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"The Rock and the Tree" by Brian Buckley

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Another fantasy poem. Actually, I kind of like this one...
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The Rock and the Tree

A pinnacle of jutting rock
Extends above the sea
The waves around it crash and swell
And on it stands a tree.
The roots of it are fast and deep
The branches wide have grown
And barren there they overlook
The gray and weathered stone.

The ocean to the north is red
And quiet now, serene
No whisper of the soldiers lost
In glory for their queen.
She sits upon a gilded throne
Her palace on a hill
And though her lands are far and wide
She bids them wider still.

Her words are ships, her ships are men
Her men are swords and knives
Who gladly swap their bravery
For other people's lives.
They've brought her back a victory
Atop a golden tray
And all across the countryside
They celebrate today.

And so it goes - the ships are sent
Again, again, again
And glory rides along behind
The generals who win.
The earth is hers, the sea is hers,
The grass, the lakes, the sky
But one day even she will fade -
And old and weak, will die.

Her bones, with years, will pass to dust -
Will scatter on the sand
And wars will slowly rip apart
Her war-united land.
But to the south, a weathered rock
Will touch the salty air
And on its peak, above the foam
The tree will still be there.

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29 May 2008:-) Karolien V Burms
I love poems and stories like this one. I mean your actions affect other peoples lives now and for a few future generations. but in the end end and for the world it means nothing. the world goes on even without you
17 Jul 200845 Haunting
I liked it, very haunting....
1 Dec 200845 Anon.
Wow. I bow to you! amazing! Have you got any encourageing advice to those of us out here in awe wondering hoe you did it?1
20 May 2010:-) Michael a Gra King
Beautiful. To think, no matter what we do as humans. or how we do it, all of it it will not matter. Since the trees and the moutnains and the seas will still be here.
15 Jun 201045 Anon.
Some day, you’ll be real famous. I’m quite sure. :]
29 Sep 201045 Kat
i love the end, it gives a sense of lasting wonder 2
30 Sep 2010:-) Jocelyn Nicole Clark
this is incredible!
30 Sep 2010:-) Mona Marie Germain
I love the flow and theme of this poem. it has a philosophical quality to it as well. The concept of the tree and rock that last in acceptance as opposed to conflict is appealing. My favourite is the first verse. The style and voice suit the theme.

One thing I notice is that you used "And" as a beginning line quite often. I was taught recently that is is not so good in poetry to use and so much.

Well concieved and enjoyable poetry. Thanks for sharing your gift. Eyestar
8 Jun 201145 Anon.
Good!!! Except
’And so it goes - the ships are sent
Again, again, again
And glory rides along behind
The generals who win.’

I don’t think again and win rhyme very well...
2 Dec 2011:-) Rebecka Jean OMalley
I know I am a little bit behind on commenting on this (I only became a member yesterday, so this was my first opportunity), but this poem is absolutely beautiful, and could very well be the best poem I have ever read. I could only dream of writing a piece this well written!
The overall concept reminds me a little bit of one of my favourite songs, called ’Dust in the Wind’.
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'The Rock and the Tree':
 • Created by: :-) Brian Buckley
 • Copyright: ©Brian Buckley. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Death, Life, Queen, Rock, Tree, War
 • Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins
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