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"Regonian Light: Chapter 5" by Brian ´Dulcet´ Bergstrom

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    As Rose walked back to her house she saw Fireflower and Grasshopper waiting at home for dinner to be made. What was she to do? She couldn't just walk inside with a lovely red dress on with a sword. What would she say? She had to think of something.
    She hid behind one of the trees as Grasshopper looked out the window to see if his mother was home. His eyes were worried. Fireflower's eyes were even more. He worried his wife may have been killed. He then went outside and called for her.
    "Rose! Rose! Where are you?"
    Rose cried. She had to hide where she was. Fireflower would kill her if he knew what she was up to. He wouldn't be too concerned with the dress, but the sword would question him. She wouldn't have a reasonable explanation.
    Just then a young male voice came from inside the woods. "You must be Rose."
    Rose froze and didn't say anything. She feared the person may strike.
    "I mean no harm. I followed you to the elders and listened in." She turned around to see his face. He was a young lad about the age of twenty with short black hair and brown eyes. His figure was dressed in gray.
    She went to him deeper in the woods and gave him a dirty look. "You what?"
    "I know where Yubril is. He's a friend of mine."
    "You little eavesdropper!"
    "Look, I'm trying to help you. I guess I'm the only one that can. After all, I'm the only one besides the elders that knows why you're wearing a dress and sword."
    Rose sighed. "You do have a point. But I have to get home to my family. Would you happen to have some chore clothes I can borrow?"
    "I might," he said. "Come with me." She followed him deeper into the woods.
    As they walked they said hello to all the creatures of the forest. The path was very narrow, but not too hard to walk on. The trees were green as the grass. The sun had been shining down on them. It was a lovely day.
    "So you're looking for Old Yubril, eh?" the boy said.
    "Yes, and I suppose you know why too."
    "Lemme see that note you have." She handed it to him as he read it over. The markings were as foreign to him as they were to her. "Hmmmm," he said, finally, after looking it over carefully, "Old Yubril has traveled many places. I bet he knows what this writing means."
    Rose said, "I sure hope so. What's your name?"
    "They call me Sparrowhawk."
    "Oh, so you're a flyer?"
    "Yes, I could fly you over to Yubril's quickly if you turn into a Rose."
    "You know very well the answer to that. The Great Willow will not approve of it. We can only change into our true forms during times of great need."
    "The elders gave you permission to see Yubril. If that's not great need, I dunno what is."
    "You mean you change into a sparrow and/or hawk at any time?"
    "I help people out. That's my job."
    "Oh, I see. How far is it to Yubril's house?"
    "Yubril lives at the edge of the Meadow. It'll take us about an hour from here."
    "What about getting some horses from a stable? I have some money."
    Sparrowhawk grinned. "I know of a mole back in town that'll lone us two."
    "No, the old mole is blind. He'll never know they're gone."
    "I don't steal."
    "He owes me a favor."
    "Are you sure?"
    "I'm positive. C'mon." He led her down the path back to town. It was getting dark out and barely anyone was around. The merchants were closing up their shops and the saloons were closed. Only candlelight lit the road. Clouds covered the moon's eerie light. Rats ran through the alleys, searching for whatever food they could get their greasy little paws on.
    "Where does this mole live?" Rose whispered to Sparrowhawk, giving away her slight fear.
    "Not far. Not far at all." He continued to lead her. The candles were getting dimmer and dimmer.
    Out of the darkness came a gang of yellow glowing eyes. They slowly came closer to them, showing their tongues run across their lips. They were wolverines, the most viscous pack of animal to set foot in the Meadow. They killed only for food, nothing else, not caring for their victims.
    "Stand back." Sparrowhawk said, "I got this one."
    "No," Rose exclaimed, pulling out her sword. "I do."
    "Are you insane? They'll kill you! Do you know how to even use that thing?"
    "Of course I do!" She ran and lunged the sword at the big beasts. They dodged. She then ran and snuck behind one of them and stabbed him in the rear. He howled out in pain, falling to the ground dead. The others bit pieces of her dress off, shortening it somewhat. Rose spun around to nail one of them right in the eyes. Throughout this she was running around, trying to dodge their bites.
    There were only four left to kill. They slowly approached her, growling at her. They were now cornering her into a building. Rose was scared. Just then the wolverines slowly back away. They did so reluctantly. It was like a force was driving them back. Rose didn't know what it was.
    The wolverines then gave up and went over to eat their fellow  pack mates. Rose was amazed. What had she done? How could she have possibly survived that? Any other person would be killed just by one wolverine. She fought off six!
    Rose felt the pains from the few bites they did get on her legs. Sparrowhawk ran over to her. He was as shocked as she was.
    "Are you all right?"
    Rose winced in pain, "Yes, but I'm bitten badly on my left leg here. Is there a medic?"
    "No, the medic won't open his place 'til morning. I'm sorry. But how the hell did you ward those four off?"
    "I don't know. It was weird. It was like I had some force field or something forming around me. I've never felt like that in my entire life."
    "We have to get you to the mole's place. We'll spend the night."
    "No, I need to go to Yubril's. I will not wait any longer. We'll take one horse. Besides, you can fly back."
    "Rose, you're not gonna heal in this short--"
    "I know darn well I won't heal fast enough. I'm not worried about that. I'm worried about getting to Yubril's."
    "Yeah, but you won't get there in one piece if you go on like this. This is insane. What if the wolverines attack you again? They now have a challenge. No doubt they will."
    "I'm not so worried about them. I warded them off once and I can do it again. I know it."
    "Let's just get to the mole's house, ok?"
    Rose sighed. There was no use fighting with him over such a stupid thing. "Ok," she said, "but we leave first thing in the morning."
    "Agreed," said Sparrowhawk, eager to get a good night's rest.
    He led her to a tree. He knocked on the bark of tree seeing if the mole was still awake.
    "What are you doing knocking on a tree?" Rose asked.
    "He lives underground, silly. The tree leads to his home."
    "Oh."
    "Coming! Coming!" they heard a voice coming from inside the tree. Soon, a small door opened up and out popped a tiny mole. The mole felt around and his fingers first touched Sparrowhawk. The mole was mostly blind so he couldn't see very well. He recognized Sparrowhawk's scent. "Oh, how good to see you again! What brings you out late at this hour?"
    "I have a friend here, Rose. She needs a place to stay for the night. I'll explain once we get inside."
    The mole led them down into his underground hideaway. Rose thought it was very nice. It smelled like the mole had been living here for ages. The place was very dark. Only one candle lit the entire area. The mole hadn't needed much light. He couldn't see much anyway so it didn't matter.
    "Sit! Sit!" the mole said, eager to meet Sparrowhawk's new friend.
    They both say down on the floor while the mole pulled up his rocking chair and sat near them. He couldn't see exactly where they were, but he had a very good idea about it. He was excellent at sensing things.
    "So what brings you over here?"
    "Rose, why don't you explain since you know the details of it better than I do."
    "Ok," she said, "I'm from the countryside not far from town. One day I was doing chores for my husband and child when on my doorstep I found a candle weighting down a note. I picked both up. The note was written in a foreign tongue that not even the elders could decipher. And the candle won't seem to go out. Even against something it doesn't burn it. It just stays lit.
    "Then when I met Sparrowhawk, we were on our way to your house to get horses to go to Yubril's. The elders advised me to go to Yubril's because they said he might be able to decipher the letter left on my doorstep. When we got into town, a pack of wolverines attacked us. I pulled out my sword I had--"
    The mole interrupted her for a moment, "What in the Willow's Name have you got a sword for woman?"
    "I dunno. When I left to go to the elders a strange feeling came over me and told me I had to bring it. And I'm glad I did because the warded off four of the wolverines and killed two with my blade. It was like there was a magical force field around me. I never felt anything like it in my life."
    "Well, your story is amazing. I haven't heard one like it in a long time."
    "No, she's telling the truth," said Sparrowhawk. "I saw the attack myself."
    "Oh no, I'm not denying that it's true. I'm just amazed. A woman with a sword killing wolverines. Now that's something else, don't ya think?"
    "What about the letter?" Rose asked. "Do you think you could translate some of it?"
    "Oh, I don't know. My eyes aren't what they used to be. But gimme some light and I can try."
    They moved the candlelight over nearer to him so he could see the little he could. He was handed the letter and he began to examine it closely.
    "Hmmmm," he said finally, after a long pause, "I know Yubril would know this stuff. I saw this symbol all over his house once. He never told me what it meant, though." He pointed to the symbol. It was a circle with four stems coming out looking like a sun. In the middle was a square. It looked mysterious.
    "Did he say where it was from?"
    "Yubril's traveled all over. It could be from anywhere."
    "What's your name, mole?" she asked.
    "Moley. But everyone just calls me the mole. It suits me."
    "Well," Sparrowhawk said, "we better get some sleep. Are there any spare beds?"
    The mole scratched his head. Then he hurried over to the closet and opened the door. Out popped a small bed fit for one person.
    "That's all I've got I'm afraid. Either you share it or one of you gets the ground." The mole then walked off into his bedroom.
    Rose and Sparrowhawk looked at each other, determined to get the bed to themselves. Both made a leap for it and landed on equal halves of the bed.
    "Oh no," said Rose, "You get the floor."
    "Fine," mumbled Sparrowhawk in disappointment.
 

    Rose yawned as she got out of bed. The sunlight was shining in from the tiny crack in the door. She squinted her eyes adjusting to the bright light.
    She looked down at herself, seeing that her dress was torn and had numerous holes in it exposing some of her undergarments. She quickly covered it up with the covers.
    "Good morning, Rose," came a voice sounding like Sparrowhawk's, "The horses are waiting outside for us. You sure are a late riser."
    "Well, it was a rough night. Do you think the mole has any spare clothes I can borrow? My dress is destroyed, practically."
    "The mole left to do some errands. He'll be back later in the day."
    "Well, I am not gonna go riding to Yubril's with my dress torn apart. Try and find me some clothes."
    "Well, I could change into my form and give you mine."
    "You do that." she said, getting up, sitting on the bed with the covers covering her body.
    The boy began to glow and his clothes dropped to the floor. When Rose looked at him, she saw a hawk. Around the hawk were his clothes he promised her.
    "Thank you," she said.
    "No problem. I like this form better."
    "You can speak?"
    "Of course. All Meadow folk speak in their true form. But only Meadow folk can hear the speech."
    "Oh, I see. Could you...?"
    The hawk flew out the door, having the bit of wind he created shut the door as Rose changed into the slacks and shirt Sparrowhawk gave her. There were also suspenders. Even his shoes were left. But she wouldn't need those her own would do just fine.
    She slipped out of her dress and put Sparrowhawk's clothes on. Her clothes she just left on the floor. But then she thought a moment. Her mother's dress. She loved it dearly even if it was torn to shreds by the wolverines. She had to talk it along with her still.
    She stood up with her new clothes on and searched for her sword, and candle, letter, and bag. She knew they were all together because she put them right by her bedside before she fell asleep.
    Then she looked over by the mole's rocking chair. There they all were, safe and sound. The mole must've gotten up during the night and take another look at them.
    She made her way out of the little tree hole door and saw Sparrowhawk waiting with one horse. He wouldn't need a horse for himself since he could naturally fly.
    "C'mon," he said, "We must reach him by midday. He goes off exploring after that and we'll never find him."
    Rose got on the horse and found a natural feel for it. She remembered her days as a young girl riding her father's horses in the fields. She was a good rider. The horses loved her.
    "What's this one's name?"
    "The mole said her name was Geraldine."
    "That's a nice name." Rose smiled and pet the horse for a little while. She absolutely loved animals. Soon, Sparrowhawk nagged her and she rode off down the trail.

    Within time they eventually reached Yubril's house by midday. Geraldine rode fast for Rose was anxious to get there.
    "So this is Yubril's?"
    "Yeah, this is the place all right."
    It looked deserted or worn down. It seemed no one had occupied the place for years. But that was just from the outside.
    Rose dismounted and knocked on the door. Sparrowhawk flew up upon her shoulder. Rose had also was wearing her sword and had her sack on her as well.
    A short little old man answered the door. His beard trailed along to his stomach. His stomach was a bit chubby. He wore a green tunic and his head was bald.
    "Excuse me, but are you the one they call Yubril?"
    "Why yes, I am," the man replied. "How can I be of service to you?"
    Rose stepped inside. Yubril then noticed Sparrowhawk sitting on her shoulder.
    "Oh, Sparrowhawk! How good to see you again. It's been a while you know."
    "Yes it has," cawed the hawk. Yubril had studied the Meadow for many years. He had especially researched the language of birds in the region. He understood Sparrowhawk well.
    "What brings you two to these parts?"
    "Well, my name is Rose. I live ion the countryside in the Meadow."
    "I know you're from the Meadow. I saw you coming."
    "I have a letter the elders and Sparrowhawk thought you might be able to translate." She handed him the letter. She also took out her candle and set it down on the table. Yubril examined it carefully.
    "Oh my," he said, after a long silence. "Oh my! Oh my!"
    Rose asked, "What is it?"
    "This is unbelievable!"
    "What is?"
    "Where did you get this letter?"
    "I found it on my doorstep while doing chores. This candle"-- she pointed to it--"was atop of it. It doesn't seem to burn anything or go out. It's weird."
    "Did you see the person who left it there?"
    "No, I didn't. It's like it just appeared out of no where."
    "You're gonna be needed that sword."
    "Why?"
    "According to this letter you are to be sent to Clar for mage training."
    "A mage? I know nothing of magic."
    "The letter says you are to be one."
    "Who's the letter from?"
    "It doesn't say. But with that candle not going out, it must be from some one of great power."
    "Like who?"
    "Well, it could be old Swoom. But I see not a purpose. There's a war going on over there, last I heard."
    "What war?"
    "I'm not certain. Something to do with the number 76."
    "Strange. How far is Clar?"
    "Oh, quite a distance. It farther west out of the Meadow. I don't believe Clar ever has made contact with the Meadow."
    "What is Clar, by the way?"
    "A powerful country of the Light. The capitol, in fact. It's leader is the great Mike Parker. He's a very good ruler. I think I've seen him once or twice."
    "How long will it take to get there?" asked the hawk.
    "Oh, it will surely take about a week, even on horse back. There's a bunch of cities you must pass first."
    "What cities?"
    "Radsban, Tollik, Treggert; then you might run into Folun."
    "How far have you traveled?"
    "All over, really. You caught me at my resting month. Lucky you."
    "Are you from the Meadow?"
    "No, I come from a land to the south called Julik. It's a very nice land. Very peaceful too."
    "Well, what else does this letter say about this mage stuff?"
    "It just says that you are to come to Clar immediately for training."
    "Does it say why?"
    "No, just that it's important."
    "What will happen if I leave the Meadow? Will I lose my power to change into a Rose? Will I?"
    "I would imagine so. I'm sorry, but I don't see why not. The Meadow's magic is sacred."
    "Then how am I supposed to travel to this Clar place? I will not leave my home and family. Never."
    The hawk spoke for a moment. He had just been listening in. After all, it was all about Rose.
    "Rose, you don't exactly have a choice. If you go back to your family, you'll have to tell them of this business."
    "Yes," Yubril said, "The letter also states that you must come alone. Your family would certainly want to come along."
    Rose said, "Yes, I understand that, but I need to say good bye to my husband. I love him so much."
    "You really wanna go back all that way?" said the hawk.
    "Yes, I have to. I have to pack my clothes and gather my things. Ya know, girl stuff."
    "We can buy that on our way to Clar. They have shops along the way, don't they, Yubril?"
    "Oh yes, many. Stores much finer than the ones here in the Meadow."
    "I don't care. I'm going back to tell them the news." She boomed out the door. Her face gave the other two the impression not to try and convince her any more not to go.
    She got up on Geraldine and rode off like the wind.
    "She left her stuff here," said Yubril.
    "Don't worry. She's bound to come back for it."
    Yubril sighed. "I hope."
 
 
 
 
 

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11 Jun 2001:-) Nina Roussakova
*does a first comment dance* Yay! The story's finally starting to get somewhere. Why is Rose married? She shouldn't be!!! Oh and how can Yubril understand Sparrowhawk if he's not from the Meadow? Um, you had some places where I wasn't sure who was saying what and I had to read it 5 times over before I understood. Why did Rose leave her undergarments at the mole's place? Why did she take them off at all? Um but good. You're showing improvement. It was a little rushed at some places. You have developed a more 'modern' style of writing. I mean the language use of the characters. They sound like people here would. It's not bad or good, but I personally prefer characters to use words different from ours. I mean if you would replace 'damn' for 'damned' or 'by the Candle' or something like that. I don't know. I just mean that they probably have their own words for things. If you've read the outsiders, you'd probably notice word like 'golly' all over. It's not even that many years differance from now, but people always change slang. You can use the slang people use now, but it might be a little more fitting for a fantasy word to have fantasy slang. Anywayz, I think you get it. Good chapter, keep it up. I'd like to see more!
PS. Take a look at Shae's pic...
Author's Response: Well Nina, you do raise a few good points. I spent about a month working on this one. And I gotta say I suck at writing about a woman. Especially Rose. Her original character I could write pages upon pages about her. But now that I've changed the story completely from what I had originally intended, it's hard to write about her. And you have a good point about Yubril understanding Sparrowhawk. But he didn't speak much during the visit. I suppose I could change some things in there. And as for the swearing, I do agree. I've been trying to think of a unique swear word for the book, but it's no use. I can't use 'by the Candle' cuz the only ones who know the world is the Candle are Constance, Addim, and Malus. But I will do some editing on Chapter 5. I have already written Chapter 6 and I think it's wonderful. But I think a tough critic like yourself will help out my story a lot. Thank you!
16 Jun 200145 Josiah 'Jos' Petroff
U know.... I dont really have anything to say about this one.... I would tear it apart since your tore apart mine when you first read it, and then never commented again... But im too busy to type that much...
6 Sep 200145 Monroe
(Gets out his paper shredder, and then throws it in a lake.) We tear, we mend, we send tidings of a ten wrens within a pen! Yes, well. I really like the idea of naming yourself after the creature or being you shapeshift into. I love Sparrowhawk and his attitude.

:-) Brian 'Dulcet' Bergstrom replies: "I like that part too!"
7 Sep 200145 Monroe
(Laughs...) You lucky dog! This was the second time I got this story by clicking random story! You must have a bug or some sort of honey Elfwood likes.
24 Nov 2001:-) Stephanie J. Walls
I like Sparrowhawk as well, and I really like the name... Sparrowhawk...yes... its got a nice ring to it. I guess the story could use a bit of re-editing on the finer points, but its still pretty good.
20 Jun 200245 M. Bechard
Hmm, quite good. I am beginning to wonder if there is a pattern the way this story is going. (Next will be about Barbank, right?) Well, aside from a few typographical erros and what Nina had written, think this is very nicely written. Though I do wonder how Rose can fit into a boy's clothing.

:-) Brian 'Dulcet' Bergstrom replies: "As i've said, i suck!"
18 Aug 2002:-) Vicky Barrett
I love the Great Mike Parker bit! it jolted me out of the dreamy haze of reading for pleasure to reality, and I just had to stop and grin. That's so classy.
As far as I'm aware, I haven't noticed anything wrong with any of it, the story has swept me up, and I'm waiting to crash land. There's a couple of things I wonder about, but only out of childish curiosity, not because of lack of detail. Like is the land flat? And does it have edges that people can drop off? Not that it would change the story, unless 76 threw people off the edge...That would be good. But I love the creation story, and everything! Anyway, on to read more.
1 Aug 2003:-) Camilla 'Motone' Whitney
The evil editor continues... but through email this time. Stuff I liked:

I’m glad you have the creativity to have a blind character, even if it is a mole. ^_^ Most people are afraid of making imperfect characters.

I liked Sparrowhawk and I'm really beginning to like Rose. She's rather sassy--but ladylike too. ^_^

Other stuff:

When you first mentioned the note, I was left wondering why she was so concerned about it and didn’t just read it. You failed to mention that it was in an unknown script to her until her meeting with the elders. It might be good to clear that up.

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About 'Regonian Light: Chapter 5':
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 • Created by: :-) Brian ´Dulcet´ Bergstrom
 • Copyright: ©Brian ´Dulcet´ Bergstrom. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Light, Darkness, Dark, Evil, Good, Warrior, Mage, Wizardry
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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