Yet again, I couldn't resist using my Kristen story for a writing class, but I think this is strong and starts out a little different than the original draft. I like how it turned out so much that, I am putting it up. There is for the first time (shock) some interaction between Amolas and his mother, and I feel it is an interesting scene though it might need some strengthening and such. Any way sit back and enjoy. Let me know what you guys think.
YEAH! I finally have the next (I admit short) installment of Kristen! It literally has taken me forever to write this scene. The only version before this one I liked, I lost>...
The mystery girl just got more mysterious and we there are some new developments when it comes to Alex and his friends....
I decided to write more, and decided to add a second part so you find out more about what happens to Amolas. If you somehow ended up here before Kristen go back and read that first.
The plot is thickening once more! For some of you, you'll recognize this scene in an older version of the story. It seemed to fit better here and made a lot more sense to me at least. I think that we are starting to near the end of the beginning, but not quite there completely yet. Let me know what you think :)
This part follows straight after part 8. There is something going on, but Amolas can't quite figure it out and this mysterious girl remains just that, mysterious.
Finally! For all those who have patiently waited, here it is, the fourth part of the revised Kristen/You Can't Fly. Some of you may guess who will be at the door when Gwen opens it, for others it will be a surprise. But I figure that there is more of a set up for this scene than there was in the original version of the story. Certain occurances will make a lot more sense. So, I hope you enjoy, it took me forever to come up with a scene that I liked.
Fifth installment of my new version of Kristen. This is a rewriting of the hospitial scene. I think it makes more sense now then it did originally. I hope you guys enjoy:D
If you have read part 5, you should go back and reread it before you read part 6. I changed it up a little because I feel like these two parts flow much better than the old scene did. I hope that you enjoy this part and i hope to be updating on a more consistent basis.
This here is a little "vacation" time for Amolas. This may or may not be included in the final version of the story. I kind of liked how this turned out.
You will see that I have rearranged scenes from the old version of Kristen and added some new stuff as well. I hope that you enjoy! I rewrote this partly because of my fiction class.
Okay guys here's the next installment, sorry if I leave it at a bit of cliffhanger. I will try to get more up as soon as I can, I've just been dealing with a lot for the last month or so
This is the final installment in this little short story. It is a side story to the You Can't Fly story. I am considering incorporating it into the other story at some point, but it reveals some important details and I am sure some who have read much of my writings will make some connections *wink* *wink* When I first began writing You Can't Fly, the only connection I thought of was the name, but then slowly things began to take shape. Enjoy! Let me know what you think :)
This is the new version of Kristen. I wrote myself into a corner with the original version and I am hoping that you all will enjoy the new version of the story. Don't worry most of the characters will remain the same, some events may happen a little differenly but a lot will be retained.I really like how it turned out and you can tell that much has been improved upon, but the story is still told in the same original voice. I had a lot of fun rewriting this and I hope to continue to improve the story.
It's time for another installment of You Can't Fly! I hope you all enjoy! This part explains how Amolas escapes from the festival and there is a sweet moment between Amolas and Amy.
This is a tiny short story, it is from Amolas's mother's point of view. She knows more about a certain person's disappearence than she has ever let on. Again, this is someting that I hope to incorporate into the "You Can't Fly" story at some point :)
This is a part of the You Can't Fly story, but this isn't Amolas. This is someone else within Amolas's world. It is an important piece to the story:) Enjoy and let me know what you think!
It's a whole new scene! I thought that this would be a better way to introduce a certain character. Let me know if I could do anything to make it more realistic. In general, let me know if this scene works for you. I've played with this scene in my head for a while now, but I think I at least have something that I can work with when I go back to rewrite. I did have fun imagining the scene at least and I hope that you enjoy it.
This is part 2 of my Finally story. For some who have read other peices that I have written might see the connections that are presented here. These are interesting revelations and are a part of the You Can't Fly story, but this is not from the point of the view of Amolas, but someone else in Amolas's universe. I bet you can guess :)