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Blair N. Woynarski

"The Flagellants" by Blair N. Woynarski

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A poem about religous zealots attempting to win favour from God. Far from my best work, but my other stuff is NG.
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For the sun, perhaps a settled dawn

Breathe life into the pastures gone.

But nevermore the green shall be,

As blood is spilt so hideously.



Through the mud of spring the caravan draws,

Of tattered forms trudging, whilst the rook caws.

The sewage of a meager life

Brings these pilgrims to the knife.



They retrieve their whips and studded rods,

While Magi pray to heathen gods.

They flog their backs and cry the night,

Hoping for God to catch their plight.



When the plague swooped down, the sinners roared,

Having brought it down on their hoard.

Evil magics course the land,

Lightning strikes from Beelzebub's hand.



Only we may see the light,

And we beat the flesh with all our might.

Only blood can cleanse our soul;

We burn our sins in this dark hole.



But God has not yet opened the door,

Through which our purified bodies would pour.

In our newly sacred forms we stand,

And are left with the sores of a sinner's hand.



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31 Jan 2005:-) Katie Collishaw
Wow!! I like this one!! IT RHYMES!!! lol.. lovely lovely! ONe problem though.. you have god.. and it should be capitolized.. hmm lovely lovely!! I think it's a wonderful poem!! And I'm so excited it rhymes. This one gives a clearer image than the other one.. and it rhymes!! mua haha.. write more poems!! lol
10 May 2005:-) Dominique giladi
This really is more to my liking, beautiful rhyming poem.
14 Jun 2005:-) Jess Hyslop
Now, you see, I personally prefer the other one... no offence - this one is very good - but... *shrug* I dunno... Maybe I'm just being contrary!

:-) Blair N. Woynarski replies: "You're not just being contrary. I like the other one better, as well."
8 Aug 2005:-) Ashley Jane Brodie
Well done! I'm poop at poetry, especially rhyming poetry, so I'm really starting to appreciate it when others do it well, and this is a pretty damn decent piece! I shall be reading your other work asap in hopes of equal goodness!

Abbi.

p.s. in reference to the Katie's comment, I don't think 'god' needs to necessarily be capitalized. I never do it, and out of choice. Though the content of this poem (being that their damaging themselves just for god) probably does call for it. It's all down to personal preference really.
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'The Flagellants':
 • Created by: :-) Blair N. Woynarski
 • Copyright: ©Blair N. Woynarski. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Blood, Flog, God, Gods, Life, Magics, Pilgrims, Purified, Sinners, Sores, Trudging, Whips
 • Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic, Wizards, Priests, Druids, Sorcerers...
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