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"The First Butterfly*" by Amber Silver

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I am actually really proud of how this poem turned out. This is my second attempt at a poem in three days, after a two year hiatus! I tried to write a story of the exact same nature as this poem, but failing a completion, turned to poetry instead. This happened after I was inspired by Laura Hewett's poem, The Legend of the Fae. LOL, I hope you enjoy!!!

Posted: October 9th, 2003

Updated: October 18th (Thanks everyone!)

Moderator's Choice: October 15th, 03

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←- Selona | The Wizard and the Raven* -→
Once a very long time ago
occurred a tale of terrible woe
when a reclusive demon decided that
the wondrous animals who upon earth sat
were far more lovely than he.
So a plan the demon devised, to see
if he could some how rid the world of
the beautiful creatures from the soil above.
The bitter demon began his endeavor,
guised as a woman.  He felt his plan clever.
From beneath the soil the demon came
to begin his cruel and wicked game.
First to the Unicorn the demon went
for the unicorn's pride was unrepent.
Then a foul question the demon asked,
an evil test that she could not pass.
The demon then cursed that unicorn,
a cruel spell that banished her alicorn.
What a terrible shame, a paradox sublime:
for that unicorn became the first equine.
Then the demon traveled about the land
changing fantasy to reality with a wave of his hand.
When through the whole world he had traveled
and most of the earth's magic he had unraveled,
he came at last to a dainty fae,
whose kind he despised in terrible way.
When he laid his eyes upon her pretty face
he asked no questions, he just destroyed her race.
Then he began to laugh in relentess mirth,
for now he was free to rule o'er the earth.
But at that moment the demon got a fright,
when appeared a Goddess to make wrongs right.
With a contemptuous curse she sent him to hell,
but his magic was permanent, so she wove her own spell.
Though the others of magic couldn't be helped that day
she swore that history would remember the Fae.
The Goddess called her magic, and shed a tear from her eye
and then the Fae was reborn as the world's first butterfly.
←- Selona | The Wizard and the Raven* -→

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23 Dec 200345 Wingwen(Foam maiden in Elven)
I way dig this. Me and my friend got turned on to you when we found your story Sanity's Whisper. You are one cool cat with alot of this and alot of that, so come on down and do the boogie woogie cheer! Sorry. ADHD. You know how it is. Well, I am pleased that you enjoyed my stories. It always gives me a thrill of pleasure when someone gets enjoyment from my stuff. 2
29 Dec 200345 Megs L Lune
That was really beautiful and also tear jerking at the same time...poor animals.

It was interesting how the faerie became the butterfly, the whole poem creates such an image in my head...something I have great difficulty in accomplishing through my poems and story.

Currently I am on your tour and I must say, give yourself a pat on the back for a job very well done! I really am enjoying all the poems so far...only two more to go...darn!

Maybe you could add some more sometime, I would really enjoy it!

Great job on both tour and poem! Thank-you very much, Megs! 2
14 Jan 200445 Self Destructing Ham Gurl... in 5.. 4..3..2...
Woweeeee, this ib wod of my favorites ub your poems I hab read so far, (Sorry stuffy nose, I am or was sick, aaahhh germs!! I am getting better now though) Any who I luv the way you rymed in this poem, I think this one had the best rymes of your peoms I have read. Thank-you very much for your comments. I had a terrible cold several days ago as well. Thank goodness its gone! 10
24 Feb 2004:-) Guillermo 'Gwydionn' García
Lovely. I just love the tale and the final line. great job! I tried to write a story about this, but it was difficult in coming. Then, one day in astronomy, the poem hit me so hard it took my breath away and it just... flowed out of my pen like silk. It was really something.
15 Mar 2004:-) Robyn Petrik
Jeepers, that's incredible! *tips her hat* Amazing how you were able to have all the couplets rhyme over that length of a poem. I loved the story, and grieved over the loss of the unicorn and all else...but very creative what you've done here! My absolute favorite line is, 'What a terrible shame, a parabox sublime/ for that Unicorn became the first equine'. I'm glad you liked it! 2
13 Apr 200445 Deb Smith
Adorable, Amber! Truly a beautiful little piece. Your imagery is fabulous, as usual... No surprise there! (smile) But I am enthralled by your use of the technicolor words and images that draw the reader into the world of your creation! Well done, AGAIN... and do not EVER neglect this fantastic gift..... I regret to say that I have been terribly neglecting my muse. I must get back into the art... ASAP. Thanks for your kind words, Deb. I'm running out of ways to adequtely express my appreciation.
15 Jun 2004:-) Christa Nopp
Oh - another poem that actually got a mod's choice. There do not seem to be that many around.
A very lovely story, although the font is a little hard to read ... or is that just my resolution? *squints* I am not sure why you found it difficult to read. Hmm... it could be a problem with your screen? Anyway thanks for writing.
16 Aug 2004:-) Alice Muffin Girl Smith
Oh... that's so sweet. You weave a good tale, even in poetry form. ^_^

(Forgive the short comment... I can't think of any crits on this, and I couldn't find any grammatical stuff... and poems are even harder to comment on than pictures, in my little world... *sniffle* I liked it, I've just been struck poem-dumb...) *Gasp* Could it be? I've left the Muffin Girl without anything to critique? I'VE DONE IT! FINALLY! Mua, Ha! Ha! Ha! 12 Thanks for the comment, dear.
5 May 200545 Shadow_crash
Did you know that my mom is terrified of butterflies? She said that one attacked her once.

22 Amber Silver replies: "Scared of a cute... harmless... completely unable to inflict any harm whatsoever butterfly? well.. I'm afraid of spiders... but spiders bite, darnit1"
17 Nov 2005:-) Marijke Mahieu
This is such a poignant poem and I like how it turned out. The rhyming is pretty good and the metre flows nicely. I especially like the myth about how the butterflies came to be...Poor fae! I actually wrote a similar poem, about the disappearance of all fantasy matters...It's a sad world when imagination is lost eh!

Very nice poetry! I look forward to reading more 2

2 Amber Silver replies: "Noo! fantasy will never be lost! I'll hunt it down and make it come home with me! Thanks for the comment, m'dear... I appreciate it."
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'The First Butterfly*':
 • Created by: :-) Amber Silver
 • Copyright: ©Amber Silver. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Demons, Fae, Goddess, Magic, Unicorns
 • Categories: Faery, Fay, Faeries, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters
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