|29 May 2008|| Karolien V Burms|
I love poems and stories like this one. I mean your actions affect other peoples lives now and for a few future generations. but in the end end and for the world it means nothing. the world goes on even without you
|17 Jul 2008|| Haunting|
I liked it, very haunting....
|1 Dec 2008|| Anon.|
Wow. I bow to you! amazing! Have you got any encourageing advice to those of us out here in awe wondering hoe you did it?
|20 May 2010|| Michael a Gra King|
Beautiful. To think, no matter what we do as humans. or how we do it, all of it it will not matter. Since the trees and the moutnains and the seas will still be here.
|15 Jun 2010|| Anon.|
Some day, you’ll be real famous. I’m quite sure. :]
|29 Sep 2010|| Kat|
i love the end, it gives a sense of lasting wonder
|30 Sep 2010|| Mona Marie Germain|
I love the flow and theme of this poem. it has a philosophical quality to it as well. The concept of the tree and rock that last in acceptance as opposed to conflict is appealing. My favourite is the first verse. The style and voice suit the theme.
One thing I notice is that you used "And" as a beginning line quite often. I was taught recently that is is not so good in poetry to use and so much.
Well concieved and enjoyable poetry. Thanks for sharing your gift. Eyestar
|8 Jun 2011|| Anon.|
’And so it goes - the ships are sent
Again, again, again
And glory rides along behind
The generals who win.’
I don’t think again and win rhyme very well...
|2 Dec 2011|| Rebecka Jean OMalley|
I know I am a little bit behind on commenting on this (I only became a member yesterday, so this was my first opportunity), but this poem is absolutely beautiful, and could very well be the best poem I have ever read. I could only dream of writing a piece this well written!
The overall concept reminds me a little bit of one of my favourite songs, called ’Dust in the Wind’.