This is part of a much longer story that I'm currently writting and I would be very intressted to hear what people make of this part of it. I'm not going to post all of it as there is a possibility that I will publish it if it turns out to be good.
I don't think this story is perfect and I still need to do some more work to some of the chapters but here is chapters 1-4 of one of my novels and I would love to know what people thought of it so far.
This was written for the Icefire compertition in 'Young Writer'. It didn't win but I kinda liked the story so I thought I would post it up here and see what other people thought.