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Jess L Rhapsodos

"The Elven Outcast" by Jess L Rhapsodos

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Another poem written about Anariel. This one I actually intended it to be about her. She is the main character in my book, and it makes a little more sense when you actually know her. It is formatted to look like a tear dripping down. My teacher called it a shape poem. I think it turned out pretty good.
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The Elven Outcast

 

An

outcast.

Ever watching,

but never able to

join.  She watches half

of her people, happy and

carefree, while her other

half: a monster.  Alone

she sits, watching

a war between

two races.

She

 

cannot

help, for no

one will accept

her.  No one

cares

 

because

of what

she

is: an out-

cast.

 

By Jessica

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25 May 200845 Anon.
This is so sad. I am guessing that the other part of her is a drow, because those two races are always warring. It really does look like a tear too.

:-) Jess L Rhapsodos replies: "Yep, yep, yep. The "monsters" in this are the drow, though the poem doesn’t exactly hold true to what my dark elves are like in my story. This poem is more aimed at another project I had with Anariel where her character was really different from what it is now.

Thanks for reading!"
25 May 2008:-) Heidi Hecht
This is cool. And sad. Some people in her situation might find a way to help anyway, even if they won’t accept her. It is a good way to thumb her nose at the people who made her an outcast in the first place.

:-) Jess L Rhapsodos replies: "Yeah, I was sort of sad when I wrote it, so I guess that came through. And in the story, though it is a little different, she does do a little bit of "thumbing." Haha."
22 Sep 2008:-) Désirée Dippenaar
Great poem! The emotion really comes across very well, and I especially like the teardrop-shape, that is a very good effect! And the rift between the two cultures that Anariel experiences becomes very clear too. Must be terrible to be in the middle, belonging to neither side, and you bring that across very well.

Excellent! ^_^

:-) Jess L Rhapsodos replies: "Thanks, and yes, I like the shape idea, too. A whole section in English class devoted to poetry. I was the only one in my class who actually enjoyed it.

This poem is more based on my early view of Anariel before the actual story I have uploaded on Elfwood, but I still keep it for sentimental reasons. Thanks for reading."
1 May 2009:-) Nikki van de Pol
Nice work, the teardrop shape indeed really adds to the whole. I also think it’s great how you manage not to have to use loads of difficult words in order to be poetic and convey a lot of feeling. It makes the emotions purer and more true in a sense, like it’s taken almost directly from her mind. (even though you use third person of course) You got me curious about the story behind it, even though the poem doesn’t exactly fit the character anymore. Anyways, keep it up! 2

:-) Jess L Rhapsodos replies: "Thanks for reading. The character that I wrote about in this actually features in the Order of the Dragon chapters I have up. She’s different, but deep down she sort of still has these emotions.

Glad you liked it."
17 Jul 2009:-) Ashley Tracylove OConnell
this is great. maybe you wrote it cause at times you feel like an outcast? Idk just a thought.

:-) Jess L Rhapsodos replies: "Hmm, somewhat, though not so much an outcast, but more being lonely.

When I wrote this, about three of my friends were moving away, so I was going to miss them a lot.

Thanks for reading."
6 Feb 2010:-) Lindsay Verde
Ooo, a great little tidbit to read before getting into the actual story 1

:-) Jess L Rhapsodos replies: "Thanks. The Order of the Dragon has changed so much since this poem, but there are a few things still the same.

It at least gives you an insight into how Anariel thinks.

Happy reading."
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'The Elven Outcast':
 • Created by: :-) Jess L Rhapsodos
 • Copyright: ©Jess L Rhapsodos. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Anariel, Elf, Monster, Tear
 • Categories: Elf / Elves, Romance, Emotion, Love, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc, European Traditions, Mythology
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