This is about what all of us feel (I think) at some point in our lives. When we look around our world, we can't help but wonder why our world is the way it is.
Nora Stel read my first try at Connor and Binjii, and made an excellent point that they really are not realistic pirates, so I gave them another go, I think this one is better.
Don't expect this to make much sense; it just kind of splurged out in one sitting.
And so it begins, the story of a land called 'Salubre'.
Concludes the events of the siege of Gaderlock.
Rangi and Rewi are tawaki - a species of penguin, living peacefully in their village on the shores of a fiord. However, they are about to face tragedy - at the hands of malicious mammalian invaders. A sort of anthropomorphised look at the impact of introduced species on an established ecosystem. Written initially for a magazine, and thus one of my few genuinely short stories.
'The room’s design was a work of dark genius, put together by a man who had spent many long years studying the subtle arts of persuasion, manipulation and coercion. The great hall had been the culmination of all Vasper’s art and skill and served its intended purpose ruthlessly and efficiently.'
' “What was it you said before? That I should bow to my master? It is long since time that you were educated about the true gravity of the position you now find yourself in.” Vasper said, half whispering and half hissing in Bey’s ear. “I will show you who the real master is.” '
This is a story that I'm writing for my 10 year old nephew Justin. See what happens in Chapter 4!
This is a story that I'm writing for my 10 year old nephew Justin.
This is how I think that a god or goddes might feel after a war or battle or something. Again I remind you that my poetry seldom has rhythm or rhyme and that I'm happy with it the way that it is!
Several hundred years in the future, on one of humanities colonies, a automated drone is suddenly destroyed. Sergeant Major Luca Thompson is ordered to go find out went wrong. what he finds isn't waht anyone expected.....
We meet Zaal, heir to the agross Armada. He has a nasty disposition towards humanity as well as his father.
Cobar leaves his hovel in the desert to search for meat, but finds something he did not expect.
When a human-versus-alien story gets turned around, alliances will be shattered, planets will be broken...
The loss of a dear loved one can be a terrible pain to endure. And it can drive a man to do painful, man, and irrational things as they try to cope with the loss. And when you offer him a chance to reverse it, he'll take it, no matter how unlikely or suspicious it may seem.The original version of this story was the best of '05 for me. As such, because it's an important story to me, it was one of the first I've done in this abysmally slow mass revision process. I don't know how all of you reading the story will react to it, but it was pretty difficult for me to write. Reason being, I've grown to know the characters involved rather well, so I know very well what they're going through here. But, unless you want spoilers before you've read, stop here. Even if you read the old Dark Deceptions, stop here and go read before you continue. SPOILER ALERT! ALL THE TEXT BELOW CONTAINS SUPER MEGA MASSIVE SPOILERS! READ THE STORY FIRST! YOU'VE BEEN WARNED!Originally when I wrote this, it was just an excuse for a cool fight scene. Nothing more. Daniel was made up pretty much on the spot and Trenix was a very rough idea (and, to this day, still freaking lacks a reason for his actions). So, in other words, Daniel was just that guy who happens to be the main character's friend and turns evil, because, you know, that's what all the cool kids do. Hence, the whole plot, what little there was of it, was just a set up for a sword fight between them.However, since then, Daniel and Isaac have gone on to develop their characters far more. And, more importantly, their friendship. They've known each other since they were kids and could basically be considered to be BFFs. As soldiers, when you think of all they've gone through together training and fighting, Daniel suddenly turning on Isaac is a good deal more shocking. His mind twisted and corrupted by the magic of the altar, he attacks his horrified friend. I wanted to capture that emotion. The pain, the horror, the sorrow, the regret... At the very least, I did good enough that it came out very poignant for me, though for those who are not intimately familiar with Isaac and Daniel, I'm not sure if it hits them like that. And, in just a short story, it may not be possible to convey that those feelings as I feel them.I also made some other changes to the story. Trenix, rather than playing Emperor Palpatine from Star Wars Episode 3 in corrupting Daniel, acts far more subtle. Though not explicitly stated in the story, he places the magc in the altar, he appears to Daniel to spread the false myth, and then finally appears as the shade. I wanted him to appear again, but more on that in a bit. I also set the fight in the temple rather than have Daniel take out a military base. Reason being, one man taking on a brigade or more of soldiers and winning is just ridiculous. In the original story, the base was not a proper base, but more like a military hut considering it had maybe 20 soldiers, and such a thing would have zero influence over an area. Hence, for the same of logic, they now have a real-sized base. One other, major change is I show Erica's death. The old revision, I merely implied it.And the ending. Originally, I wanted Isaac to be giving a speech at Daniel's funeral, making up a story of him witnessing Daniel heroically covering Erica with his own in the shelling to protect her, but neither of them surviving. That way, Daniel wouldn't be regarded as a traitor, but would have honors. Only Isaac would suffer with the knowledge of what happened. Meanwhile, Daniel would still be alive, screaming in rage, with Trenix watching, thinking that while the original intent didn't work, things still ended in his favor. Why did I not include this? Simple: I liked the way it currently ends. It's a painful, sad ending; appropriate for the emotional charge I attempted to capture. As such, while I lose out on including a few other things to show that would have tied up a couple of loose ends, I think what I gain by stopping there works out.So, as always, comments and criticism is always welcome! While I feel the story is good, I don't think it's as great as it could be, so your opinions on that are appreciated!
This is the second of five short stories I had to write for my Creative Writing Workshop class. Our teacher asked us to try something we normally don't use, like a different perspective, voice, etc. I never use the first person except when writing about myself, so that was my different thing. And let me tell you, first person voice is weird. I don't feel like I'm writing the story, but what someone else tells me, word for word. And I kept catching myself using third person while writing this, so I'd have to go back and rewrite segments. So, I think I'll stick with third, much easier and more versatile for me. I don't know how I feel about this story (or STILL how anyone else does, for that matter). I am very unfamiliar with first person, since coincidentally, almost everything I read is in third person, and I don't do that purposefully. So, I can't figure out how to compare it to my other stories. I guess I'll just let readers tell me how it stacks up. Update: 5/6/07 It turned out to be required to revise every we wrote piece in my writing class. So, I had to make some changes here. This one sees mostly corrections, clarifications, and some slight rewordings, nothing major.
Ok this is a story I wrote for Lynn using her species she writes about in her stories. She gave me permission and we sometimes colaberate on stories together. This is a story is about Romance gone A Gley. Things Aliens have to deal with when it come to love lifes.