"The Fall of Babylon.htm" by Jess L Rhapsodos

It’s great to see some actual fantasy inspired from Scripture! It was so much of a relief to read this!

I read Revelation 18 afterwards to see the inspiration! I then read this again to see how it relates! It is a good poem, but I think it needs a little more work to make it more accurate. The end needs to make it clear why The Dove is crying. It is not crying for Babylon, but for the saints slain by Babylon. The Dove took vengeance for the dead saints.

The rest of the poem is okay, as it is some years before Babylon falls, and The Dove is pleading with it to change. The Dove always gives warnings to change before He destroys a nation. So, although that part is not mentioned in Scripture, it is logical.

Great job overall on this! I’m just picky on accuracy and even more so when The Holy Bible is involved.

Jess L Rhapsodos replies: "Thank you for reading. Again, this was more symbolic than an accurate representation. It was meant to convey the overall feelings the Dove had about the death of the city, not really why it was destroyed or what was involved with it, but I understand about being realistic. I get picky with that stuff, too.

I have gotten a little confused feedback about the ending from my family, so I might revise it a little to make it clearer.

Thanks for the critique."