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Ashlyn *Maquarrie* White

"Broken" by Ashlyn *Maquarrie* White

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I wrote this when I was first told I'm on the back burner in a friendship I took for something more.
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He loves her as a partner

I'm his best friend

I used to be in her place, his pet, his destiny

I feel broken

Incomplete

Even the spirits offer no comfort

Marriages fall apart

Partners and mates grow distant

Best friends stay together the longest

But to know won't be in my bed crushes me

Broken and holding my bruised spirit, I only smile

I only wish them happiness and kill my mind

Bowing before the council on the astral

The Ancestors and Ancients tell me the same

Time will tell

Time turns away from me, telling me to stop asking

If I don't give him his freedom, I'll lose him

But I already have

This is just a cruel repeat of my past

My jealousy is so deep it only means one thing

Hatred

Of myself for not being able to touch him

For being too late to fall into his arms

Not of her

Not of his latest love

After my tears, I'll try not to release Hell

It's easier when you're broken
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19 Apr 2001:-) Karl J. Boivin
Some verses I like however it seems a poem you wrote about your "experience" and you then tried to make it fit with fantasy.... A bit confusing but I see the light in this poetry...I ain't the best there is myself but my critics are honest. You know in this kinda relationship, you gotta focus on something else to forget about it... just trying to help here....

From Maq: the deal with the fantasy is we had a very spiritual relationship as far as what witches, druids, and other pagans may believe in
29 Apr 200145 Ann M. Wolfe
:16niffs:: I can relate....easily. Well done..

From Maq: chin up, there are others, as one learns with time
21 Dec 2001:-) Genevieve Bedard
It is very simple and you get the pessage pretty straight, i suppose that must be taken from a real experience, i know how it feels and it is very deep in its simpleness.
BravoYeah. Actually, several things that just sort of prooved that history repeats itself unless you wil it to change. I sort of hoped that all kinds of people could relate to it on different levels.
15 Jan 200645 Goribus
This was perhaps the most painful thing I've ever read. You know what I mean by that. Without going into detail, I was a fool. And although it's too late,I never stopped caring or loving. I should have told but I'm not secure with emotions.Shaky hands on a keyboard attempt to convey 5 years of regrets. I stand wishing she was back in my life in any way at all.
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'Broken':
 • Created by: :-) Ashlyn *Maquarrie* White
 • Copyright: ©Ashlyn *Maquarrie* White. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Depression, Loss, Anguish, Mourning
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Celtic
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