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"Three Shades Of A Raven" by Holly ´bat baby´ Davidson

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a sort of poem....i did this before i did lady bird shores...i just haddnt typed it....yeah
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A girl named faith walked out

one moon lit evening

to the garden sideing her house

and from up in a tree,a boy she spied

curiosity over came her fear



she spoke to the boy

and when he came down,

in his arms was a crumpled

injured

raven



the next day she went

to lord Allan's manor

who did she meet but the boy

who cradled

the raven



Allan invited her in

and she spoke with him

becoming his nurse

for Allan was sick ,

his life failing



Faith stayed with the boy

Gabriel

paler than starlight,

eyes bluer than sapphires



it wasn't long when she met his brother

Lysander

his hair, blacker than the dark side of the moon,

one eye emerald, the other of gold



day by day she felt she grew

fond of the blue eyed one

Gabriel

she knew she had fallen in love



Gabriel in turn loved her

with a love stronger than stone

fierce as hornets

soft as fleece



Lysander marked down

first shade of a raven



For the twin brothers

were trapped, unknown to faith,

trapped in a gilded cage, disguised

by the manner



they had fates frightening

to be known

and that's why Allan trapped them

so perhaps he could control



but as the moon waxed,

Allan grew weaker

he had fallen into his death bed

with his passing, their freedom



all they could do was wait

hoping that faith couldn't

save him

hoping that his passage

would set them free



And

Gabriel and Faith had a love

that made all others fade'

and when they kissed, starlight glowed

all along, Faith not knowing

What Gabriel was



Lysander Marked down

second shade of a ravens wing,

a tear in his eye



Allan died four days later

the brothers freed,

they had to leave

and in doing so, leaving Faith



So Gabriel told her



We are Life and Death

Allan trapped our souls

in the manner

now, we are free



I love you

Faith Cried

you cant be death

he world skipped a spin



Lysander marked down

third shade of a ravens wing

as her mortal tears fell

he left his brother

death to say goodby



her tears fell on his chest

bringing a fire

one by one, his fathers fell

untill there was nothing but bone

a gust of wind, blew away and he

was mortal



her tears made him mortal,

to return to his job when

he died

Death sleeps in the arms of Mortals



Angels Fall





















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20 Oct 2002:-) Krissy 'John Marie' Jones
Wow.... This is just... just.... man, there aren't words for this. It's awesome, Holly! Just wonderful.
20 Oct 2002:-) Raven Star
This is awsome!!!!!!!
16 Aug 200345 John Teall
"Death sleeps in the arms of mortals"
would that they could awaiken and know

=^^=
.../\...

1 Holly 'bat baby' Davidson replies: "that is so trippy!"
21 Aug 2003:-) Camilla 'Motone' Whitney
I'd suggest that you look over this, rewrite it (or at least revise.. add some cool descriptions, maybe expand on it a bit) and turn a cool poem into an awesome poem.

:-) Holly 'bat baby' Davidson replies: "ok....i am edditing everything else now so...yes"
29 Aug 2003:-) Alice Muffin Girl Smith
...so many typos... you even confuse "fathers" with "feathers"...

I'd have liked this, I like poems that tell a story, but the typos... dear god, they're every where... *is in deep shock* Do you even read over your things once after you write them? The bigger tales it seems like you do, but seriously, these little ones... and the poems... oh god... so many easy-to-catch typos... Try reading your stuff back to yourself aloud...

*falls into a coma from sheer shock*
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'Three Shades Of A Raven':
 • Created by: :-) Holly ´bat baby´ Davidson
 • Copyright: ©Holly ´bat baby´ Davidson. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Angle, Death, Gabriel, Life
 • Categories: Faery, Fay, Faeries, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Celtic
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