't quite take to is probably more of a formatting problem than anything else. To me it would have read more fluently if the negations were written in one paragraph rather than broken into several lines. I don't think it would have changed the atmosphere of the story, but if you worried about that I think it would have been better to split each set of negations in different paragraphs. But this is just me personal opinion and very ignorable 2 Thanks for a good read!
29 Jun 200445 Lindsey M. Butler
Poor little girl! This was excellent. I am so glad I ran across The Mysterious Case of Mr. Boots today because I have spent the morning thoroughly enjoying these ghost stories. This is wonderful!
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'The Sound from the Attic':
 • Created by: :-) Steve Doyle
 • Copyright: ©Steve Doyle. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Ghost, Haunting, Modern
 • Categories: Ghosts, Ghouls, Aparitions
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