This is the second chapter of my Battle school story. I've choosen not to switch characters around anymore, the ones you saw before are the ones you get now.
Sorry I haven't been posting stories in a while. This is Part 1 of another series I have been working on involving an AD&D character of mine and a custom race I fiddled with, the Desert Dwarves. Hope you all like it.
The start of a rather fantasy/western mix I tried, will eventualy get back to it.
Wow, what do you know? No horses, dogs, cats, or animals whatsoever except for a stupid little songbird that's far too happy that early in the morning. Eh, that's normal... 'Twenty years ago, life was normal. The world spun and people died when they were supposed to. Now, after your last breath, you get stuck on a five year or so waiting list. Why the delay? No one really knows, but that doesn't concern me. My only problem is staying alive for I drew my last breath long ago and haven't aged a day since. Everyone I met in the past has mysteriously disappeared and there are no traces of my existence outside of the military. Suits me just fine. Gives me time to drink a beer or two in peace. Too bad the military itself wants to know why.' - Lynn Laurens
No title... any comments or suggestions are greatly appreciated!
In the grand tradition of 'The Project' this was my entry for #7. Thanks for creating this Jim! Here is the link to Jim's shelf where he gives permission to use his 'seed' for the story (everthing before the first set of *****).
In memory of El Diablo... the most adorable li'l bunny that ever lived. And it means I.N M.E.M.O.R.Y O.F H.I.M. Not influenced by him... El Diablo is not a massive bunny with athletic skills, he's a half-demon mortal with kick-ass weapons. I just had this idea, and El Diablo the bunny had recently died, so I decided to name the character after him, and so the chara has white hair like the bunny had... and one eye like the bunny had... there the resemblances fade... So it is a normal story, stop asking me where the bunny influences come from! *chuckles darkly* please, read on.... And also for Laura, in light of her being up on elfwood. You can find her amazing art here
We delve into the hearts and minds of a group of misguided youths struggling to find out how they can return their home colony to a state of peace and contentment. And briefly into the heart and mind of their leader by circumstance, and his misguided treachery through the eyes of his unappreciated assistant.
This is the second part of a tale of magic, technology and loss
The final chapter of her life. Will Sapphire ever be happy? Will she become her normal feline breed? Or is this the end for her?
Several hundred years in the future, on one of humanities colonies, a automated drone is suddenly destroyed. Sergeant Major Luca Thompson is ordered to go find out went wrong. what he finds isn't waht anyone expected.....
We meet Zaal, heir to the agross Armada. He has a nasty disposition towards humanity as well as his father.
Cobar leaves his hovel in the desert to search for meat, but finds something he did not expect.
When a human-versus-alien story gets turned around, alliances will be shattered, planets will be broken...
The loss of a dear loved one can be a terrible pain to endure. And it can drive a man to do painful, man, and irrational things as they try to cope with the loss. And when you offer him a chance to reverse it, he'll take it, no matter how unlikely or suspicious it may seem.The original version of this story was the best of '05 for me. As such, because it's an important story to me, it was one of the first I've done in this abysmally slow mass revision process. I don't know how all of you reading the story will react to it, but it was pretty difficult for me to write. Reason being, I've grown to know the characters involved rather well, so I know very well what they're going through here. But, unless you want spoilers before you've read, stop here. Even if you read the old Dark Deceptions, stop here and go read before you continue. SPOILER ALERT! ALL THE TEXT BELOW CONTAINS SUPER MEGA MASSIVE SPOILERS! READ THE STORY FIRST! YOU'VE BEEN WARNED!Originally when I wrote this, it was just an excuse for a cool fight scene. Nothing more. Daniel was made up pretty much on the spot and Trenix was a very rough idea (and, to this day, still freaking lacks a reason for his actions). So, in other words, Daniel was just that guy who happens to be the main character's friend and turns evil, because, you know, that's what all the cool kids do. Hence, the whole plot, what little there was of it, was just a set up for a sword fight between them.However, since then, Daniel and Isaac have gone on to develop their characters far more. And, more importantly, their friendship. They've known each other since they were kids and could basically be considered to be BFFs. As soldiers, when you think of all they've gone through together training and fighting, Daniel suddenly turning on Isaac is a good deal more shocking. His mind twisted and corrupted by the magic of the altar, he attacks his horrified friend. I wanted to capture that emotion. The pain, the horror, the sorrow, the regret... At the very least, I did good enough that it came out very poignant for me, though for those who are not intimately familiar with Isaac and Daniel, I'm not sure if it hits them like that. And, in just a short story, it may not be possible to convey that those feelings as I feel them.I also made some other changes to the story. Trenix, rather than playing Emperor Palpatine from Star Wars Episode 3 in corrupting Daniel, acts far more subtle. Though not explicitly stated in the story, he places the magc in the altar, he appears to Daniel to spread the false myth, and then finally appears as the shade. I wanted him to appear again, but more on that in a bit. I also set the fight in the temple rather than have Daniel take out a military base. Reason being, one man taking on a brigade or more of soldiers and winning is just ridiculous. In the original story, the base was not a proper base, but more like a military hut considering it had maybe 20 soldiers, and such a thing would have zero influence over an area. Hence, for the same of logic, they now have a real-sized base. One other, major change is I show Erica's death. The old revision, I merely implied it.And the ending. Originally, I wanted Isaac to be giving a speech at Daniel's funeral, making up a story of him witnessing Daniel heroically covering Erica with his own in the shelling to protect her, but neither of them surviving. That way, Daniel wouldn't be regarded as a traitor, but would have honors. Only Isaac would suffer with the knowledge of what happened. Meanwhile, Daniel would still be alive, screaming in rage, with Trenix watching, thinking that while the original intent didn't work, things still ended in his favor. Why did I not include this? Simple: I liked the way it currently ends. It's a painful, sad ending; appropriate for the emotional charge I attempted to capture. As such, while I lose out on including a few other things to show that would have tied up a couple of loose ends, I think what I gain by stopping there works out.So, as always, comments and criticism is always welcome! While I feel the story is good, I don't think it's as great as it could be, so your opinions on that are appreciated!