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Amy ´Insom´ Downum

"Succubus Lore (Poem)" by Amy ´Insom´ Downum

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I didnt find this thing until many months after I had written it, hidden away in the back of my school binder. I remember writing it in math class. Strange how some of your best ideas come when your brain is strained to the bursting point. Hm. I decided it was good enough to post on Elfwood, so, here it is, straight from the pages of my notebook.
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←- The Lay of Sir Carrot (Poem) | The Savage Messiah -→

            Sickly shadows scrape their way o’er

      Ghastly branches of forest Lore.

The moonlight, a glowing galleon, rides

Upon a sea of stars.

Whistles pierce silence thick,

Rabbits hide for owls are quick

‘Pon silent wings of death.

Shadow Lore is sung,

By crickets on their violins,

And wolves accompanying in bass through the trees.

 

Through the night she steps,

Silken slip and rustle or a satin gown follows.

Quiet. Silent.

Moonshine hair, golden sheen, ripples down

To shoulder-length.

A mystery revealed,

As the gown is peeled

By his fingers from her skin.

 

Dare he tease a kiss?

Denied once. Twice.

A third, and he sighs and caresses her thighs,

Waiting for his moment.

Fingers trace patterns of feathered lace

O’er his chest, waiting for her moment…

 

Bodies hot, a press of impassioned flesh.

Hungry on her part.

 

So soft a kiss, dismissing this

Notion wild of his.

 

Comes true when slowly the moon fades

From skin of alabaster purity.

Now scales of demoness

And cool, clawed fingers choke him

With detached finesse.

 

A gurgle, a gag.

A limp jaw that sags.

 

The succubus rides again.

 

←- The Lay of Sir Carrot (Poem) | The Savage Messiah -→

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24 Jun 2005:-) Stacey 'Nari Jauhara' Ooms
Oooohhhhhh! I love this one! Great use of imagery - I can almost see it all happening before me. I really, really like this piece!!! Keep up the good work!

7 Amy ´Insom´ Downum replies: "Thanks much! I remember not liking this when I wrote it, then loving it enough to put it here when I reread it maybe a month or two later. Just goes to show that when you let work marinade for a while, it gets better!"
11 Jul 200545 Emily Day 'Stripes' Proctor
This is AMAZING! Kudos to you. I really enjoy your use of descriptions in the first stanza, especially. "Crickets on their violins" was especially brain-food right now. I loved it!

I would write more, but my brain is fried.... jetlag, you know. *coughs* *snores* *wakes up* Wha-? I just got back from Paris, where it's 6+ hours.... *snores some more*

48 Amy ´Insom´ Downum replies: "Fanks!"
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'Succubus Lore (Poem)':
 • Created by: :-) Amy ´Insom´ Downum
 • Copyright: ©Amy ´Insom´ Downum. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Death, Passion, Romance, Succubus
 • Categories: Demons, Imps, Devils, Beholders..., Romance, Emotion, Love
 • Views: 928

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