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"The Twisted Key" by Antony M. B. Sadler (Drig)

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This is a story on Ash or Nion for Jenna Morgan's Celtic Challange - The following part of this description was written by Jenna Morgan and posted with her permision.
Come, traveller, step softly on the road. The green hills rise around you, grey in the gathering twilight. Can you hear the music in the mist, the fiddles and the flute? Tarry not on the highway. Turn your eyes away from those pale dancers by the water's edge, with their green silk ribbons. For if they catch you in their coils, 'twill be a year and day before you come home again. And only then if you pay their price... ...for your freedom, a tale....
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←- Dragon's Seventh Chapters 07 - 09 | The Ynticare -→

All stories have a beginning. This one starts, where actually many do if you trace them back far enough, with a tree. Not just any tree, but the world tree, Yggdrasil. One whose roots burrowed into the underworld, shaping those nether regions where giants and monsters dwelled, as surely as the topmost branches built the lofty heavens. Thereby providing perches for the gods and goddesses, to peer down upon the new world, and meddle. Many a tale has branched from the one tree, but we will concentrate on the limb that was paramount for both Yggdrasil and mankind.

 

Now Yggdrasil saw itself in a different light from the gods that saw it as a toy to use until it could be played with no more. It knew that though its birth came about through the slaughtering of Ymir by Borr and his sons, Odin, Hœnir, and Lóðurr, it could be destroyed and replaced if the fickle gods united and changed their minds. For surely how much trust should one place in them that killed Auðumbla’s only sibling. Who began the war with the giants by killing their cousin Loki’s parent.

 

It needed to be less remote to aid in healing the scars. Scars caused during the meetings of the ever warring gods and giants, where the worst casualties were upon the world. Though its boughs wove above the entire world, separating the heavens from the sky, it was rooted on one, small island, remote from the rest of the world’s land. There was little enough room on the island for itself, let alone to allow saplings to be born and grow. Elsewhere, there was plenty of land that saplings could grow upon, further away from Yggdrasil. The saplings would provide it additional presence to thwart any attempts against scarring the world.

 

However, there were problems in dropping seeds and hoping, as was tried first. That attempt yielded most of the seeds to fall on swampland, oceans, river, and deserts. The few that landed on arable soil and were not eaten by birds and mammal, made one small grove. This first copse of nion, grown away from Yggdrasil, was harvested by Odin for bows, arrows, and spears. The pain was far greater than any the serpent, Jorgmungander, eating out its roots, had ever caused the tree. In fury for butchering its children, it hung Odin from its branches.

 

It also chose to create more nion trees, but having learnt from its mistakes gave them guardians, developing ahead of the seed in the samara fruit. It couldn’t be beside its young, so it gave each samara a nymph to protect the keys to new life within. Each nymph guided her samara fruit as it fell. Each dropped to good land. Forests of nion grew strong over the entire world. Seeing its children, plentiful, protected, and strong, Yggdrasil took pity upon Odin. It hoped that he had gained wisdom from his folly, and decided that a lost eye to a raven was adequate payment for the first copse. It released him.

 

Odin ignored the offer Yggdrasil made upon his release. That of being dual guardian to the nion by merely splitting that which was always one by giant into two as was the god’s way. He wasn’t going to harvest the trees, but wouldn’t tie himself to their protection, refusing to look at what Yggdrasil told him he would enjoy to see. He was free and had a score to settle with a raven.

 

The giant Loki, parent of Jorgmungander and the great wolf, Fenrir, was displeased with his nemesis’ release and set to plotting a way to get the two to disagree once more.

 

 

~~~

 

It was a typical meeting. The fires raged in their stone walled pits. The three brothers with father and grandfather sat within the halls of Vallhalla, reveling and jostling. Mead, previously milked from the goat, sloshed onto the wooden table and stone flooring from overfilled mugs that clashed into one another with their owners’ cries of, “Ves heill!” Through one of the small high windows, venting the room of smoke, a small raven sailed into the hall and seeing its master, sank to the table and perched before the one eyed god.

 

It hopped this way and back, to avoid fists and mugs that swung and thudded, it was sure not too accidentally, where it was last perched. Finally using wing to avoid a bone flung at it, the raven angrily croaked and gained the one eyed god’s suddenly sober attention. The eye bored the raven back to its perch upon the table and silence echoed loudly within the unnaturally quite, cool, vast halls.

 

“Well then, offspring of a tiny thief, dare you like your ancestor, speak first?” Odin asked softly.

 

The raven, refusing to show any fear, lifted its head to gaze unflinching into the single eye.

 

“You are one that I sent to watch our cousin. Give me your sight and explain your early return,” Odin stated.

 

Above the carcass of mutton, blue sky and towering mountains appeared. The gods watched a mountain soar toward them and tilt. They were banking to one side of the crest, obviously as the bird had been previously. Down the far side they plummeted into a gully, and other ravens could be seen as the narrowing space brought them into closer formation. One slipped in and out of vision while three were always in the front, so this raven must be one of the first hatchlings to be awarded such prominent position of rank. The craggy gully blocked more and more of the manes light, from the horses pulling Sol through the heavens. Lengthening shadows fell on top of each other darkening the grey.

 

Suddenly part of a shadow shifted across the rest, then a huge maw with glistening, bright, sharp canine teeth leapt before the assembly. As the front two ravens were swallowed by Fenrir, a crash filled the halls that had stilled to silence.

 

Odin’s laughter was joined by Borr’s and  Hœnir’s, as Lóðurr picked himself up from amongst the splinters of his chair on the floor. They turned back to watch the flight as their red faced colleague found himself another seat. Búri smiled slightly at the tussle and returned to his meal and mead, paying least attention to both of the displays.

 

So the mission, reduced now to first hatchlings at best, continued to fly and seek the sight Odin had demanded of them. The black of the one lead raven blended well with the now near black shadows of the underworld.

 

They were expecting the second sudden attack, so none lost their seating as a stone fist hurtled into the bird providing them the vision. Flashes of colours and swirling unclear items danced before their eyes. Then they were surprised to see the manes light at a different angle sifting through nion trees standing to either side of a river flowing from the falls directly in the center of the vision. To see Loki standing on earth, and not the netherworld in which they thought him to stay was astounding. By the fall of the water over his head, and the pool at the base of the fall he had chosen this spot for quite some time as home.

 

Having barely had time to grapple with the audacity of the giant to show this as his home of some time, the giant wrenched the raven’s mind to contain its speech in a way that would enable him to talk directly to his cousins. “Fenrir thanks you for the snack, and awaits her chance to eat you too, Odin. If you could see fit to send larger game as your messenger, I would be very thankful of a meal myself. The Nether world is ours. Stay with yours in Vallhalla. I will not allow your spies access.” As the message ended, and just prior to the vision ending, a bank of golden hair rose from the pool.

 

“What was that? Don’t stop! Show what next you saw,” Odin demanded of the raven. Unfortunately there seemed some memory damage as the raven’s next vision was of flying back to Vallhalla.

 

~~~

 

 

 

It had been raining for several hours, the waterlogged leaves of the nion trees no longer provided shelter and large puddles were forming on the ground. Dancing barefoot, thrilling in the cold water splashing over her face and body, Meliai twisted between her trees. Nothing could distract her from her happiness. She silently cursed her foolishness for thinking that. For no sooner had it been thought than she knew she must move through her glade to its edge, where once had stood the burnt-out trunk of his tree.

 

Her mind’s eye superimposed the long decayed dead tree over the twin trees that now stood in its place. The twins had stood for nearly four hundred years here. She wished her memory would provide his nion tree in its glory days; vigorous, demanding, a huge majestic tree that had housed many wild animals. Unfortunately, though she knew it had once looked this way, she could only see it as the burnt out husk that it became after he was murdered.

 

Turning away from the type of pain that had destroyed many of her sisters, she looked back at the twins. Soon, yes soon she would let them be. Finding solace in that thought she left the area, resuming her dance. A dance not as vibrant as it had been previously, but there was a measure of joy back in her step. Finding herself at the center of the glade and beside her current tree she wound down her dance. Turning her face to the sky above the sweeping canopies of green leaves, she let the rain fall and blend, with her tears, now allowed to flow freely.

 

The cool, splashing drops were both refreshing and soothing. She could feel the roots of her tree lying beneath her feet soaking up the moisture as she felt her face was doing too. Life waxed within her forest, and Meliai rejoiced in these trees that were hers. For the oldest alive, their parents parents were born from the keys she had guided to fall here so many years afore now. How they loved the gentle rains that came in late spring. It is time, wait no longer. Give them the chance to live some of their lives forward even at the risk of them losing that life. It is time for new life. Let them be. Let them live. The song chorused from the forest, the trees taking up the chant and turning it slightly as they passed it on. The rustling leaves of each tree similar and yet distinctly different from their brethren as they joined the whispering chant.

 

Meliai walked up to the tree before her and melded with her current home. Sitting within, she released her mind to the forest. The rainy wet day was the perfect day for new life. Having accepted that it was time she allowed her thoughts to wander, as her physical being had previously, to the edge of the glade where her twins grew strongly. She released the walls that she had built around the zygote moments after it had split and allowed them to resume their growth. The twins, her only offspring given to her from the man she loved so dearly two days at most, prior to his cruel murder. Allowing her tree to provide nourishment for the three of them she slipped into dreams, showing the twins their father as they blossomed.

 

The nymph began sharing with them the joy of her youth. She started before the time of their father, with a god central to their father’s birth and death.

 

 

~~~

 

 

Meliai remembered the first day the giant came as the start of happiness. It was joy that had come out of great despair. She had chosen well and her saplings were all two years old, when Thor had chased Fenrir through her glade. Several trees had been burnt by the lightning strikes from the god’s hammer, but the one that pushed Fenrir back into the underworld took off a huge chunk of the mountainside overshadowing the edge of her glade. The upper lake, previously contained, had fallen down. The deluge beginning to drown her trees as Thor left for other animals to hunt, oblivious of the destruction he had caused.

 

She had been wallowing in self pity, and he had lumbered in and held back the lake. Shock, fear and surprise had been replaced by joy. They had conversations over the next few years as her trees widened and a pool formed where Loki allowed the lake to fall down in ever increasing quantities. The pool became very deep and the small stream from it a river, so that in time he would be able to leave as he eventually must when spotted by the Gods, as his child, Fenrir, had been by Thor.

 

She had told him that she held neither him nor Fenrir responsible and was thankful that he had cared enough to stop her young charges and self from drowning years earlier. He had modestly denied her thanks stating that his giants were as much at fault for the war that had been waging since the gods killed the first born giant, his parent, Yamir. He had warned her that worse than Thor was a god with one eye that her mother hated and had tried to hang from her branches when he destroyed the first nion trees she had birthed. He used ravens as spies and she should not tolerate their presence within her forest. Knowing from her mother of the deed Odin had done, led credence to this giant’s tales and she believed every one, even those which were at odds to Yggdrasil’s. Surely no child of this hero could eat the roots of her mother. More like, as Loki said, Jorgmungander being overly large had trouble while being chased by the devilish gods to avoid breaking some of Yggdrasil’s roots. Though he tried hard not to, and suffered greatly from the destruction done, he must run from them that unfairly set on him and seek his demise.

 

Yes these gods that called themselves good, were god killers, world destroyers. She would not suffer them in her glade. Here, she was goddess. Here, she held power. Here, they would find no acceptance. She was more similar to Loki and the giants than the Gods for she had a single parent. Yggdrasil was both her mother and father as Yamir had been both mother and father to Loki. Yggdrasil was born from the corpse of Yamir so in some ways they had the same single parent.

 

Meliai, I am sorry but I must leave.” Loki told her. “His raven just left as you surfaced from the pool.”

 

It took her some time to realize what he was telling her. She had been investigating the pool for the last two days as he had requested. He had told her that he thought it deep enough if the need ever arose that he must leave, and that she should bind the rocks and earth while he moved away to test their fix. She beneath the water had noticed him leave for several hours during the second day as he had said he would and return. She had taken stock of the pool and underwater banks, strengthened those areas that were in need, and been thankful that at last the threat of flooding was gone. She didn’t want Loki to leave. Unfortunately, it seemed that now that he could rest, her glade saved, he had to leave. He had been hidden long enough to solve her problem, but could not stay long enough for her to offer any thanks.

 

It was with tears that she saw Loki leave her glade.

 

Over the next two days Meliai checked the edges of the pool, from the surface to its depths, for any sign of weakness. Though she planned to ease up on the frequency of her inspections, this would be a task that became routine for the survival of her glade. It was while leaving the pond on the third day that she met him.

 

“Please remain in the lake, and I will join you. Never have I seen such beauty, and I would be honored to learn your name and spend time with you.” Odin told her.

 

Initially she thought to swim to the far bank, but this was her glade and she would not show fear. “I know your name, though I will not use it, and will not share mine, with you. If you put one foot in my pool I will drag you into its depths, and unlike my mother, I will not release you. Both you and those like you are not welcome within this nion grove. Note that your spies will never nest or perch within a nion tree of mine.”

 

Odin was shocked, the meeting was not going the way his imagination had played out in both his night and day dreams that this beautiful creature had captivated him in since he first was accidentally brought to know of her existence. Then realization softened his thoughts and he told her.  “The giant that you have allowed to live within your glade is a trickster, and I must think he has spun lies to twist you from reasonable thinking. His offspring devour your mother. Yes, she did hold me captive, but realized that I must be released to stand against those you have been consorting with.”

 

“You are not welcome in my glade. I am encouraging the roots of the nion trees to grow up along the surface. In time, there will not be a safe place for you to stand. I will not suffer the murderer within my presence. Leave before I and my trees attack.”

 

“You have suffered a giant to live within your glade, yet stand against the gods. Speak your next words carefully or I’ll harvest this nion,” Odin ultimated.

 

“If the giant had not arrived and dwelled here, there would be no glade, thanks to Thor, who destroyed the side of the mountain. If you dare to kill more nion trees, you prove me right and my mother wrong. Whether my words are acceptable for you or not, you and all gods are not welcome here; leave now. This grove of nion will not be as easy as the first you murdered, to kill.”

 

“I leave now, but I shall return. I plan for you to dance and entertain me within the halls of Vallhalla. I am Odin eldest of Borr, and a minor nion goddess shall not defy my wishes. I will find proof of Loki’s deception, and you will apologize to me for the disservice you afforded me this day,” Odin remarked prior to stalking off. Anger and confusion were waging emotions over how badly this meeting had gone.

 

See my little bairns and remember this upstart god, Meliai informed her twins, if ever you have cause to deal with him be polite and wary. If he ever leaves filled with emotion as I have shown, know he will return as soon as he has cunningly planned your downfall. His memory is long, his wit is keen, his wisdom and knowledge are dangerously deep, and he might attack you just for you being the children of my husband and me. Guard your tongue when his spies are near. Now I will teach you the powers of illusion that nion provide as a first defense against the foes I unwittingly made for you.

 

 

~~~

 

 

Odin was furious. He and the daft goddess were being played by Loki. How well his cousin knew him. Determined not to return in a state that his brothers might use to their advantage, he chose to walk within the world and try to work out what the trickster had done and why. Hugin, he forced to his newly named raven, show me the next nearest nion grove. When he was shown the location he changed his previously aimless path, to head toward it.

 

Within a few hours he had traversed the miles and was at the edge of the second glade. Not wanting a repeat he chose to be more polite and hailed the trees. “Children of Yggdrasil and their guardian, I am Odin, son of Borr, and wish to converse, and see how I might be of help to you.” He waited as the trees passed his message on. Then Odin was shocked to see the goddess of his dreams approaching. Was she guardian to every grove?

 

“Well met lord, and please enter, and your friend may perch within too. I fear he looks tired on the wing above you. My name is Meliai, and I am guardian of this grove. It would honor me if you would enter and rest.”

 

“Do you jest? You just chased me from your last grove and forbade to suffer me, when I had done you no wrong. Do you wish to apologize now for the disservice you did me? Or will you pretend it never happened?”

 

“My lord, I know not what mine sister has done to make you vex your anger here. I hope I may be able to recompense you the disservice she provided. My mother, Yggdrasil has told me, and I thought all of my sisters, of you and how we should aid the gods. I can only think that she, unlike myself and mother, has not forgiven you the destruction of the first glade of nion trees. Know that if you do not harm my trees I will provide succor for you and the gods as my mother has asked. Are you sure you did not damage one of my sister’s nion trees?”

 

“I did not. How can you be identical to your sister? My two brothers are little like me,” Odin asked, still dubious that this was not one and the same goddess.

 

“All of my sisters are the same as me. We each are named Meliai, we are separate and vested with only our own glade to protect. I can only hope you accept my hospitality and will apologize for my sister, but cannot say I knew of what happened outside of my glade. In time I can try to dream with my sister and find what and why she did you such disservice that you have such anger for me. However, if she is diseased she might not even sleep to the same seasons as me and I will have to hope Yggdrasil can find out what is wrong. Mother though is slow in replying, she is of her own seasons to be sure. Most likely I will need mother’s help on finding out about my sister, for surely if she treated you so wrongly, without cause as you state, then she is diseased.”

 

“Please enter and let me try to show the hospitality you deserve from the Meliai of the nion glades.”

 

 

~~~

 

 

Odin cursed the cunning of Loki. For though every Meliai was identical in beauty, it was that they were identical except for the one that Loki had diseased against him, that prevented him from being happy. Over the years he had visited from grove to grove becoming increasingly jaded. Initially he had taken a Meliai from here and there to Vallhalla, but later he vainly cantered on his eight legged charger across the world to the next glade of nion, vainly hoping that the Meliai there would be different. He was always disappointed. He wouldn’t fall trap to his cousin’s scheme, somehow, if Loki could change a Meliai, then he should be able to change one too.

 

His brothers, worried about him, were always bringing goddesses to Vallhalla, but not one was near the beauty of a Meliai. He avoided the hall and the constant battle, becoming increasingly aloof. Surely he was wise enough to be able to do what Loki had, and create his own Meliai.

 

Loki had changed the Meliai by giving her a second thing to care for, in addition to the Nion. The easiest change would be to have one bear him a child. Unfortunately being of Yggdrasil, the Meliai were asexual as were the giants and Odin could not impregnate one as he could a normal goddess and give her a child to care for. However, he could split the sexuality of one Meliai. She would be so different then from her sisters, and he could have a child with her and he would have his unique Meliai that loved him.

 

Happy at last, he turned his stead toward the third nion glade he had ever visited.

 

 

 

~~~

 

 

Yggdrasil had made the Meliai with the weakness of being split by Odin because it hoped to catch the help of the god in the protecting of its forest. It had made the Meliai after searching Odin’s mind while he hung from its branches in a form that was perfection to the god. Unfortunately being asexual it did not understand the desire of uniqueness. Loki though asexual too, due to his great cunning, did, and made each of his children different for the purpose he desired and the strength against unique gods this awarded him. He had Fenrir taunt Thor and lead the battle to one grove of nion and set the wheels in motion for a scheme that would pit Yggdrasil against his foe.

 

Odin didn’t disappoint him. He pulled man from the nion tree thinking to make the Meliai of a grove female, and the split occurred in every nion glade across the world. Yggdrasil had not understood a god’s need for a single partner, and thinking it wise had given Odin many partners to aid in the protecting of the world.

 

 

~~~

 

 

Meliai entered once more into the dreams of her growing twins; they would be seven with the winters thaw. Meldion and Arianrhod, your father was born from his tree as were men from trees within my glade and all my sisters’. Odin angry at Loki took the men from the other glades and taught them war of bow and sword, I gave mine to Loki to help defend him. Your father uncovered my folly a few centuries later and returned and then I vainly tried to dream with my sisters but we were too dissimilar. Your father found that I had been tricked and how Loki actually reveled in the chaos of destruction. Slowly I was able to make Yggdrasil see the errors of its ways, and it taught my sisters, but such wounds the earth had suffered. My sisters were able to call back some of the men from the service of Odin. I was unable to bring back any of the men I had given to Loki.

 

“What of Odin?” Arianrhod asked.

 

Meliai glanced and saw the twins awake. Ruffling her daughter’s hair she replied. “A few years later Odin came to me expecting an apology, and my love. I did not love Odin and saw that there was no cure as Yggdrasil had hoped for the world from this vain, selfish god. Daftly I told the peacock how I felt of him, and the love I had instead for your father. He destroyed your father. He burnt his tree to the husk. My sisters and the men they were able to call back from Odin and myself have tried to temper the waged war between god and giant ever since. Our free men protecting the forests and trying to awaken the enslaved men from the nightmare they unknowingly breed.”

 

“If all of you are Meliai, however your name is Gwn, why did you name me Meldion instead of Gwndion?” her son asked.

 

“I am Meliai. Man incorrectly calls me Gwn, but that is not my true name. There are few Meliai left, so many refused to chose a new tree when their chosen man died. I wanted to name you as my son and honor who I am. In a time when Gods change names and sides, having a name that is not unique is advantages. There are several Meldions and Arianrhods, but you shall be the greatest. Both of you have nearly four hundred years of safety stored in the past. Living those years later backwards will enable you to protect your tree for its full life and fix the mistakes mankind makes. This is a power I give to you that is greater than any gods. With it, and your ash wands of illusion, hopefully the wounds of the world can be healed.”

 

 

 

Translations

 

Nion – ash

Ves heill!!! – a Norse toast, meaning be well and be in good health

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3 Feb 2006:-) Marijke Mahieu
Aha! Look at that! I'm behind on my reading and still get first comment on the new stuff! *grins widely* 12

60 Antony M. B. Sadler (Drig) replies: "*beams at you at getting first comment dance*
Though I was expecting the first comment rather sooner; this tale had to be up by the 1st of Feb and I got it up early so it has been sitting and tempting me to take the first comment for my self 10

*Does triumphant first comment dance* *Sits back and appreciates the dance* Then leaps in and dances with you

As for the story, I must say this reads a whole lot different from your other stuff. It's very narrative and it has this old "folktale" kind of feeling to it, which is good! And it's Norse mythology and you can never go wrong with that, right? Who wouldn't love a whole bunch of crazy gods like those 12 So, how close is this to the myths? I studied some a long time ago and I remembered some of this but surely not all. How much did you add or alter? *takes deep breath*
Umm well I mixed Norse, Greek and Celtic mythology so where do I start. The meliai is greek mythology they are like dryads but found in ash trees - I have no idea if they are identicle and I made them unisex because I made the norse mythology "world tree" their mum - she was made with the world out of the carcass of the first asexual giant. According to most Norse mythology Oding hung himself from the world tree to gain wisdom - I just decided to put forward an alternative reason behind the hanging especially as Odin worshipers hung slaves (that I am sure were not willingly commiting suicide though they were supposed to be) from ash trees to gain wisdom - thus I played about with whether there ever was a true suicide attept even from the get go.
*takes deep breath then plunges on...
All of the chars called out at the feast in vallhalla are Norse gods and related as I stated. Loki the giant is their cousin (he is asexual) and they killed his parent to start the war between gods and giants. Fenrir and Joegmunder are Loki's kids and are a wolf and serpent. The serpent does eat the world trees roots and Fenrir is according to Norse mytholgy the one that will eat Odin and most of the gods and mortals at the end of the world. After which the surviving mortals and gods will be left in the depleted world to cary on life.
*pant pant*
I will stop at this point but there is a fair amount of accurate mythology I mostly messed about with the reasons why an event occured like an alternate version of history.

The only downside to stories that are based on myths is that it's very hard for someone who doesn't know that whole mythological structure to get everything that's going on. So much is implied in this story that I'm sure many won't even graze the top of the meaning of some of these passages. I, for one, have a little knowledge of Norse mythology but couldn't quite follow at certain passages. You can't do much about that, I'm afraid, because you can't go and tell the exact myths all over again. It was just something I noticed and found worthy to tell you. I alawys hope if someone is sufficiently interested they will research the myth and then see what I am basing the story on - but agree - I am not writing the myth meerly hinting at the story behind it - also as this was Celtic myth challange I hinted more obscurely to those too

I like the last part with the glade of trees and the different (but the same!) nymphs best. There was lots of emotion portrayed here and although I still didn't get every single thing that happened, I did find it more clear than the previous part. Am glad as this is my story - so I am glad I added enough information to convey what was going on as there isn't much myth to support this part of the tale - the greek myths on meliai are rather limited at best.

In all, this was a difficult, but truly interesting and intriguing story. What made you write it again? Something to do with a Celtic Challenge eh? Great 2 Did you win anything with it? 12 Yes a Celtic challange we all picked a tree month and were to write the tale behind why that tree was awarded a month on the celtic calander. See Jenna Mogan's page I have link on my main page for master list - most of the tales are not up yet though."
4 Feb 2006:-) Joelle Duran
Yay--you've gotten some comments! *dances happily*

60 Antony M. B. Sadler (Drig) replies: "Thank you and thanks for this wonderful comment. *hugs you happily*

Came around to reread this one and leave my own comment here. I disagree with Shanra with this, but then I have a great liking for tales with more detached narrative voice that are epic in scope, and I know her tastes are otherwise. This is just great fun for me. *Beams at you*

I'm not as acquainted with the various myths as you, apparently, it seems most of what I learned in my 'Myth' class in college has since dribbled out of the back of my skull. I did notice and find intriguing the variation you took with Odin being hung from Ygdrasil. And the lose of his eye being involunatary rather than intentionally plucked and cast into Mimir's well as the price for a drink, if memory serves. Yes, you have good memory and yes I figured like history that there could be more than one reason for an event and meddled here with the myths a fair bit - I see that in next post by Becca that she saw how I manipulated the birth and ofc changed three siblings to a single pair of twins that are in several Celtic myths

"Knowing from her mother of the deed Odin had done, led credence to this giant’s tales and she believed every one" lent credence.

Ah, nothing like spin. Loki must be the patron saint of politicians. 12 Thank you I am so glad you saw his manipulation so clearly - he is the trickster so everything he does I felt must not be obvious - I am glad the convolutions he used to get his way indirectly were appreciated and noticed. *Smiling so happily*

The interwoven narrative is making much more sense this second time through. That might be where you're losing people--flashing back and forth between the future Meliai training her offspring, and the fleshing out in present narrative of the gaps in the tale she tells. I like how you weave it together, but it does require attentiveness. =) Thank you.

"but later he vainly cantered on his eight legged charger across the world to the next glade of nion, vainly hoping that the Meliai there would be different" 'vainly' used twice here. Thanks, I think you pointed this out before too - Ah my bad!

*grins* I just love how the creation of humanity here is sheer accident. Yes a little humbling perhaps for those that think the universe was made for man - I am glad you enjoyed the joke on mankind.

And I understood it as seven years old, not seven twins as Shanra thought. See Shanra - *grins a little naughtily and sticks out tongue cutely*

"In a time when Gods change names and sides, having a name that is not unique is advantages" advantageous. LOL thank you!

"This is a power I give to you that is greater than any gods." I'm not sure if you meant possessive here: 'any gods'. ' *nods* "...gods'." is right thanks.

I enjoyed this even more on the second read! Thanks for writing and sharing this! =D  Oh thank you so much and I so owe you - You are a perfect gem - thank you thank you oh and "Happy valentines!""
4 Feb 200645 L. Shanra Kuepers
This one starts, where actually many do if you trace them back far enough, with a tree. <- first comma needs to go, and the 'with a tree' would be more powerful if you'd make it a separate sentence.

:-) Antony M. B. Sadler (Drig) replies: "I like the sounding of making it "With a tree"

One whose roots burrowed into the In my mind it does no longer - The way I am writing this the Norse Gods and Giants changed names and sides as Celtic, Greek and Roman myth surplanted the Norse and the one tree is no more - Otherwise I need to work out where it is hiding these days. 10

For surely how much trust should one place in them that killed Auðumbla’s only sibling. Who began the war with the giants by killing their cousin Loki’s parent. I'll think about it but disagree with you here - I use this as tone and don't intend the question to be asked or answered - The answer is provided/implied by the narrator.

Next paragraph uses a lot of repetition. It might sort of suit the telling feel of the story, but I don't recall even Homer repeating himself quite that much in a passage. I think this is a style difference beteween us but will look it through to see if the repetition gets too much - Others have agreed with me here

to avoid fists and mugs that swung and thudded, it was sure not too At some point I'll look and see - I don't see it as a problem so will wait until the piece is older and re-check

their parents['] parents were born

She[,] beneath the water[,] had noticed him l Thanks

This grove of nion will not be as easy as the first you murdered, to kill.” I disagree - I will not sacrifice my style of writing - to me that is most important even if the location of the words are not in the most comfortable of positions for the reader it reads better to me my way.

"I [will] leave now, (...) I am Odin[,] eldest of Borr

previously aimless path, to head toward it. Thanks - ofc on the quotes there seems to be two school of thoughts on those so I will consider it - An increasing following is not liking to see hanging unended quotes even if the speaker stays to the next paragraph

He wouldn’t fall trap to his cousin’s scheme, somehow, if Loki could change a Meliai, then he should be able to change one too. I think it is inferior - It is Odin's thought and falling into a trap made by Loki is more significant to him than the second sentance.

her growing twins; they would be seven with the winters thaw. *Sticks tongue out at you* The twins are seven years old - you didn't pay the sentance enough attention others got this fine so it doesn't need any change.

Biggest downside, for me, is that I found this very hard to follow. Not because of the mythology included, but because it felt very... fragmented. Not something I liked at least. You have a good command of voice, and a good narrative, and usually mythology is something I happily dive into, but this... It struck a wrong cord. That's about as close to defining why I didn't like it as I can get at the moment.Well thanks for reading sorry you don't like this style - others did and I do and I think it is the right style for the myth but thanks for the comment it is helpful and good to see a different opinion."
10 Feb 2006:-) Becca Lusher
*smiles* Have to say the sudden appearence of the names Gwn, Meldion and Arianrhod threw me slightly. But that's okay, a connection to the Celts, I guess ^_^

60 Antony M. B. Sadler (Drig) replies: "I actualy had more but Joelle correctly told me that it was better ending here and leaving the rest for start of another tale if anyone wants to see the Celtic part of the myth that really starts where this the Norse/Greek part ends

Interesting, I'm not all that familiar with Norse myths (outside of runic stuff) but I did follow this pretty well. Have to say I think you did a good job of conveying that. Thank you *beams*

The Meliai were interesting, though I understand where Shanra's coming from. It was very disconnected in places, which made it more difficult to follow, for me anyway. I like characters ^_^ that's what I love about reading, and more depth of character would have been nice, but I still managed to enjoy this. The over lying epicness of it worked well enough to carry me along to the end. Yes this was the overlying myth/epic and I could (probably later should) flesh out the chars but didn't want to loose the big picture and subtelties - I guess I can re-visit and see if I can develop them more without detracting from the stories style.

Gotta love those squabbling gods ^_^ Good stuff! Thank you for reading and glad you enjoyed."
17 Feb 2006:-) A.R. George
Made it at last!

60 Antony M. B. Sadler (Drig) replies: "Yay! *cheers*

The idea behind this 'alternate myth' sort of thing is very interesting. I'm just a tad obsessed with Norse myths *cough* so it was fun to see all the familiar faces bobbing around through it all, and lots of fun to see some of the alternate spins you put on the real myth (like Yggdrasil hanging Odin up as punishment instead of his own oddball wisdom-quest ... never did understand why he did that). Any story with Loki in it has got to be worth reading, too! 12 Yep, I never knew to much wisdom gained from suicide - other than perhaps mere moment before it being too late - Why did I do that! and *ruffles Loki's hair* he is fun *grins with you*

I must admit, though, even having my head full of Nordic goodies didn't help me much in following along at places. It was intriguing and mysterious, but towards the end in particular it started jumping here and there just a little too much for me. That said, I still enjoyed it, and it was a very unusual take on the mythology. Good stuff! Thank you and I guess at some point I need to see what I can do to help out the readers I lost toward the end well if Des ever stops claiming center stage anyway

Few parting nitties for you:

'He had warned her that worse than Thor was a god with one eye that her mother hated'
--> Odin You have lost me here I guess it might help if I knew what '-->' meant

'forbade to' --> forbore to

'mine sister' --> 'mine' is only used before nouns that start with a vowel (ie. 'mine aunt') - otherwise just 'my' Well I learnt something here thanks.  Thank you for swinging by and reading"
13 Mar 2006:-) D. 'Yolaron' Hendrikson
That was interesting. It reminded me of Tolkien's Silmarillion for some reason, probably with all the discussion of gods, goddesses and trees. It was also one of the more orriginal stories I've read here in a long time.

60 Antony M. B. Sadler (Drig) replies: "*Beams*
Thank you!

My only thing, and someone might have already said this, is the timeline of the story. I had a hard time keeping the events in order with the flashbacks and recounting tales. Yes, I have an addiction for time hopping. *grin*

Anyway, it was good. A very refreshing read.  I am so glad you enjoyed this tale and found it adequately unique. And comparision to Tolkien - I am not worthy!!!
Thank you for it though - Made my day. *smile*"
19 Apr 2006:-) Alinta Brown
Wow... lots of back story crammed into a little bitty space. I enjoyed that greatly however the Mead from a goat threw me a little. I thought mead was fermented honey and water, not goats milk or is it like the golden goose and just has mead for milk instead?

60 Antony M. B. Sadler (Drig) replies: "Bows head and appologieses - I didn't notice this one.Um I guess I'll have to re-check but from what I though I knew of Norse Mythology the Mead served in Valhalla is from a milked goat - Now I wonder if it is like the golden goose or if they fermented the goats milk - I thought the Gods were to lazy to actually ferment alchohol and thus a goat provided it with no extra effort.Thank you for reading"
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