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Barbara J Wickham

"M´hali: The Lost Clan, Chapter 2" by Barbara J Wickham

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This chapter goes deeper into the M'hali character as we observe her in the environment of her clan.

Please let me know if the familial relations are confusing, as far as how M'hali is related to the other members of the clan mentioned in this section.

Thank you so much for reading! *hugs*
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Chapter 2

A Cry From The Dark

Eyes wide open, but unseeing in the darkness, she inhaled more deeply and her nostrils flared as she tried to identify the strange scent on the wind. It carried hints of the plains in the season of New Fruit, when all was lush and growing, but never before had she smelled such a heady greenness.

Whiskers twitching, she parted her lips and let the rich and tangy aroma pass over her sensitive tongue, but the origin of the smell still alluded recognition.

Then the noises suddenly came into her awareness.

Straining her eyes in the forbidding dark, she pivoted her ears desperately as sounds issued from all sides in the unfathomable shadows. The first sound that became distinctive from the sudden cacophony was the trill of birdsong, but so unlike the screeching of the predatory blacktails, or the sweet twitters of the small darts, these birds sang with great whooping calls that echoed as if in a high cavern.

Just beneath the birdsong, she could make out other subtle noises that were somewhat familiar, but still sounded unlike anything she had ever heard before. Movements of plants, the dripping of dew, the snapping of twigs and the steady buzz of insects, all parts of the song of life on the plains, but here the song sounded... trapped, as if bouncing off of invisible walls.

These unseen activities seemed to be so close, surrounding her in such a whirlwind of menacing confusion that she found herself instinctively crouched down on her haunches, whether in readiness to fight or flee, she could not decide.

She frantically raised her blind eyes to the skies in the hope of catching a glimpse of familiar stars, but as her sight was meet only with an empty dome of nothingness, she felt the first stirrings of panic.

Why did the very stars hide from her, in this place of strange scents and foreign sounds? Where were the endless grasses and the rolling hills where sight and sound traveled forever? Why could she not see in this black gloaming when out in the grasslands she could normally see every blade of grass, even on a moonless night? A hunter of the plains was most confident during the darkest span of the evening, but this cloying darkness felt like the death of night itself!

Unconcerned with her dilemma, the chaos of sounds continued, but underlying it all was a noise that once in her consciousness, chilled her blood and raised her hackles from head to tail. It was the sound of a dry whispering and it was this woeful noise that finally brought blind terror to her heart.

Not caring about being unable to see, she leaped straight ahead, plunging heedlessly into the dark and increasing every frenzied stride as her claws dug into the soft, moist soil. She did not slow, even as wet leaves stingingly slapped into her face and she painfully bounded off of hard, rough pillars that carried the stringent scent of wood. Her breath rasped in her chest, lungs straining to move air that was as thick and cloying as the steam from the intoxicating brightstar tea.

Suddenly, the darkness opened around her and she was in a clearing where beams of blessed sunlight pierced the darkness as if shining through tears in the fabric of the sky. Her labored breath caught in her throat as she raised her wide eyes to the light and recognized the shapes of immense branches with impossibly large leaves that blotted out the sun. As the far tree tops swayed ponderously in the winds, the same whispering sound that had sent her running answered.

Before her dizzied mind could wrap around this incomprehensible sight, a distant, agonized cry pierced the clearing.

“M... ali! Mu... ali! “

As the desperate echo bounced from every direction, the ground suddenly disappeared from underpaw and M’hali could only grasp at empty air as she fell.

“Muthali! Nooooooooo!”

This last pain-filled scream followed her down into the darkness, tearing at her heart as redness washed over her like a dark flood of blood and tears.

“M’hali! M’hali! Wake up, you lazy kit!” The sharp voice met the sharper terror of her dream and M’hali shot up from her reed mat as if a brown slider had latched its fangs into her tail. Only when she realized that it was her aunt Poshi standing framed by weak light in the doorway did she let out a breath that was waiting to become a scream.

“I’m sorry, aunt Poshi”, M’hali settled her bristling fur flat and gathered in limbs that were flung out in alarm. “I was just trying to get some sleep before I have to take Lenah out to gather herbs.”

“I see”, Poshi stated flatly, her eyes narrowed as she examined M'hali's agitated state. “Does Lenah frighten you so much, that you must act like a chit that has been caught in the grain?”

At first, M’hali could only stare at her aunt in bewilderment until realization sank in and she felt her nose grow hot with embarrassment.

“No, little Lenah does not frighten me at all, ‘ana.” M’hali reverted to the kithood reference for her aunt as she tried to straighten her bent posture under Poshi’s formidable stare.

Poshi stooped her tall frame under the low doorway and entered the hunter’s sleeping burrow. Once the stark daylight no longer distorted her silhouette, M’hali noticed the concern clouding her aunt’s piercing amber eyes.

“Then why do you look as if you are surrounded by a pack of starving Slipjaws, my love?”

M’hali settled her back against the packed earth wall of the burrow and tried to relax the shaking that still lingered in her legs. “It’s nothing as bad as those savage creatures, I just had a bad dream.”

“Just a dream? It seems to me that this dream had teeth.” Poshi settled slowly onto M’hali’s sleeping mat. “Do you need to talk about it?”

M’hali pretended not to notice her aunt’s painful movements and peered instead at her burrowmates, still sleeping after a long night of hunting. “No, thank you. Actually, I can hardly remember what it was about, now that the day has banished the darkness from behind my eyes.”

Poshi nodded her ears in acknowledgment, but her eyes searched M’hali’s face as if she could sense falseness in her words. In fact, M’hali could remember the dream with an icy clarity that had settled deep in her belly and as tempting as it was to seek her aunt’s council, she felt a strange reluctance to reveal what she had witnessed during her disturbed sleep.

“Have you had this dream more than once?”, Poshi inquired, casually adjusting the woven sash that lay across her shoulder, its bright colors signifying her rank as a mentor of hunters. It should have been the sash of an honored elder, but M’hali had learned long ago not to show disrespect by asking such a pertinent question as why this was not so.

“Have you fallen asleep again, little snip!” Poshi’s sharp voice broke into M’hali’s thoughts, reminding her that her aunt did not appreciate having to repeat herself.

“My apologies, aunt Poshi!” M’hali exclaimed loudly, causing some disgruntled stirring amongst her fellow hunters. Lowering her voice, she continued, “I meant no disrespect.”

“I know you did not, M’hali, but I am not convinced that you are at ease and I can not rest when my favored niece is troubled.” Poshi added warmth to her statement by placing a paw on M’hali’s cheek, but a hint of sorrow was swimming in her eyes. “My only duty in this world is to see that you are happy and well prepared for your destiny.”

With these cryptic words, Poshi raised herself from the mat and ambled towards the burrow doorway, flicking her slender tail as a signal for M’hali to follow. M’hali did follow, if only to discover what her aunt meant, but she was not immediately given a chance to voice her question as her aunt kept walking beyond the hunter’s burrow.

As the pair made their way through the short tunnel that led to the common area that served as both a gathering place and entry to the deeper burrows, two young kits bounded around their mother, eager to be allowed outside to play in the early morning. Even stoic Poshi could not resist grinning at the antics of the kits as they jumped and ran with an awkward nimbleness that gave a hint to the incredible physical prowess they would soon display as young adults.

“Your kits are coming up fine and strong, Maeta”, Poshi stated indulgently to the chieftess’s second youngest daughter.

Maeta beamed at her young, but replied with a weariness not uncommon with new mothers, “Thank you, Poshi. I only hope I can keep up with them. The new day has put fire in their blood!”

M’hali could understand the kit’s eagerness. The season of New Fruit was coming to an end and with the stifling heat of Golden Grass on its way, it would soon shorten the time when it would be bearable to be in the open while the Elderstar held vigil in the sky.

“I know these are your first, Maeta, but you should allow some of the elders to take them off your paws for a short while each day”, Poshi stated as she pinned the young mother with her eyes to ensure that Maeta took the point. “You will do them no good if you are too weary to watch diligently for the many dangers that stalk helpless kits.”

Maeta tensed as if to protest, but she then cast her eyes to her vulnerable kits and let out a deep sigh. “Poshi, you are right. I want so much to be a good mother and I will take your advice.” Maeta squinted her eyes with mischief and continued, “In fact, I will give them to Mihan after she wakes. My younger sister will need the practice!”

Poshi stiffened and raised her brows and Maeta instantly ducked her head and lowered her ears, as if her former mentor had raised a paw. She continued in a much meeker tone, “I’m sure she’d enjoy playing with my kits, as all young females do. I did not mean to make light of her situation.”

Poshi snorted a short laugh and continued in a tone that left no doubt that she wanted no more said on the matter, “ Have you heard your kit’s names yet?”

“Not yet, but my elder sister Mirih said her kit’s names did not come to her until Lenah and Letah were almost a season old! I am trying to calm my spirit so that I may hear the song when it comes.”

Maeta seemed to warm to the subject, but M’hali could still sense tension in her voice and wondered what Poshi had disliked so much about Maeta’s earlier statement.

“Never fear, Maeta”, Poshi said gently. “The song will come when the time is right and your kits will have a name befitting their spirits.”

“Thank you”, Maeta said with genuine gratitude.

Poshi dipped her head and continued along the tunnel.

“Enjoy your morning, Maeta”, M’hali called over her shoulder as she sheepishly followed her aunt.

Maeta blinked in response, but her eyes lacked the sparkle of a few moments before.

M’hali herself disliked the mornings, especially in the bustling burrow. It was the night time that truly brought life to her spirit and she wished it was dark again and she was out on the plains, stalking prey in grasslands rich with deep shadows and deeper secrets. How she longed for the sight of the red moon chasing her larger yellow sister across the heavens and it never ceased to amaze her when she caught a rare sighting of the dark moon playing see-me-now-see-me-not behind her sister moons. In those moments it was as if the mysteries of the universe were just within reach.

Poshi interrupted M’hali’s thoughts as the elder hunter paused to warm herself by the main fire pit and to take a portion of sweet grain mash in a carved gourd bowl.

Not particularly hungry herself, M’hali stretched out beside her aunt on the stones warmed by the constantly burning fire and worked out the last bit of tension in her body that was left in the wake of her troubling dream. She let her eyes wander around the room while she waited for Poshi to finish her morning meal.

A group of elders turned their cool stares in M’hali’s direction, seeming to disapprove of her very presence. Never having understood their consistent disdain, she twitched her whiskers in defiance and was rewarded with a dry huffing sound of shock from their direction. M’hali resisted lifting her cheeks in a complacent smile.

Maeta came into the common area and sat with her kits by the tunnel leading to the inner burrows, presumably to await Mihan. There she settled into conversation with some of the elder females who willingly took the opportunity to dote over her kits. Maeta looked on, her pretty features somehow appearing aged beyond her sixteen seasons.

Just as M’hali was contemplating approaching the troubled young mother, Rowin emerged from Pestal’s burrow. The First Consort gathered a few of the younger males from the common area and together they skirted the perimeter of the large chamber. As Rowin passed by, he caught M’hali’s eye and studied her for a moment before proceeding to the tunnel that led to the chamber where the males gathered to consult about sky signs and other secret matters.

M’hali felt slightly disturbed by the quality of Rowin’s brief stare, but she could not place her paw on the reason and quickly dismissed her feelings as a remnant of her strange dream. This thought reminded her that Poshi was certainly going to question her again about the dream and hoping to distract her aunt from bringing it up, M’hali decided to divert the conversation in a direction that was more comfortable.

“Aunt Poshi, why did Maeta say that Mihan needed practice with kits? At only thirteen seasons, she is practically a kit herself!”

“I should tell you to keep your nose out of other’s troubles, but regardless of my better judgment, I will tell you that Pestal’s youngest will be making a tribute to the Red Sister tonight”, Poshi murmured.

“Why is Mihan making such a tribute? I thought she would not be ready for a consort until after the rains return three times more.”

“Apparently her mother feels differently”, Poshi exclaimed quietly, but with obvious disapproval. “She will chose a consort for her daughter at the next meet.”

M’hali rose from her crouch so she could see Poshi’s face more clearly before she continued in a quiet voice, mindful of her surroundings. “But she is so young! Younger than me and were I allowed a consort, I would still have to wait for my birth celebration after Golden Grass passes into Sleeping Leaf!”

“She is too young and never doubt that she is afraid, M’hali”, Poshi spoke into her niece’s ear while she let her sharp eyes scan over the other clan members that were starting to gather near the fire. “Mihan seeks the favor of the Red Sister because she does not want to take the path her mother has laid out before her paws. She is desperate to escape her mother’s ambitions.”

M’hali was confused about what her aunt was trying to tell her and could not help questioning her further, “That is understandable, but why is Pestal so eager to see her daughter mated before her time? Why push for a union that is unwanted, at least by Mihan?”

Poshi did not reply, choosing instead to rise and turn her steps towards the light of the new day shining through a tunnel in the woven branches that protected the shallow cave-like common area. M’hali knew not to press her question. Her aunt wanted to talk, but not where sensitive ears could catch every word as it bounced off of the curved burrow walls.

M’hali once again followed obediently behind her aunt, knowing that Poshi would continue the discussion in due time. The young hunter was used to her aunt’s erratic behavior and even felt a touch of pride that the elder hunter confided in such delicate issues with her, as if M’hali’s opinions mattered regardless of her humble status within the clan.

As they proceeded outside, Poshi led the way rainward of the clearing in front of the burrow and set a leisurely pace towards a section of river that passed through the clan’s territory.

M’hali followed, content to cast her eyes over the magnificence of the great plains spread out in a vast living blanket that was barely contained by the mountains on the horizon. The only clan to have a better view of the valley was the Gray Rock Clan, but M’hali doubted that they had the time to appreciate it as she did.

The area around the rivers stayed green the greater part of a turn of the seasons, but in this time of verdant growth when every plant was fruiting and flowering, the entire plain took on an illusory quality. It was almost as if another world had descended upon the plains, visiting for a short span of time before retreating from the radiance of the hotter seasons. M’hali never tired of admiring this abundance of life, especially knowing that it would soon wither.

M’hali also took the opportunity to admire her aunt’s lithe form in the golden dawn light.

Eldest of three sisters, Poshi still carried herself with an elegance that would be more expected of a fennan half her forty-eight seasons. Her buff fur was the lightest of any other fennan, with only muted bands of slightly darker fur interrupting the fine color on her lower limbs and tail. Silky gray fur touched her muzzle and ear tips, but the silvering of her pelt only added to her unique beauty and did little to betray her many seasons. All together, the soft tones gave Poshi a deceivingly delicate appearance and many an opponent had come to regret underestimating her formidable aunt.

These thoughts unfortunately led to the more problematic ones of the troubling things that M’hali had been noticing more and more since before New Fruit.

Poshi was hurting. She hid her disability so well that only M’hali seemed to have noticed, but even the immovable Poshi could not stave off the most severe effects of her condition for long.

Even though M’hali could not see the swelling in her aunt’s paws, she could feel the distorted joints during the times when she groomed Poshi’s claws, a task she enjoyed as a way to show respect to her mentor. She had also noticed how Poshi moved with deliberate care more and more often. How long it would be until Poshi could not even walk anymore was in the paws of First Mother. M’hali shuddered at the thought.

This baffling disease seemed to strike as randomly as lightning and effected each victim differently. Boshin was one who also suffered the painful, swollen joints, but her condition seemed to be progressing as sluggishly as the rivers in the dry season. M’hali felt a twinge of bitterness towards the ancient chieftess of Gray Rock Clan. Why did her beloved aunt, the only mother she had ever known, have to suffer an ailment that seemed determined to consume her in pain as fast and hot as a wildfire while others seemed to be only inconvenienced?

These distressing thoughts distracted M’hali from her surroundings to the point that she almost collided with Poshi when her aunt stopped at the top of the riverbank. Cringing at the near miss, M’hali quickly veered to the side and came up alongside her aunt.

Thinking they would continue the conversation about Mihan, M’hali was momentarily baffled at her aunt’s next words.

“I can remember a time when another first daughter sought the help of the Red Sister”, Poshi spoke softly at first, eyes cast to the river below.

Poshi then continued in a solemn, yet strong voice, “She found herself in a very tentative position, swelling with kits, yet not from an approved consort. She obviously could not hide her state for long, so she spent a great deal of time out hunting and gathering on her own, but she knew she could not avoid her clan forever, so she tried every tactic she could think of to avoid detection.

She ate voraciously to fill out her body and constantly wore a large gathering pouch that hung in front of her belly, both tactics meant to disguise the growth of new life in her womb. Somehow, she even learned about some secret herbs that covered up her gravid musk sign.

She actually managed to conceal her pregnancy to the very end, but as her time drew near she knew this would not be an easy birth. In desperation, she made tribute to the most powerful aspect of the red moon and offered to pay any price to the Red Sister, to see her kits born safe.”

Poshi paused in her narrative and looked expectantly over at M’hali and her niece blinked as if waking from a dream.

The story of the unfortunate young hunter had woven a fine web of fascination over M’hali’s thoughts and she found herself so compelled by the tale that she blurted, “What happened next, ‘ana?!”, without even considering that she would have normally received a slap of a paw across her ears for such a rude interruption.

However, Poshi only blinked her golden eyes and lifted her cheeks in tender amusement before replying, “I will finish her tale, but only after a certain impertinent young kit tells me about her dream.”

M’hali felt her self deflate like a punctured redhock bladder as she found herself trapped by her aunt’s infallible wit, yet again.

Poshi had exploited her one weakness-the telling of tales. From kithood, M’hali could be made to do anything and obey any command, if only she could receive a story in return. She could not refuse now.

“I will tell you”, M’hali conceded. “But you must promise not to make too much of what I have to describe. I am sure my dream was just the result of too much bloodberry tea.”

“I promise nothing, but I will keep my observations to myself”, Poshi stated airily.

By the twinkle in her aunt’s eyes, M’hali knew she was enjoying her victory in forcing M’hali to fess up to her earlier denial that her dream did not affect her as much as it did.

With a sigh, M’hali closed her eyes and tried to decide how to start. Taking a deep breath, she began as the dream had, with the arrival of the strange scent in the air.

Poshi’s face tensed as M’hali progressed through relating the details of her dream and by the time she got to the point of describing the clearing, her aunt was up and pacing slowly around her.

“Then someone screamed my name”, M’hali’s features tightened as if she were in great pain. “Oh, ‘ana! It was the most heartbreaking sound I have ever heard and it made me feel as if I had done some great wrong and-”

M’hali stopped speaking, alarmed by the sudden change in her aunt’s scent. Was that fear in the air? She even glanced around, expecting to see one of the lower predators stalking them, but they were still alone on the riverbank.

“Aunt Poshi. What is wrong?”, M’hali asked.

Poshi finally settled heavily onto her haunches, but she was facing away from her niece when she commanded brusquely, “Continue.”

“There is no more to tell. I woke up right after that”, M’hali replied.

“I asked before and was not satisfied with an answer”, Poshi finally returned her gaze to her niece but it held a new intensity. “Have you had this dream before?”

“No, aunt”, M’hali answered quietly.

Poshi’s expression softened slightly as she continued, “Have you had any other dreams like this one?”

“My dreams are often a mystery, but I have always just considered them to be the dregs of the day as my mind clears my spirit of troubling thoughts.” M’hali paused, considering her next words carefully, “Even so, I have never had any dreams that made me fear for my very life!”

Her aunt’s only response was a slight lift of her brows.

M’hali felt something loosening inside of her heart. Regardless of her earlier reservations, she felt the relief of telling her aunt about her disturbing dream and she did want her aunt to tell her if it meant something important. Her worries were alleviated when Poshi continued.

“My dearest kit. There is nothing to fear in dreams.”

Poshi moved to sit beside M’hali, so that both could watch the waters of the river run full and joyful through the rolling plains. They took a moment to enjoy the rare green beauty around them before the elder hunter raised her paw and swept it lightly from one side to the other and spoke in a reverent voice, “Everything around you is a dream. It can not stay and must pass from this place eventually. Even the very rocks will crumble and vanish, but the dream remains.”

Poshi reached over and gathered her niece’s paws into her own, but when M’hali raised her eyes to her aunt’s she did not find the usual affection she expected to see there. In its place was a desperate sadness that instantly made M’hali feel as if claws of ice had pierced her heart.
“’Aunt Poshi?”, M’hali implored quietly.

Poshi’s mournful gaze traced M’hali’s features slowly and she seemed to be struggling to speak, but her paws remained firm and steady in M’hali’s grasp. When Poshi finally spoke it was in a whisper colored with so much love and regret that it nearly broke M’hali’s heart.

“Dreams do live on and anytime I need to see proof of that, all I have to do is look at you. Padeet’s spirit shines through in you, dearest and this gives me hope for the future”, Poshi finished on a shuddering breath and tears glazed her eyes, but the sudden radiance of fondness in her gaze prevented those tears from turning bitter.

M’hali was stunned beyond words. Little had her aunt spoken of M’hali’s mother in the past and although she was in agony to learn more, she had never pushed Poshi on the hurtful subject. She resisted even now, hoping her aunt was prepared to share more, but afraid to speak lest Poshi change her mind. She was both heartened and disappointed as her aunt continued.

“I know you have questions about your mother, M’hali and I will answer them soon, but for now what I need you to understand is that these uncertain times are breeding desperate actions among the fennan. The clans are pinned, as if under the claws of an unseen enemy who is poised to devour our very spirits. Now, more than ever is the time to know who is your friend and who is not. Do you understand?”

M’hali bobbed her ears reflexively. She did understand and had felt the tremors on the wind herself, but now there was no denying that darkness was coming; storm clouds just under the horizon.

“I have sensed the worsening tensions between the clans and I will be mindful of what is going on around me”, M’hali stated soberly. “I owe my clan nothing less than to be at my most diligent.”

Poshi’s expression softened slightly as pride for her niece showed through her sadness, but she grasped M’hali’s chin gently, making sure the young hunter looked her in the eye as she replied, “It swells my heart with gratification to hear you speak so, but I am a selfish creature, M’hali and I need you to promise me that you will always first pay heed to your own safety. You will still be helping the clan by guarding your own back, but it is you I fear for most.”

“Why? What danger is there to me?”, M’hali asked, brows lowered in bewilderment as she reached up and grasped her aunt’s paw.

“It is like your dream-the darkness reveals nothing, but I can sense something in the shadows, as if my spirit can hear this unknown threat rustling in the tall grass”, Poshi closed her eyes tightly, as if willing the danger to show itself to her, but she sighed in frustration. “Regardless, what worries me most is that I feel this unseen menace more strongly when I am near you. Just promise me that you will be careful and trust no one until they prove themselves as your true ally.”

“I promise, ‘ana. I will take what you say to heart” M’hali replied, noting that her aunt’s tension lessened only slightly.

M’hali looked out over the plains towards the windward horizon, fully expecting to see thunderheads rearing above the mountains, but she knew that the tempest she sensed would come without warning. She wished, as her aunt did that the signs could be clearer. The vague unease that had been plaguing her recently became more than just a feeling. Now both Poshi and Tessat had said enough to confirm that what she had been sensing deserved more attention.

Poshi lifted herself from the soft sands of the river bank and proceeded to the waters edge to drink. M’hali followed and savored the feeling of the cool mud on her pads. The warmth of the morning left no doubt that the season was turning.

Both fennan drank of the shimmering water until satisfied then Poshi turned towards sundowning to follow the river, taking the long way back to the burrow.

M’hali automatically fell in behind her mentor, but Poshi gave her flank a gentle slap with her tail, indicating that M’hali was excused from formality and could walk beside her instead. As their shoulders brushed, Poshi took advantage of the time they had left to continue their conversation.

“We are not the only ones feeling stalked, little one. As I was telling you back at the burrow, there are others who are feeling the hot breath of peril on the back of their neck.”

“Mihan”, M’hali instantly responded and was rewarded by her aunt’s quick ear twitch.

“There is nothing we can do to sway her course”, Poshi continued, “but she may need to know that there are some who hold sympathy in their hearts for her situation.”

“Yes, ‘ana. I understand”, M’hali answered the unspoken directive. “I will be there when she needs me.”

The two fennan walked on in silence for a time, playfully twining their tails.

“Aunt Poshi, there is one thing that troubles me greatly”, M’hali broke into the silence.

“Just one thing?”, Poshi asked in mock astonishment.

M’hali chuckled, “Yes, just one thing for now.” She continued in a very somber tone, “But it is a very grave and important matter.”

Poshi instantly became serious and gave her full attention to her niece.

M’hali hesitated, as if weighing the impact of her next words, then blurted out, “When do I get to hear the rest of the story that I am owed?”

Poshi stopped so suddenly that M’hali walked on several paw steps before she noticed that her aunt was no longer at her side. She turned to find Poshi sitting on the ground, shaking with laughter.

“Oh... you sneaky little... “, but Poshi could not continue and surrendered to the moment.

M’hali settled on to her haunches and simply waited, a self-satisfied smile playing across her face.

After Poshi had recovered herself she sat and gazed at M’hali with mirth still lighting her features as she finally found her voice. “Thank you, dear kit. I surely needed a lift to my spirit after such a grim conversation.”

“My only duty in this world is to see you happy, ‘ana”, M’hali replied, mirroring her aunt’s own words to express her devotion to her venerated mentor.

With a cry of joy, Poshi instantly came to M’hali and gathered her in a tight embrace. The strength still evident in the elder hunter’s arms slightly assuaged M’hali’s earlier worries about Poshi’s painful condition. After one final squeeze, Poshi released her niece, blinking back her tears.

Lifting her head and gathering her composure, Poshi exclaimed, “Well, I must honor my debt to you, surely and I will do so later when we can steal some more time to ourselves.”

“I would enjoy that very much”, M’hali stated as her eyes twinkled with genuine pleasure.

“But, for now Lenah is waiting for you to take her out gathering and I must attend to my other duties. You are not my only apprentice”, Poshi announced heartily before resuming the walk back to the burrow.

* * *


M’hali’s eyes lit up like green fire as she gazed at the Elderstar, checking the time that remained before dark. Fiery light touched the contours of the plains and stained every feature a uniform red. The wind picked up as the evening approached and she decided it was past time to collect Lenah and head back to the burrow.

Glancing downward from her sentinel perch in a dartwood tree, M’hali spied her young cousin digging at the base of an outcropping of rock, working hard to expose a large section of bitter root, specifically requested by the clan’s healer, Norsi to ease the congestion suffered by some of the elders.

“We have to return to the burrow soon”, M’hali called down to Lenah. “As it is, we will arrive after full dark and I do not want your mother to worry.”

Lenah shook dirt from her pelt then wiped her whiskers and replied without looking up, “I am almost done, M’hali. I just want to get this last piece and I will have gathered everything tasked to me today.”

M’hali gave the surrounding grassland one last glance with her sharp eyes and finding nothing alarming she worked her way down to the ground. By the time she rounded the rocks, Lenah had already retrieved her full gathering pouch and was padding her way towards M’hali.

“Alright, little nip, let us see how fast your are!”, M’hali cried before she bounded off into the tall grass. Lenah’s squeal of delight pierced the air behind her as the young fennan leaped in pursuit.

As M’hali had hoped, the game of chase got the pair back to the burrow before the time their absence would be questioned and both fennan used the last few paces to catch their breath.

“Thank you, M’hali! I always have fun when you take me gathering”, Lenah quipped excitedly as she rubbed her cheek against M’hali’s before disappearing into the burrow entrance, beaming with the energy and pride of a task well done.

M’hali glowed with affection for the enthusiastic kit. Her sister, Letah tended to be more serious and more difficult to engage in play, but M’hali was still disappointed that she had not joined Lenah in her duties. The poor kit was still recovering from a twisted paw and was restricted to her sleeping burrow.

Hopefully, she will heal quickly. There is nothing worse for a kit than to be forced to stay inside during this beautiful weather, M’hali thought as she turned her thoughts to her own nightly duties.

Perhaps she would hunt away from the river tonight. She usually loved to listen to the mudrats sing from their bank side dens, their mournful hoots and whistles creating a song that harmonized beautifully with that of the river waters, but tonight she preferred the subtler sounds of grass in the wind. Besides, with the moons waning, the glowflys would be out tonight and M’hali never tired of watching the playful fluttering of their incandescent wings.

Just as M’hali turned to head back out to the plains to hunt, a low voice came out of the darkness.

“You are very good with the kits, M’hali.”

M’hali twisted around, keen eyes seeking out the speaker in the shadows beside the burrow wall. Rowin’s broad form became apparent as he stepped forward, his eyes reflecting the star light.

“T-t-thank you, Rowin”, she stammered, but recovered quickly as she continued, “I greatly enjoy my time with the youngsters.”

“I noticed. In fact, I have noticed quite a few interesting things about you”, Rowin narrowed his eyes and continued to intently study M’hali.

Finding his silent scrutiny unnerving, M’hali decided to end the encounter. “I had better get to my hunting. Good evening, Rowin,” she backed away a few steps before turning towards the plains.

“I can see why my grandmother speaks so highly of you”, Rowin said quietly.

When M’hali turned to question his strange statement, he was already gone.

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14 Mar 2009:-) Lindsay Verde
YAY! It’s finally here! And just in time for me to steal the first comment! I shall come back in a few hours (fell asleep at 7pm without meaning to, and just woke up now and am heading off to bed properly now) but I’ll come back later in the morning to read and leave a nice long comment! Can’t wait 1

:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "Hey, I understand. In fact, I had an unexpectedly hectic weekend and haven’t been able to steal some time to myself to answer said comments yet.

The good news is that I may have found a townhome that I want to make an offer on. I am letting the idea stew today and I will contact my agent tomorrow. Eeee! I’m so scared and excited!"
14 Mar 2009:-) Lindsay Verde
Ahhh! I want to find out what Rowin is doing!!! Why is he so interested in M’hali and why is his grandmother talking about her? Can’t wait for more! And, beautiful as ever, m’dear! So beautifully poetic, it was such an easy read. Each sentence and paragraph just seemed to melt into the next seamlessly. The rest is commented on as I read:

Aw, M’hali is so cute when she calls her aunt ’ana -[gives her a big squeeze] frightening dreams are the worst! Good job of making the dream linger even after it was over with the little things M’hali does like reverting to calling her aunt ’ana, and the shaking legs.

Aw, Poshi’s concern for M’hali after her dream is so sweet. It’s neat the way you twist it around, because at first I thought Poshi was mad at her and then she walks into the sleeping burrow and you realize that it’s actually concern for M’hali.

Ooo, I really like the idea of them "hearing" their new kits’ names. Very neat!

Hmmm ... Rowin - that brief encounter really intrigued me! I want to know why he stared at M’hali.

I love the little sneak peeks we get into their day to day life through M’hali’s comments - like her grooming Poshi’s claws, and the two of them playfully twining their tails as they walk - it shows how caring this society is for itself. And I love how they interact together! You can feel the difference of the society in the way M’hali is very careful to be respectful of her aunt and mentor, but at the same time, there are precious little moments where they get to be just aunt and niece, like after M’hali made the comment about her duty being to see her aunt happy and her aunt hugs her - that moment was very precious. And the playfulness between M’hali and Lenah, and the cheek rub at the end - so affectionate.

Too long a comment - *grin*

:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "I was hoping to add a bit of intrigue regarding Rowin. *wink wink* If I do this right, the mystery will continue to get deeper and deeper. Bwahahahaha!

I’m glad you like the term, "’ana". I wanted a reference like, "nana", but different, so I just shortened it by removing the first "n" and added an apostrophe. The most important thing about this reference is that it emphasizes M’hali’s youth and the fact that she can be rattled by a bad dream. She’s got some heavy stuff coming her way and it will be interesting to see how she grows into her situation.

Poshi has her stern moments and her tender moments. With M’hali, it’s usually more of the latter, but Poshi does not want to raise her niece as a whimpering kit, so she is hard on her when the situation calls for it. I hope to have better examples of her stern side later on.

The idea for naming kits is inspired by some tribal customs, both African and Native American and there will be more on the subject. I just love the concept and it will come in to play later when we find out how M’hali was named. Oooooo.

I am so happy with what you have come away with in regards to the society. I tried not to make the culture too complex and focused more on the emotional bonds and intense relationships. I hope to create and maintain a very solid mix of the good and the bad, but I fully intend to tip the scales to the extreme as well. I don’t want the story to be boring, now do I? 12


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14 Mar 2009:-) Lindsay Verde
I can’t wait to meet some of these other creatures you’ve mentioned in this section! They sound quite interesting, like the slipjaws.

I wanna hear the rest of the story! I can’t help feeling that Poshi is talking about M’hali’s mother ... but one should never assume *grin*

I love the way they talk! Favourite lines: "A hunter of the plains was most confident during the darkest span of the evening, but this cloying darkness felt like the death of night itself!" "It seems to me that this dream had teeth." "I can hardly remember what it was about, now that the day has banished the darkness from behind my eyes." "The new day has put fire in their blood!" “My dreams are often a mystery, but I have always just considered them to be the dregs of the day as my mind clears my spirit of troubling thoughts.”

:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "I hope to get some more drawings up soon. I am really eager to draw the slipjaws and the redhocks.

Now remember, Poshi has had a lot of apprentice hunters under her wing and she could be referring to any of them. She teaches first daughters, second daughters, third daughters, and those who are more distantly related. But, don’t worry. We’ll hear more about M’hali’s mum too! 14

Thank you so much for your feedback on the language. Like most other things about the fennan, I wanted to keep it simple. However, in saying that I also wanted their speech to be somewhat lyrical in the way they describe things. They only have what is around them to use as a basis of comparison, but it does inspire their language a great deal. I just put myself into that world and the words seem to come naturally.

Please don’t hesitate if you notice any slips in the language. I will not be surprised if something casual slips in there at some point. *sheepish grin*"
14 Mar 2009:-) Lindsay Verde
I could have just read it earlier this morning ... for I didn’t end up falling asleep for another 4 hours! Ugh! I’ve always heard people talk about not being able to fall asleep and just thought they didn’t lie there long enough ... so not true! I lay for 40 minutes before I gave up. I think it was a combination of excitement of reading M’hali when I woke up and having a bit of free time from school to work on my own writing and possibly getting a ticket in the queue this weekend sometime. Now I look like a raccoon! But I’m all rested and ready to face the new day! Whoppee!! Off to go and work on some writing!

:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "I think I’ve answered your comments out of order, so I am already dancing in my seat about Shatterglass.

I like the thought that you were so excited about reading M’hali that you couldn’t sleep. Awwww. 12"
18 Mar 2009:-) Sarah ´Ash´ Koch
Beautifully described as usual.....i loved how you described the dream....and later it was nice to see the interaction between M’hali and other members of her clan...still many questions that leave me wanting more and I’m really curious about Rowin....i simply cant wait for more....2

:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "Eeeee! I am so happy that the story has you curious and wanting to know more. That is the best thing to hear right now, since I wasn’t sure if I was building enough mystery into the plot. Woo hoo!

I’m also happy that you enjoyed the character interactions. I hope the next chapter is even better with the clan meet coming up. You’ll get to meet many more characters.

Thank you so much, Sarah! I reeeeeeally appreciate you reading my story and letting me know what you like. 1"
19 Mar 2009:-) Glo 'the Bug' Bowden
I’m so sorry that it took me so long to get my tuckus over here. It being the week of and around St. Pat’s, you can imagine an Irish dancer would be very busy, yup yup.

I really enjoyed reading this section. The way the dream was described reminded me of dreams I’ve had. The way little familiar yet unfamiliar things made her nervous really set the tone.

I already adore Poshi. She’s the strong maternal figure I like to see in stories. At first she made me nervous, but you can see how much she really cares for M’hali and her clan. She’s strong because she loves. And I loved all of their interaction. I chuckled out loud and couldn’t stop smiling when M’hali whipped out that "There’s just one thing that troubles me" kicker that had Poshi laughing. (Then, of course, I realized that you wouldn’t be telling us the ending to Poshi’s tale about the mother fennan in this chapter - ah, such cruelty!)

Rowin has definitely caught my interest. As has young Mihan, poor thing. I’m a bit confused at what makes one a "First Daughter" - I just assumed it was the first born of a First Daughter, but Mihan is Maeta’s younger sister.

I love how you’re developing this culture, by the way. Absolutely incredible how much detail you’ve put into it. It’s interesting to me the way this cast system works, and that little motions can mean so many things. - like the way there was offense at M’hali’s whisker-twitch-of-defiance.

What I love most is the way you the writer have delved so much into the culture that you can write as though truly immersed in it. The manner of story telling is so well done. Hot-diggity, I knew you would be so good at this! 2 Didn’t I always tell you? eh? eh?

:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "Don’t even worry about it. I’m sure your tootsies are still smok’n! *lol* I gleaned from your email that you had a veeeery busy and fun weekend. 1

I’m glad the dream read well. I wanted to somehow show that M’hali was experiencing things that are completely new and different to her, not things she encounters on the plains, but still comparable. It was interesting to write about a forest for a character who had never seen one.

I am so happy that you like Poshi! She is such a fun character to write and so pivotal in M’hali’s life that it is imperative that I get her right. In a way, Poshi is M’hali’s emotional barometer and crucial to setting the right tone for what is coming. Poshi pretty much represents the elder generation in the clans, at least those who have not fallen under a malaise of superstition and fear.

Sorry ’bout cutting off Poshi’s story. The rest will come in time. 12

Rowin is a very intriguing character. I am going to have lots of fun with him! *hehehe*

Oops. Not good if there’s confusion about first daughters. I hope I have not made the family ties too confounding. First daughters are those born by the chieftess. In turn, their daughters are second daughters and theirs are third daughters and so on. It is not always forbidden for sisters or cousins of the chieftess to have babies, but the privilege is usually reserved for favored relations and often used for strategic purposes.

Mihan and Maeta are both first daughters, but born at different times. There will be more on this subject in chapter 3, but it may be that I will have to add some more reference chapter 2. Hmmm. I must ponder this.

I’m very excited that the story is going so well, thus far. I hope to maintain the level of writing and I will use all the wonderfully helpful feedback I have been receiving to go with what is strong and to fix what is weak about the writing.

Your awesome comments are priceless! Thank you sooooooo much!

By the way, did you happen to notice mention of a certain little creature toward the end of the chapter, when M’hali is thinking about where she wanted to hunt that evening, right before Rowin speaks to her? Hint-it flys. Tee hee!

Edited to add: Yes! You did tell me I’d be a good writer. How can I possibly thank you enough for providing all that encouragement? I shall be in debt for eternity. I hope my stories are enough to pay part of the bill. 12 Maybe if I get busy and finish the Leohna pic, that’d help too. *lol*"
20 Mar 2009:-) Glo 'the Bug' Bowden
Hee hee, I just want to take some credit in the brilliance written above by being able to say "I knew it all along!" I’m already learning much from the way you write, just like I learn a lot about art through your style.

OH my goodness! How could I forget to mention?! Must have been too much of the dance this week (there are things more intoxicating than the drink, methinks!12) - I was grinning from ear to ear, positively turning glowing as it were, when I heard mention of a certain glowing insect in this story! You are seriously tres awesome, Barb!13

- YESS! I was right! I was thinking she was dreaming of the forest, but I didn’t want to say it in case I was wrong. You put it all so very cleverly! And by the way, I like her full name. Muthali - I was wondering where the apostrophe came from.

Ah, now I understand the first daughter bit a good deal better.

Edited to add: Oops, I totally wasn’t finished, but I hit post. Ha ha! Yes, I understand the first daughter better, and I probably just needed to read a bit more thoroughly, as i’m sure it was mentioned somewhere.

I am soooo sooooooo excited for the Leohna picture, you have no idea. I’m saddened that it’ll take time away from writing M’hali, though. ): And you know you’ve returned any piddling encouragement I’ve given you a thousand fold, what with all your TCLN comments and pictures, and let’s not go into all the incredible insight you’ve given to my art. I totally don’t deserve you, Barb. You’re the best! 1

:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "I have to admit that I still lack some confidence about my writing, but your comments have helped my get out of the "worry about everything being perfect" zone and into the "It’s all a learning process" zone". However, I’m still a little bemused that others are actually entertained by my stories. How cool is that?!

I knew I wanted to put glowflys in the story from the moment I started creating the other beasties. I am so happy to have you turning glowing again. That has become the ultimate compliment! 3

A random note on the spelling of glowflys-one would expect the spelling to be more like butterflies, but I thought that in spelling the -flies as -flys I could keep it consistent with how literally the fennan name things in their world. The bugs glow and fly, thus glow-flys. Does that make sense? Probably not. *lol*

Regarding the dream. Please say so if my descriptions are too vague. I don’t want to just come out and say "forest" anywhere in the dream, because M’hali has no idea what she’s seeing yet, but I need the reader to know.

Don’t blame yourself for not understanding the first daughter thing. I still think I may need to go back and clarify the clan hierarchy better in chapter 1 and 2, but I will wait and see how chapter 3 goes before making a final decision.

I knew it was going to be difficult to introduce such a complex society, but I want to reveal things in step with the story and not throw a bunch of trivia at the reader, all at once. Hopefully, by chapter 4 the reader should have a good grasp of how things go in fennan society and the focus will be more on the plot and characters from that point on. I hope... 17

The good thing is that my chapters are relatively short, so adding stuff isn’t too difficult.

M’hali. Muthali. There’s some interesting things about the two names and the reason for the abbreviation. Word of caution-don’t assume too much yet. *hehehe*

Are you kidding?! You sooooo deserve someone to admire and encourage your amazing talents! We have a pretty good system going here, don’t we? We inspire each other in ways that helps each of us move forward, one step at a time. It’s like leap-frog! *boing boing* 18

Now, back to poor Leohna! I’m almost finished with the background and ready to start on the lovely lady herself. Wheeee!

*BIG HUGS*




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21 Mar 2009:-) Glo 'the Bug' Bowden
*BIIIIG hugs back!* 1

I think the forest description is a bit vague, but masterfully so. You’ve used a technique I fondly think of as "making-the-reader-feel-smart"- meaning, you put it in such a way as to point the conscientious reader in the right direction and make them figure it out on their own, and yet, it’s not too difficult if you’ve really read the book thus far (with all the hints about the forest in earlier chapters, I mean). Not many authors can pull that trick off, and end up having to bludgeon the reader over the head sometimes. You took a risk, and the effect is excellent.

I’m not putting this properly into words, but I honestly think you did a good job and I don’t think you should change it. (I would tell you if I thought it could use work. You know that, right?) I like the slight obscurity because, as you said, we are seeing it through M’hali’s lens. And it makes me, as the reader, feel smart (Hence its called the "making-the-reader-feel-smart" technique. Lol).

Glowflys - I think its a clever idea to spell it that way! Aww... Yay! *gets a happy mental of M’hali with the Glowflys* 1

I was hesitant to mention my confusion over the first daughters thing, because I had a feeling you meant to reveal that detail later in the story. I see that was the intention. Sometimes its hard to critique when you don’t have the whole novel, heh.

Already done with the background? Man, you’re flyin’ with this aren’t ya? *looks guiltily at stacks of unfinished art trades* I really shouldn’t get into these things if I can’t get out of them, should I? *takes a defibrillator to comatose art-muse* ZAP! She’s sleeping again. Poor thing can’t usually handle more than one project at a time. -_-’


:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "Masterful? Really-really? *squeal* I’m thrilled you think so and your opinion means so much to me. Thank you!

I know you’d tell me if something does not work. You have already done so and your feedback is extremely helpful and very much appreciated. Please excuse my silly insecurities.

I definitely want to make the reader feel smart. I so dislike it when an author "talks down" to the reader. Being a storyteller does not mean one should try to impress the reader with fancy words, as if we are unworthy of one’s vast knowledge and talent. Sheesh!

So, about the first daughter thing, do you think it is okay to introduce aspects of the society in the way I am doing it? I mean, certain things are revealed as they become pertinent in the plot. I feel pretty good about it, but I just wanted to make sure, one more time, that this works without causing any burden to the reader.

Please don’t ever be hesitant to mention ANY LITTLE THING that stands out, or causes you even a moments pause. If you have to question it, I want to make sure that it is intentional on my part. Know what I mean?

I am currently painting the lilies and I am taking extra care with the flowers since they are the dominant light source and I want it to look otherworldly and ethereal. Fun stuff!

Your muse just needs a recharge, I’m sure. My muses had a great idea... *sends muses on a group weekend getaway to the tropics*"
21 Mar 2009:-) Glo 'the Bug' Bowden
I definitely think its ok to reveal it as you go. Too much at once would be one of those bludgeoning the readers things again - and usually when all the details come too quickly the reader can’t keep them all in his/her head and then gets lost. It’s too soon to say with the First Daughter bit, because I was curious about it from the get-go, and might have liked to learn about it sooner, but then again, we are only in chapter 2. 2

Hey! The muses are going on vacation without us? Not fair! *sigh* Oh well, so long she comes back recharged, I ain’t complainin’. 12

:-) Barbara J Wickham replies: "That’s what I was hoping, so it’s nice to get an affirmation. I definitely don’t want to throw too much at the reader because I don’t enjoy it when an author does that to me. I don’t like to feel like I have to take notes to understand what’s going on! *lol*

I will definitely wait until chapter 3 is finished and reviewed before I decide if I need to add more to the previous chapters. Thank you so much for helping me work this out. 1

Yeah, not fair, but at least I can get some work done on my in-progress stuff before they get back and start throwing new ideas at me! Eeeee! "
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