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This I had to write for school as part of my final project to pass my Bible class.  We had to do seven pieces of art based on Revelation, and poetry falls into the art category.  The inspiration for this is in Revelation 18 where it describes the fall of Babylon, and so I wrote from that chapter with a Fantasy sort of aura.

Happy reading.

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The Fall of Babylon

The Fall of Babylon


Oh, Babylon.  Mighty Babylon.

Why hast thou fallen into darkness?


Once a great place of beauty and grace,

Now the Abyss where demons roam and pillage.


The wine runs thick,

Down throats and through the streets.

It is like blood drenching the world—

Thy wicked people of Babylon.



The Dove pleads with thee to emerge from thy evil revelry.

Escape the grasp of the red dragon,

That age-old serpent called the Devil.

Let the Lamb crush his head!


“Come again to the light,” pleads the Dove.

Do not fall, oh wondrous Babylon.


* * * * * * * * * * * *


“Alas, alas,” the Dove cries in later days.

His tears become the rain,

And they fall into the shadow;

It will forever enshroud the once-majestic city.


“Alas, alas!”


Babylon is no more.

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9 Jul 2009:-) Nathanael Herald Eisner
It’s great to see some actual fantasy inspired from Scripture! It was so much of a relief to read this!

I read Revelation 18 afterwards to see the inspiration! I then read this again to see how it relates! It is a good poem, but I think it needs a little more work to make it more accurate. The end needs to make it clear why The Dove is crying. It is not crying for Babylon, but for the saints slain by Babylon. The Dove took vengeance for the dead saints.

The rest of the poem is okay, as it is some years before Babylon falls, and The Dove is pleading with it to change. The Dove always gives warnings to change before He destroys a nation. So, although that part is not mentioned in Scripture, it is logical.

Great job overall on this! I’m just picky on accuracy and even more so when The Holy Bible is involved.

:-) Jess L Rhapsodos replies: "Thank you for reading. Again, this was more symbolic than an accurate representation. It was meant to convey the overall feelings the Dove had about the death of the city, not really why it was destroyed or what was involved with it, but I understand about being realistic. I get picky with that stuff, too.

I have gotten a little confused feedback about the ending from my family, so I might revise it a little to make it clearer.

Thanks for the critique."
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'The Fall of Babylon.htm':
 • Created by: :-) Jess L Rhapsodos
 • Copyright: ©Jess L Rhapsodos. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Devil, Dove, Dragon, God
 • Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy, Demons, Imps, Devils, Beholders..., Dragons, Drakes, Wyverns, etc
 • Submitted: 2009-07-07 06:03:01
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