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"when you lose" by Brian James Gibbons

SF&F Picture 13 out of 13 by Brian James Gibbons

This is another poem...meah

Here I sit,

Upon this stoop,

Gazing to my fallen troop,

I look at them,

And I feel,

A wound that I dare not heal,

I fall to knees,

And feel such hate,

stuck upon this livid state,

Hatred for Elves,

Disgust for Men,

Over and over again,

I think of how,

I dare not trust,

And again I feel such lust,

I grasp my sword,

In my hand,

And stab it to the dry land,

And there I sit,

And there I pray,

Let my guilt please go away.

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Date	Name	Comment
28 Oct 2003	Bridie rules!	Loading... I like this one. I couldn't get it out of my head. It's very good! Love Bridie ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Be Happy~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
18 Nov 2003	Amber Silver	Loading... Haven't I commented on this already? I think this is a lovely little poem. The flow is so quick and catchy. Well done
20 Nov 2003	D Joelle Duran	Loading... Wow. I really like the emotion in this one. I think this is my favorite! Brian James Gibbons replies: "hoooray for me! Thank you and have a nice day!"
24 Nov 2003	Kathleen ´Kat´ Casey	Loading... Now that would make a great picture! Simple yet vivid ... alot of emotion in this one =)I really like it, flows nicely. Brian James Gibbons replies: "Thank you! Vivid is a cool word..."
30 Nov 2003	Vilhelmina 'Mina' Benedikt	Loading... Tgus us really good! =D I like the flow of it a lot! Brian James Gibbons replies: "Thanks"
30 Nov 2003	Anja L. Berglund	Loading... Oooooh, this is so purdy!!! God it's so sad as well... My favourite part: "And there I sit, And there I pray, Let my guilt please go away." dries away tears You have such talent... Aaaw!!! Anja Brian James Gibbons replies: "* dries away your tears* Thank you! I'm not sure quite what to say..."
10 Dec 2003	Chelsea Castonguay	Loading... Good for someone as young as you, you have a good grasp of language.
5 Aug 2009	Pia Struzzieri	Loading... I like it, which is surprising. You’ve managed to waken my sleeping love of poetry. <3 thanks for that, and for writing a really good poem

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About 'when you lose':

• Status: OK
• Created by:

Brian James Gibbons
• Copyright: ©Brian James Gibbons. All rights reserved!

• Keywords: Poem, War, Loss, Hate, Spite
• Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles
• Views: 205

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