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"Of Humans and Elves, Part 9" by Ben Cameron

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Of Ships and Syracuse

      Niell found himself staggering rather unsteadily across the deck of the Akkadian, precariously avoiding the salt-encrusted men who moved easily on the heaving vessel.  Apparently the stereotypical abilities of the Promised: poise, grace and speed, had been filtered out along with his memories.

      Ever since they left the calm waters of the coastline, the waves had increased daily, some to the point of crashing over the sides.  His clothes had long gone stiff from the salt spray and his skin was as rough as the wood beneath his feet.

      Although walking was like trying to stand on a moving ball, he was thankful for one thing: he had yet to be sick.

      A twospan from the railing, Niell lurched one final time, clutching onto the sea-smoothed timber.  The dark green waves, capped by white foam, swirled beneath the ship’s bow.  Grateful to be holding onto something firm and steady, Niell lost himself in the infinite depths of the water.

      He jumped as something swept beneath the boat, disappearing in a matter of seconds despite its considerable size.

      Niell turned to call out to someone, only to see Dakan striding towards him, heedless of the swaying floor beneath him and with a sense of purpose in his eyes.  With one plate-like hand, he carried a large, rusted canister over one shoulder.  Protruding out, was the sharpest, and deadliest, instrument of pain Niell had ever seen and it was pointed straight at him.  Niell realised not a single person onboard was making a sound.

      Dakan’s ire was a dangerous thing, as Niell had seen on the few occasions a sailor had been drunk enough to call attention to himself.  At those times, even Niell was cowed by his dominating presence.  Any transgression earned his direct attention and once aroused, there was no placating the man.

      Unfortunately, there were few places that he could avoid Dakan, even on a ship the size of the Akkadian.

      Niell tried to release his grip, but his body refused to hold itself upright on the pitching deck.

      “Step away from the railing, Niell.  Now.”

      It took Niell a few moments to realise he wasn’t the one about to be skewered like a piece of meat from the local vendors in Kailas’ docks.  By then, Dakan had reached him.  Still, Niell could not move, but Dakan’s one free hand merely grasped his shoulder and wrenched him to the ground behind.  Niell fell ungraciously, his knees and hands scraping across the planking.

      From the ground, Niell saw various other sailors gathering together, some on the rigging, others on either side and yet more on the poop deck.  Only a skeleton crew, to ensure the ship stayed on course, were unarmed and actively moving about.  The rest held contraptions on par with Dakan’s.  All this was done in silence; the only sound that of the wind whipping the sails.

      With a creak of metal and wood, a small catapult, not much bigger than a man, was hauled to the balustrade nearest Niell.  Behind it came two sailors, heaving a fleshy, rotting carcass of what Niell could only assume used to be a camel.  Mere seconds later, the remains were sent flying, leaving a gruesome path of entrails and blood spattered across the surface of the ocean, until it splashed a fiftypace from the boat.

      It floated obscenely, bobbing in the waves.  As the Akkadian sailed on, leaving it ever further behind, Niell climbed to his feet and grabbed onto the railing to watch it.  Dakan again pulled him back a few paces, but held him upright.  The silence continued, an expectant hush over those crowded on the deck.

      In a explosion of blood, teeth and water, a twentypace leviathan launched itself into the air, the carcass gripped firmly in its jaws.  In a flash of aquamarine scales, the denizen of the waves crashed back into the ocean, jetting up water from either side of it.  The swell, even at that distance, sent the Akkadian into a series of sudden drops and climbs.

      With the last of the waves subsiding, the men began stowing their weapons and then continued with their jobs to keep Dakan’s ship sailing smoothly.

      “What in the Gods names was that?”

      “A nereus.”  He said this so nonchalantly that Niell questioned what he’d just seen.  “If ye’ll excuse me, I can’t be here jawing all day.  My ship won’t run ‘erself.”

      “Wait!”  Niell grabbed Dakan’s arm.

      Dakan turned, clenching Niell’s hand in his.  “When on board my ship, ye listen to my orders.  I ‘ave a job that needs doing, and I can’t be here speakin’ to you all day.”  His tone was the epitome of politeness, but his grip, slowly crushing Niell’s hand, conveyed a message all of its own.

      Dakan about-turned and continued up to the poop-deck where he’d originally been heading.  Thoroughly chastised, Niell stood there, loosely shaking his limp hand till a sudden wave sent him sprawling.  In his two weeks aboard, he had picked up quite a few of the sailors’ words, and he used them to full effect now.

      Niell saw Inari and Terraic laughing at him from the stern; they had had little trouble adjusting their footstep to the rocking of the boat.  Terraic getting by with experience from his previous times on the open seas and Inari’s grace from dancing serving her well enough.

      As he climbed the few steep steps up to the stern to talk with them, Terraic called out.

      “Beautiful, was it not?”

      Niell hauled himself up the last step, moving out onto the open deck.  “Beautiful?  It could have destroyed the Akkadian as easily as it took the camel.”

      “I said beautiful, not harmless.  They’re majestic, intelligent creatures.  Dangerous, yes, but not particularly so when treated correctly.  Besides, they know Dakan; he has a limited form of communication with them via magic.  He feeds them and they chase off other predators from his boat.”

      “So why the weapons?  What were they, by the way?”

      Terraic scratched his beard, trying to remember.  “Oh, the harpoons?  They’re his safety measure: reinforced wood with sharpened stone heads.  If it comes to it, Dakan’s more than willing to defend himself, though he would rather see them go unharmed.”

      “They really are beautiful creatures.  Their scales fetch a fine price on the market back at Kailas; there aren’t many left now.”  Inari sounded wistful, though whether that was from talk of Kailas or the nereus, Niell wasn’t sure.

      “Count yourself lucky that you saw one, had we not been sailing with Dakan, they would likely not have appeared.  They’re normally nocturnal, though they have been known to play at the surface in unusually rough storms.”  Terraic glanced back, as though hoping for another glance of the graceful giants.

      “Just how big do they get?”  Niell couldn’t get over how huge it was.  There was something frightening about a beast that size free to do anything it wanted when they were out of sight of any land.

      “It’s impossible to tell.  Some say they never stop growing.  That’s a load of nonsense if you ask me, but the biggest ever captured by the nereus hunters was over fiftypace.  There’s not much in the world that can compete with a monster that big.”

      Niell nearly choked.

      “Don’t fret, Niell.  Dakan knows what he’s doing.  The only thing we have to worry about are the scout ships of Syracuse.”

      “Well that’s a lot of help, I feel so much more secure.  Why do we have to worry about them?”

      “They’ve been known to attack first and then worry about who it was.  Especially when the ship comes from Ishtar.”

      Now Inari choked.  “I didn’t know there was still hatred from the Border Feuds.  They were over a hundred years ago.  How likely is it we’ll be attacked?”

      “Time, it appears, does little to appease things.  As you’ll see, their very existence was almost destroyed by the Ishtarians.  However, although it is possible, it’s unlikely that we’ll be attacked.  We have no blades nor other weapons aboard, something their mages check for immediately and the flag of Soleil should give us some safety as well, if not much.”

~ * ~

      Three weeks into the journey and the Akkadian had travelled south down the west coast of Ishtar, before following the setting sun to skirt the Badlands, the unmapped and unpopulated desert of south-western Ishtar.  Now, they moved ever closer to Syracuse and were expected to sight land within twoday.

      Niell had finally mastered the movements of the boat and walked about as easily as the others.  Besides a few nights disturbed by his nightmares, life aboard the Akkadian was simple.  Breakfast was a simple affair, if enjoyed at all.  It involved one or two pieces of dried fruit and several hard ship biscuits.  Lunch was sometimes taken, consisting of much the same as breakfast.  Dinner was the only time they had meat, always dried and salted.  It wasn’t too bad, Niell reflected, though he gagged at remembering how difficult it had been to swallow the salt-coated meat for the first week.  It had almost been as hard as the biscuits.

      Peace had been made between Dakan and Niell, primarily on Niell’s half to appease his own guilt.  Not that Dakan had ever taken much offence, indeed, he’d almost forgotten it as soon as it had happened.  He had a ship to run and even with the magic of the Promised, it was a full-time task.

      Life was pretty good, Niell thought, as he stared into the waters beneath.  There was a certain allure about the mysteries of water, something that kept dragging him to the sides as they sailed onwards.

      The waters racing past reflected a dazzling display of liquid light, mirroring the cloudless sky above them.  The ropes creaked and strained, reigning in the billowing sails that caught the northerly winds.  Somewhere back, a particularly rowdy sea-shanty was encouraging the sailors to rig up the spinnakers to make full use of the latest wind called up by Dakan.  All this was picked up by Niell as he gazed out from the bow.

      Standing alone, trying to fathom out his past and dreams, Niell was not the first to see the approaching ship.  Nor did he immediately realise what the shouts from the crows nest meant.  When he did catch sight of it, however, he understand implicitly the meaning of the red sail flying proudly on its mast.

      The others on board caught on quicker, though.  There was a sudden scramble to ensure all available sails were up and secure.  Groups of two or three sailors swarmed the rigging to guarantee the sails were fastened on tightly.  Others prepared crude implements to fend off boarders, since no real weapons were on board: the few doors available were broken down into spars, brooms were requisitioned and even their knives from dinner were assigned a secondary function.

      Dakan oversaw it all from the stern as he began making measures for the elements to help them foil the incoming attack.

      Niell found himself pushed into the sleeping quarters, along with Inari and Terraic.  The inexperienced and elderly were definitely not wanted in the way at a time like this.

      “I thought you said they wouldn’t attack!”  Niell’s movements and thoughts were flustered.

      “To clarify, I said they probably would not attack without due reason.”  Terraic sat still, conserving his energy and preparing himself for any magic that would be called upon shortly.

      “Well, so much for due reason.  They’re attacking, aren’t they.”

      Inari sat still on a bunk.  Only the relentless tapping of her foot gave away her nervousness and tension.

      “Perhaps they have a reason; maybe they took gratuitous offence at Ishtarians in their waters, or scried a small blade.”  Terraic shook his head slowly, thinking everything through.

      Niell snapped his mouth shut.  He had suddenly just turned very cold.  The dirk.

 

      Outside, on the open waters, the Akkadian was just close enough to make out their soon-to-be combatants.  Bronze reflected golden from their weapons and armour and the culmination of a war-chant rang across the waves.

 

      Terraic immediately sensed Niell’s change.  “Niell?  What’s wrong?”

      No response could be elicited from the silent Niell.

      “What is it, Niell?  Tell me!”  Terraic leaned across to grab Niell’s shoulders and shook him hard.

      He mumbled out a few, incoherent words, then spoke a littler clearer.  “Riling.  He gave me a dirk.”

      Terraic’s response was swift and decisive.  “You fool of a boy!”  He slapped him across the face, leaving an vicious print behind.  “You’ve risked us all with your selfish attitude.  I told you to bring nothing.  Nothing!  You have only yourself to blame for this in this endeavour.”

      Niell clasped his hands to his face, attempting to ease the pain and control his raging emotions.

 

      With only a hundredpace measured between the two ships, the reflected golden bronze of the Syracurians’ armour waned rapidly.  Overhead, clouds gathered en masse in a swirling tempest.  Darkness covered the ocean, turning blue water to darkest green.  The beginning sheets of lightning ripped across the sky, lighting up the two rain-drenched vessels.

      For an instant, all eyes were on the storm that had appeared.  Dakan, likewise, watched  the encroaching storm.  He was amazed at its raw energy, its unfocused nature.  Unguided streams of power poured out into the firmament where they were absorbed by the already angry clouds, increasing their ferocity immeasurably.  Whoever was controlling it, they had no training at all but enormous potential.

      As the rain poured down, the large drops exploding over his body, drenching him immediately, Dakan thought to the Akkadian.  She would never survive such a squall with all her sails up, her mast would be snapped as easily as a twig, but there was little he could do at this late stage.  Instead, he delegated control and sent his own mind spiralling up into the sky in an attempt to reign in whatever power it was that had called the elements together.

 

      Niell’s vision tunnelled as the first of the waves were sent cascading over the Akkadian, propelled as they were by the raging winds.  His felt the energy springing from his body, but could direct nothing.  He vainly wrestled it, grappling with the power that railed against his will.  Eventually, he lost all control and it sprang out unhindered.  The master turned to mastered as Niell fought the urge to submit to the darkness, struggling to remain conscious.

      Terraic immediately sensed the surge of unrestrained power and even Inari jumped up, startled by the tangible sense of magic in the air.  Like Dakan, Terraic was startled by the immense power emanating out.  “Fire, wind and water?  What else do you have to show us, Niell?”

      The ship rocked as a series of waves crashed into it, followed by the unmistakable crack of a mast snapping.

 

      Dakan only half registered the resounding fracture of one of the Akkadian’s three masts.  His mind was busy attempting to control the storm above.  It had caught both him and the Syracurians unaware, and the results were devastating.  All thoughts of boarding and repelling had disappeared.

      Lightning had struck his enemy’s ship, igniting a fire too hot for even the rain to douse.  Sails flapped wildly in the air, having torn loose from their mainstays and sailors clung onto whatever they could find to avoid being swept overboard.

      Waves, flung up by the tempest, knocked both boats around, sending them in new directions almost as soon as they had been heading in a different one.  Above, the black clouds swirled in a deadly dance of nature.

      It was to the final plummet of his heart that Dakan felt the coming of the nereus.  Two, if he wasn’t mistaken.  With a quick prayer to the Ancients, Dakan cast caution to the winds and focused his direction and will on the nereus.  He couldn’t allow them to destroy his boat in their innocuous play.

      The Syracurians did not have a similar safety measure.  As the first nereus leapt out of the water, it clipped the starboard side of their boat, it’s scales gauging a hole in its side.

 

      Hearing the yells of those outside as the nereus cavorted in the storm and yet another mast cracked, Terraic took the only option left open to him.  Tracing the radiating power back to Niell, Terraic brutally slammed down, returning the flow back to its source: Niell.

      Niell collapsed to the ground, limbs akimbo.

 

      Removed from its power source, the thunderstorm quickly rained itself out.  As the clouds turned from black, to grey, and then to white, the burgeoning sunlight lit a terrible scene.  Sailors from both vessels clung to the wreckage in the water: broken spars, floating sails and fragments of the Syracurian ship, Belmira, splintered by the two nereus.

      That ship was impossible to repair, especially on the seas.  A fire still burnt steadily, slowly making its way down to the deck and all their sails, shredded in the howling winds, were now half-submerged in the water.  The Akkadian had suffered a similar fate, although thanks to Dakan’s efforts, it was still sea-worthy to an extent.  Two of its three masts were snapped, and all but one of its sails were shredded.  The main hull, though, was still intact as was its rudder.

      A rescue team was quickly organised, collecting both Ishtarian and Syracurian sailors washed overboard as well as the items needed to repair the Akkadian to a sufficient level to make it to Syracuse.

      Considerably lower in the water with an extra crew and waterlogged as she was, the Akkadian limped south to the shores of Syracuse.

 

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26 Mar 200445 D Joelle Duran
Excitement!
Great description in this chapter. I really liked the nereus, and also how you described that storm and the havoc it wrecked.
Poor Niell--nothing's going right for him here. Can't walk across a ship, unwittingly precipitates attack, calls the storm...etc.
*hugs Niell and rushes off to next chapter*

:-) Ben Cameron replies: "My latest two chapters seemed rather heavy on description, so it's good it seemed to work. Things do get better for Niell, and he learns some lessons along the way.

Thanks for reading!"
26 Mar 200445 Nora Stel
Hey! You there! Yes, you... you didn't warn me you had part 9 and 10 up, did you? Not good! Let me know next time!

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*First comment dance*

I like it! I like the way Niell is acting a bit nicer and more sane. I like the new creatures you introduced. I like Dakan (this guy rules!) I like the way you described the ship so detailed without getting boring. I like the cliff-hanger ending. I like the subtle magic you described in the story. I like the realism in this story (I thought this chapter was more realistic than the others...dunno why, but I do) I like the hint of history you sneaky put in. I like your sailor's language (made me think of The Pirates of the Caribbean; and that's obviously a good thing!) I like Terraic hitting Niell (just me mean sense of humor seeping through...oops...)

I guess I just like the entire text! Well done!

:-) Ben Cameron replies: "*ducks head in shame* so sorry I didn't tell you...

Thanks for the comment - it's sort of hard to know what to say in response, except 'wow'. The only reason I can think of why this chapter would be more realistic is because I've spent a fair bit of time myself on the ocean (not the open seas, but I've spent about two weeks on yachts / ships) so I guess I was writing from experience there.

And in the future I promise to remember to tell you when I have a new chapter up!"
5 Apr 2004:-) Adam Hunt
I hope, for the sake of everyone, that Niell is taught how to control his magic. He's going to kill someone if not.

Anyway, I really liked all of the pretty description in this chapter. Also, I wanted to ask this: I know it should seem obvious, but I've never been on a boat before, and I assume that certain words or terms might mean something else, so what, exactly, is a 'poop-deck'? Like I said, might should be obvious, but I don't want to assume wrong for the rest of my life!

Niell is just showing all kinds of freakin' power. That's freaky whack! Like I said, I hope he learns how to control it!

Hey, almost forgot. Is the nereus like a smaller leviathan? Cool creatures either way!

:-) Ben Cameron replies: "That might actually be a good idea to have him kill someone - it'd give lots of strong tension and emotion. But he will learn shortly.

Don't apologise for not knowing words appropriate only to a certain sub-section of life. I can't say I know many nautical terms either, but I'll explain what little I know. Poop-deck (as far as I recall) refers to the raised section at the aft or stern (both refer to the back of the boat) from where the captain steers. Bow is the front, starboard is the right, port left - but you probably knew those last couple anyway.

Yup, the nereus is pretty much basically like a leviathan. The major differences being that they're quite draconian, and just to distance Niell's world from ours I wanted to avoid calling it a 'leviathan' in those exact words."
16 Jul 2004:-) Becca Lusher
All i can say is ouch... that had to have hurt all his power slamming back into him like that - nasty.
Dakan's great *beams* i like him a lot. And I agree with Terraic what else is he going to show?
Knew that blade would cause trouble *sigh* he's such a silly boy really *shakes head sadly* and now look what he's done - to himself as much as anybody. Interesting to see what Dakan's reaction might be to the state of his ship and the cause *winces*
The Nereus are great ^_^ i love that they came up to play in the storm and completely wrecked a ship, brilliant.
Good description on the ship, you sounded like you knew what you talking about, which was good 2 i've had to do plenty of research into galleons (completely my own fault) and i still don't sound like i know what i'm talking about, lol.
Again with the atmosphere - now i want more *scampers*

:-) Ben Cameron replies: "Terriac is my favourite character at the moment (though just wait till my next chapter comes up - you'll love my latest addition), though Inari isn't far behind.

As for the ship... well, I've been on my fair share of ocean-going sailing ships, so I have some idea of what I'm talking about, but most of that came from the livejournal of Arin Isolde. I have a link on my front page - I highly recommend you to check it out. She writes mini-essays a few times a week on things that authors can do to improve their writing.

*scampers of with you to read the next comment*"
12 Sep 2004:-) James S Hayward
That was a nice chapter, just like all the previous ones. I suspect the phrase 'dazzling dance of liquid light' is going to live with me for quite a while. I also loved how you mentioned at the start that the Nuroses play in rough storms, and, lo and behold, they come and play in the storm. Little touches can make so much difference.

Just a few little things;

'clothes had long gone stiff' 'long since gone stiff'
'it's scales gauging' 'its scales gouging'
'arms akimbo' I'm not sure if this is an error. 'akimbo is the position with your hands on your hips and your elbows sticking outwards. It seemed an odd position for Niell to land in. Maybe 'splayed' or 'outstretched'.

As a non-spelling point, Terraic went ballistic over Niell having a dirk, but no-one said a word about, and I quote; 'the sharpest, and deadliest, instrument of pain Niell had ever seen'. Wouldn't the enemy be more bothered by a bundle of harpoon launchers (or whatever they were) than a small dagger?
17 Sep 2004:-) Larry N. Morris
I just checked my dictionary, thinking James was wrong about "akimbo." He was right. I suspect you meant "askew."

[grasped his shoulder and wrenched him to the ground]
If they are on a ship, there is no ground. He fell on the "deck."
10 Dec 2005:-) B. Layne Weaver
"Apparently the stereotypical abilities of the Promised: poise, grace and speed, had been filtered out along with his memories." *chuckles* poor Niell. it might just be me, but i think a couple emdashes might work better here. for instance, "Apparently the stereotypical abilities of the Promised--poise, grace, and speed--had been filtered out along with his memories."

“What in the Gods names was that?” an apostrophe after the "s" in "Gods" methinks ^_^

Ooo, nifty sea monster!

"As the first nereus leapt out of the water, it clipped the starboard side of their boat, [it’s] scales gauging a hole in its side." [no apostrophe in "it's"]

tsk tsk tsk... when will people learn that fighting is no way to solve anything?
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