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"Spin Forever Down" by Holly ´bat baby´ Davidson

SciFi/Fantasy text 23 out of 31 by Holly ´bat baby´ Davidson. ←Previous - Next→

just a disturbing little poem of yet another person falling. this is aobut some little chick who fell into the clutches of death

Spin me down

Around and around

Sing the spin

The heaven I'm in

Spin me down

Hear the sound

The small light ring

Is this a sin?

Spin me down

Feel the fall

I love the rain

Cool and wet

Spin me down

Hear me call

Are we sane?

Down we go, we've just met

Spin me down

Am i alive?

Where am i?

Am i going to die?

Spin forever down

Down we dive

You may cry

For you have died

Date	Name	Comment
29 Aug 2003	Alice Muffin Girl Smith	Loading... I liked the playful air of this. eyes it warily And that last story has just made me give up entirely on catching your typos... You need to edit, girlie. PS: sluggish dance of the first comment Holly 'bat baby' Davidson replies: "beets her microsoft word gramer and spell check button within an inch of its life i tryied i really did"
5 Sep 2003	Camilla 'Motone' Whitney	Loading... Someone should write msuic o this (hands ar cold, too laxy to fix bad typing_ Holly 'bat baby' Davidson replies: "that would be cool! any takers out there?"
12 Sep 2003	Krissy 'John Marie' Jones	Loading... ooooooooooooooooo...... so coooool! To me, it's not about death, but about giving in to the temptation to lust..... I just saw a girl giving up and forfeiting her sacred innocence.... how dark and unsettling. I loved it! Great job! Holly 'bat baby' Davidson replies: "DARK UNSETTLING WOOOOOOOT"