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Alura Raetz

"Heart of Destiny" by Alura Raetz

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A peasant, a prince, a hermit, and a hunter are all torn form their normal daily lives, and thrust into an adventure filled with lies, broken trust, an evil king, demons, and a wizard or two. The story's not finished yet, but I hope to load the rest of the chapters soon, and if I get enough feedback, I may even finish the thing. Oh, and I'd like to give credit to my friend, Mir, who helped greatly with the story characters, and ideas. Love ya, Mir.
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←- DT~CH2 | Heart of Destiny Chapter 2 -→
Chapter 1
    She raised her head and wiped the sweat off her brow. She was exhausted from the work but it had to be done before the rains came, or else there would not be enough food for the winter. She hated farming, but that's the family she was born into, and there was nothing she could do to change that.
    The evening was setting in and the heat was diminishing, that was a good thing. It meant that the work was almost over for the day. She sighed and looked back down to the field. This was the most boring part. She hated farming.
    Suddenly, she felt the need to look up. What was she looking for? Anything in particular? A star caught her eye. It wasn't that it was the only one in the sky, it was that it was flickering in an unnatural way. It flickered again, and moved, like a shooting star and out of sight, over the mountains.
    What the...
    "Loraina!" She looked to the house to see an older woman standing in the doorway. "Loraina, come inside. It's time to come in!"
   Finally! "Coming mother!" She stood up, brushed the dirt off of her pants and headed towards the house. She was nearly 19, and still unmarried, unusual for the time. It wasn't that she was ugly, in fact, many thought she was rather pretty, with mid-back length golden brown hair, and deep blue eyes. It wasn't even that she was poor, and wore rags. It was only because since her father left, she had been forced to take up man's work to save the family. It was a disgrace, but it was better than losing her home.
    She walked inside and took off her cloak, which was soiled in dirt, and hung it on a nearby coat rack. "Is dinner ready, mother?"
    She shook her head. "No, Lori, we have no dinner tonight. I'm sorry.
    "Oh." She lowered her head and prepared herself for a night without dinner. It happened a lot, but they survived. She walked to the cabinet and removed a stale piece of bread and a glass. She filled the glass with water, and headed to her little brother Timmy's room.
    "Timmy?" She said, walking into the room. Inside was her brother. He had short, scraggly dark brown hair, and bright green eyes. He looked more like their father than Lori did, she noticed every time she saw him. The little boy was playing with his wooden train given to him by their father before he left. "Are you hungry?"
    He looked up at her and smiled. "Hi Lori!" He said. "We get dinner today?"
    She shook her head. "Sorry. But you have to eat. Here." She handed him the bread and water.
    "But, don't you have to eat?" He asked innocently.
    "You need it more. I'll be fine. I get paid tomorrow, and I'll eat then." She smiled at him and he smiled back, taking a bite of bread.
    "Yes, Timmy?"
    "Are you a freak?"
    She was taken aback by that question, but realized he was just a boy and calmed. "Who said that?"
    "The kids at the city. They say that because you're not married and do man's work that you're a freak. Is that bad?"
    "Timmy," She sat down next to him, "I'm the only one who can work now that dad's gone, and because I work, most guys think that I'm a freak, so that's why I'm not married. But just because kids say things doesn't mean it's true."
    "Oh, okay."
    She smiled. He was young, and open-minded. Once he was old enough, he would take over caring for the family. But for now, he was just a boy, and needed food and sleep. "Okay Timmy. After you eat, it's bedtime."
    She turned and left, closing the door after her. She then leaned back on the door and let out a deep breath. Working was not fun! She had to go to work tomorrow, and get paid less than minimum wage, but it was better then nothing.
    "Loraina, are you okay?"
    Lori looked up. "Yes mother, just tired."
    "Get some sleep. We'll get to eat tomorrow."
    Lori smiled. "Goodnight mother." She kissed her mother on the cheek and headed to her room. She walked to her bed and collapsed. "This is going to be an odd week, I can already tell..." she mumbled and looked out the window at the stars. They were all out now, but the one she had seen before was not to be seen.
    With one last sigh, she turned out the light and fell asleep.

    "Where is that girl?" A bulky man paced the floor periodically glancing out the glass door and stroking his bushy mustache. "She should have been here ten minutes ago." He pulled a book from the many shelves and flipped through it, just as a young woman burst into the store. She had light brown hair, and deep green-blue eyes.
    She looked up at the man. "I'm so sorry Mr. Baxter! I would have been on time, but Timmy broke the bowl and I had to clean it up and-" She was cut off by the sharp glare Mr. Baxter had given her. She lowered her head and was quiet.
    "Lori, I know you're family needs money and that's why you, a girl, is working here, and I allow it, but you can't be late all the time."
    "I know, and I'm sorry. Once Timmy is old enough, you won't have to put up with me anymore, so just bare with me I-" She was cut off again by his gesture.
    "Lori, you are the best employee I've ever had, and you have a way with books and people. If you had been a man..."
    "If I had been a man, I wouldn't be in this mess."
    He gave her a look. "Lori, I can't open the shop until you get here, and when you're late, it's bad for business. I won't reprimand you this time, but don't be late on Monday."
    She nodded. "Yes sir."
    "Good, now get to work. It's gonna be a long day..."
    Loraina nodded and immediately got to work. After she had sorted and shelved all of the new books, she searched for one she hadn't read yet and opened it. Customers didn't usually come for hours and in that time, she read. That too, was unusual for a woman to do, but who was there to stop her? Not Mr. Baxter, surly, he was a nice man, and open-minded. He was the only one who would hire her, and for that she was grateful.
    She sat down in a chair in the back of the store and opened the book. She read for hours about a young princess meeting a young knight and falling in love, saving her from her evil stepmother, and living happily ever after.
    Lori's head snapped up and looked directly at Mr. Baxter. "Oh, uh, Hi."
    "Lori, we have a customer. Show him what he needs."
    "Yes sir." She put down the book and stood up. The man who came in was a tall man with dark reddish brown hair and a short beard. He looked like one of those mystical wizard types she had read about in books. "Hello, may I help you find a book?"
    The man smiled and his eyes seemed to twinkle. "Yes, I'd like to buy a book called 'Myths and Legends.' Do you happen to have it?"
    She nodded. "Yes, we do." She moved swiftly through the bookcases to the one she needed. The man was right behind her. "You'll like the book," she said, "I've read it many times."
    He looked at her with a smile as she reached up for the book. "You, a woman, reading and working? How... unusual."
    Lori frowned. "Father left, I have to work." She said bluntly. He must not have been around here, or else he would have known about her predicament.
    "I know. I'm sorry. I did not know it would offend you." He smiled a warm smile. "Now... the book?"
    "Oh, right..." She reached for the book again.
    "Things will change for your family. Don't worry. You have a bigger destiny."
    Lori took the book from its shelf and turned around. "Here's your..." She looked around, but the man was not there. "...book." She finished.
    She walked to the entrance of the store to where Mr. Baxter was reading the morning paper. "Hey, did that man leave the store?"
    He looked up. "What man?"
    "The man who you showed in."
    He looked at her strangely. "Lori, no customers have come in today, you know that." He glanced at the book she was holding. "Maybe you have been reading too much fantasy, eh?"
    She looked at the book, and then Mr. Baxter. "Yeah," she mumbled, "maybe..." With that, she walked off to the back of the store and began to flip through the book she had gotten. She had read it before, but maybe there was something she had overlooked. She flipped through pages of demons, fairies, goblins, angels, elves, and the like, until she came to a page that caught her eye.
    It had a tall red man with dark black bat wings and a tail. "Be'lah," she read out loud, "a demon that feeds on the negative emotions of others. If he gains enough power, he has been known to demolish entire cities, then move on to gain more power. Rarely seen in the daylight, he has been known to posses unsuspecting mortals and using their negative emotions to bend them to his will."
    Loraina shivered. He didn't sound like any monster she'd ever like to meet. Ever. But it was just a myth. It wasn't real... right?
    She shut the book and set it down. What was with that man, and why the book? There was something odd about things recently. And what was with that shooting star? She wanted some answers and she wanted them now.

    "Mom, I'm home."
    She set her coat on the rack once more as her mother greeted her. "Lori! I have great news!" She said happily.
    "What might that be?" Lori asked, curiously.
    Her mother smiled and pulled her into the living room. "A kind man came to the house, and agreed to pay the rent for us, and whatever else we might need."
    Lori blinked. "A kind man? Who would do such a kind thing for us?"
    "I would."
    The voice came from behind her mother. As Lori peeked into the room, she gasped in surprise. The man was the same as she had met before, in the bookstore. The same hair, face, and the same twinkling eyes. "What are you doing here?"
    The man shrugged as her mother immediately got defensive. "Lori! This man is doing us a kind favor. Do not be rude!"
    The man raised a calm hand between the two and calmed the argument. "Forgive your daughter and me." He said, "We met earlier, in a bookstore. I left her rudely, and she is obviously angry." Her mother nodded as he turned to Lori. "And forgive me as well. I left very rudely, and I apologize. I had some important business to take care of."
    Lori was hesitant, but nodded as well. "All right. I forgive you." And she paused for a moment, remembering why he was here. "What's the catch?"
    "What?" He and her mother both chorused.
    She explained. "The money, for the house. There has to be a catch. There always is."
    "Lori!" Her mother snapped, but the man hushed her.
    "No, it's all right." He said, "It's true. There is a catch."     "Ha! I knew it!" Lori gloated.
    Her mother slowly turned to the strange man. "Well... what is the catch, sir?"
    The man smiled, and once again, his eyes twinkled. "Only, that Lori go to the city tomorrow."
    "Th-that's it?" Her mother asked, as if not believing it.
    "But tomorrow's a Sunday." Lori piped in. "I don't work on Sunday. Nobody does."
    The man nodded. "Yes. While that is true, I wish for you to meet someone. He will be there. Sunday, or not. Only then will you get your money, I promise."
    "Someone? Who?" She questioned.
    "You will find out." He smiled. "Have no worries, dear, you will be safe. No real harm will come to you on this journey. Quite the opposite, in fact." He headed to the door, and turned. "Remember." And, with a wink, he was gone, leaving Lori quite confused.

←- DT~CH2 | Heart of Destiny Chapter 2 -→

7 Apr 200145 Mir
I love how this is writtin. I can hardly wait to see what happenss with Mirik and Raule. (oh, wait, thats in the future, isnt it? dang me and my Knowlage wizardliness) You go for it! and by the way, thanks for mentioning me. Love ya!Hiya Mir! Thanks for commenting! You're so special! Awww... LOL. See ya later!
7 Apr 200145 Terry the Tigger
This story was GRRRRRRRRRATE!!!!!! (I am off to read the next chapter!)*Rubs forhead* Terry, you numbskull... lol. (I can say that, he's my brother. heh heh heh...)
12 Apr 200145 Jennifer R. DeFord
Indeed it was an interesting beginning; the book-idea was especially interesting. I think your scene changes are a bit abrupt, but I will definitely go read more.The abrupt scene changes are suppose to add to the mystery, I guess (Yes, this is just an excuse, I don't know what I'm talking about, but it sounded good, didn't it?) I'm glad you like it!
21 Apr 200145 Grog
Good beginning. Nice and tight, but a bit more color and descriptions of the characters, please. Hopefully the questions will be answered somewhere in another chapter. Yes, they will be. BWAHAHAHA!!
7 May 2001:-) Krystal Chunaco
Hey this is a great start! *claps* You've got it rolling. *is off to read the next chapter*Goodie! Glad you like it! More to come!
22 Oct 200145 Cassie Duncan!
Tee, hee, hee! You had spelling errors! Well, I liked it, and so did alot of other people (obviously), so it must be good! I'm going to read the next part now. Bye!Ack! *Takes a sledge hammer to a small imp-looking creature* Must destroy all typo demons! *Looks around nervously.* Where did they go? *Wanders off looking for more demons to smash...*
20 Dec 2001:-) Cassandra Lee Duncan
They're called Gramlins.

Ha! lookl atthat! they strike again! Gremlins.
I ran out of things to say on the last comment I gave on your last story...
Well, anyway, now you can come and make comments on mine!

And anyone lese who reads this!

Ahem! 'else'

Kicks the litlle demons. Doesn;t work!

:-) Alura Raetz replies: "Typo demons... la la la. Evil little creatueres, arent they? Grrrr....."
3 Jan 2002:-) Cassandra Lee Duncan

I'm looking at everything now, and I will have 3 comments up on all your stuff. I'm getting almost as bad as Celesta aren't I?

Tee, hee, hee, I laugh at thee!

:-) Alura Raetz replies: "Errrrr....."
5 Jan 200245 Wolffe
AAAaaaahhhhhhh *titters around on the edge of the chair* aaahhhhhh *runs around in anticipation* whats she gonna do? who's she gonna meet? where's she gonna go?? aye, I like! I like! *scampers off to read the rest...*

*catches and eats a daemon* urp well good thing you dont have any little animals running round... i can do just fine eating these lnasty little buggers *scampers off after another*
("its a bird! its a plane! its the demon devouring wolf!")

:-) Alura Raetz replies: "*Grin* I like you. You're silly.... ^^"
14 Mar 2002:-) N. L. Williams
Okay, you have me interested now. Off to the next chapter!*steps on a few demons as he walks out* Awww man! It'll take forever to get that off my shoes!*grumbles*

:-) Alura Raetz replies: "I think we've gotten rid of most of the demons. THe pest problem should be over with by the time you return... *Eyes a small demon running past her* Then again... these things are like cockaroaches... you just can't kill 'em! And they keep coming back!"
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'Heart of Destiny':
 • Created by: :-) Alura Raetz
 • Copyright: ©Alura Raetz. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Peasant, Prince, Wizard
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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