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"Flashes: Episode Two: The First" by Emma Kathryn

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Mwa ha! Our vampiress returns!
Okay, I know that this one is REALLY short but when I wrote this one I was testing myself - you know, trying to control my writing. Anyway, it's a quick easy read and gives you a little more background into our heroine (or should I say villain :-S even I don't know anymore!)
I like her sire - he's so badass!
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←- Flashes: Episode One: Waiting | Flashes: Episode Three: Cruelty -→

The First

Emma Kathryn McDonald


She kept as far away from him as she could.  She stared at him; he was no longer a “he” or “him” but “it.”  He had been no older than her but she had ended it all for him in just a few moments.

            She sat with her knees tucked up against her chest, wrapped in her arms, and she shook violently as she wept.  The tears ran slowly, lingering on her pale face, and she felt sick, still tasting the metallic flavour on her lips, teeth and tongue.  It made her gag and she let go of her knees in order to vigorously rub the excess crimson fluid from her lips with the back of her trembling hand.  The marks it left on her skin made her gasp and, again, relive what she had done.

            She had taken a human life!  It was something which had never even crossed her mind and, here, she sat opposite a dead man with his blood tainting her being.  She tried to convince herself that it was not her doing; the condition had made her do it.  It was the condition.  The condition…

The weeping began again and she took her head in her hands in despair.  The room had been silent but now she heard those boots echoing against the cold floor.  They stopped before her and she slowly gazed up past the tears and into the eyes of her sire.  The man looked down on her with a grin.

“You did well, my pretty,” he told her, crouching down to face her.  He put his hand on her face, pushing her raven hair out of the way.  She immediately jerked away from his touch.

“It does not seem that way,” she muttered as she wiped the shed tears from her eyes.

“Well you did,” he told her firmly, putting his cold hand back on her cheek only for her to pull away again.  He blatantly ignored her dismissal and tried to touch her once more.  She slapped his hand away but this time he grabbed her by the scruff of the neck, wrenching her head back, revealing two tiny, pin-prick scars on her throat.  “And do you have any idea just how pretty you became while you were taking him?” he asked her cruelly.  She clenched her eyes shut, trying to prevent the single tear from falling.  “Your eyes filled with lust and they seemed even wilder as you sank your perfect teeth into his flesh…”

“Stop it,” she begged in a quivering whisper.  “Please, just stop.”  He did not and only tightened his grip on her.

“Hush, child.  This is but the first; it will become easier with time.  There will be many more to come…”

“I did not want this!” she burst, the strength and anger surprising her as she gathered her might and broke free from his grasp.  She frantically got to her feet and fled desperately from the horror she had caused.

←- Flashes: Episode One: Waiting | Flashes: Episode Three: Cruelty -→

1 Sep 200545 Jennifer Singleton
Wonderful, I loved reading this! Your heroine is a fantastic creation, she's strong and interesting - someone I would definitely want to read more about. Again, the atmosphere is awesome, really well done!

2 Emma Kathryn replies: "Yea, I really like her, too. She's kinda become her own person now. I don't control her, I just tell her story, give her a voice. Thanks for commenting!Lotsaluv, Em"
8 Sep 2005:-) Julia Anna Rill
Amazing! i love this one too! it is totally different than the other one, the heroine is just at the start and in chapter 1 she is already an "experienced hunter", i like how you wrote down the beginning of her being!!!

2 Emma Kathryn replies: "Glad you liked and I'm gonna do 6 (or maybe 9 episodes of this girl and they're gonnae be all over the place. All showing different points in her afterlife, each somehow connecting with the others. It's a charaterisation task really...bit of a big one but still.
Lotsaluv, Em"
30 Nov 2005:-) Ryan Stringer
Like you said, its short, but in a way that is the beauty of it. Not much else really needs to be said about it - she took her first life and didn't seem terribly enthusiastic. Interesting how you described her sire picking her up by the scruff of the neck - almost like the mama cat (or in this case papa cat)disciplining her young.

23 Emma Kathryn replies: "Oh yeah, I never thought of that...cool comparison...I love her Sire, he's such a badass...we'll see more of him in Episode 5 which should be up soon. I've also got a cracking scene planned for the two of them, you'll love it!
Thanks Ryan!!!
Lotsaluv, Em"
20 Feb 2007:-) Dragonflies2
I enjoyed this, though I found the exclamation of she had taken a human life rather spoiling. You were doing a great job of showing and not saying, and I was caught up, but then that sudden exclamation..I don't know. Kind of broke the spell.

Heh, I like her Sire. He has all the cruelty I've always loved about vampires.

I like the other senses you've added in, not just sight. But I would like more sight here, of her surroundings, of the body of the one she had just killed, of the lurid red on her pale skin...these are just suggestions by the way, feel free to ignore me.

So, how old is she when we see her in Waiting?

4 Emma Kathryn replies: "Oh she's in the hundreds by Waiting...but this is a little flashback...sort of creating the irony between the two...thanks for your suggestions, this was really just a quick piece so certainly room for improvement. Thanks again for the input.
Lotsaluv, Em"
8 Aug 2007:-) Michelle ´Marvin´ Baptiste
she kind of reminds me of Louis from Interview with a vampire. i really like this story so far! you really have a talent for writing

1 Emma Kathryn replies: "Awww, thank you dearly! What a compliment! Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've got lots of plans for my vampire pieces, I just find it difficult making time to write!
Thanks again!
Lotsaluv, Em"
27 Jun 2008:-) Anna Moonfrost
readen them all!! more chills and still the same feeling for her!

:-) Emma Kathryn replies: "Awwwww, thanks! Am glad your getting into them! Thank you very much!

Lotsaluv, Em"
26 Aug 200845 Jazz
He is sooo badass thoug for some reason my favorite word, ****, came to mind while reading this. No offence great story

:-) Emma Kathryn replies: "Erm, ok then! :-S But thanks for reading!

Lotsaluv, Em"
22 Aug 2009:-) Kelley (Pryro) Nicol
this is amazing as were the parts before it but i chose to comment this one because its a great teaser and i love it! im jealous

:-) Emma Kathryn replies: "Thank you!!! I’m trying to put my vampire book together at last!!! Got about 70 pages of it done. So if I can’t get it published before the end of the year, I’ll upload all the new stuff.

Thanks again!!!

Lotsaluv, Em"
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'Flashes: Episode Two: The First':
 • Created by: :-) Emma Kathryn
 • Copyright: ©Emma Kathryn. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Chronicles, Part, Two, Vampire
 • Categories: Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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