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"Sabelmayarnlen" by John H. Blackham

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This is one of my first ballads...i wrote it over a year ago...i personally think it's very weak in rhyme and rhythm, and doesn't make much sense...but it IS in a bit of background song for my Adzel series. I was going to make the Adzelian version of the Lord's Prayer...though first I have to design national religions...and the background of them...and...ya, you get the idea.
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'There!' he did cry
As the white began to stain
The valley; they did not fly
And with his war-cry
Sanadred ordered them slain

And at them he went
His army behind him
Tho' his sword was bent
His war was unkempt
Thus flew and trailed behind him

Yea, he attacked in great haste
His men followed their lord
His rage their foes did taste
But yet they laid waste
Thus was the viscoius hoard

Enraged were they
They heeded not the lord falling
Lept did they
Into the fray
And left their King hopelessesly calling

No barrow was made
No headstone erected
No funeral dirge played
No eulegy prayed
No body had the grave protected

When at length their foes
Did take the fair dead
Thus lowered their bows
So the lore goes
And laid Sanadred in a stone bed

Into the mountains they went
Burdened by the stone casket
This all their potency spent
And all their backs bent
'Twas all they could do to clasp it

Thus was the will of the Elven Conclave
Thus Sanadred was entombed near his lands
Buried was he, deep in a cave
Elves working nigh like a slave
Yet in his death he stretched ghoulish hands

And took form again, though no longer fair
And took up his royal garb
No ornament did it bear
Nor was it made with great care
Thus became his black garb

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12 Dec 200445 Carolyn
Hi John, totally agree with you (sorry) and your other work is so much better; this one's definitely not in the Lords prayer league - perhaps stop by here
http://members.aol.com/faigle/myhomepage/
Good poetry comes from experience first. Tolkien actually got shot at before he did the bored doodly bit about the hobbit while marking papers .
best wishes,
Carolyn

:-) John H. Blackham replies: "heyyyy, thanks for the commentationisms!!! That's fine--this is, actually, my fist stab at poetry. I decided that ballads aren't my thing and turned instead to macabre, Edward Gorey style poetry...some of it is embedded into my piccies on my SF/F site, if you're interested! And anyway--thanks, most of all, for being honest!"
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'Sabelmayarnlen':
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 • Keywords: Adzel, Ballad, Battle, Battles, Elves, Poem, Tolkien
 • Categories: Elf / Elves, Fights, Duels, Battles, Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins, Celtic
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