| 12 Jul 2003 |  Hinkledee Dooo |  Loading... | |
| 19 Aug 2003 | Kirsty 'Chibs' Morrison | Loading... Hey for a quick poem this is still pretty gd!U do write gd poems!Keep up da gd werk! Chibs  Carolin Emily 'Dragoncat' Southern replies: "Thankyou. mebbe I should write a poem and spend some sensible time on it for a change... *goes off hunhting for the inspiration pixies*~#~ Carolin ~#~" | |
| 21 Aug 2003 |  Elizabeth Fitzgerald | Loading... I think you are under rating yourself. This really is quite good. There was just one thing though. In the first stanza you describe wings of flame and then later Emerald wings. This leads me to assume that you are talking about a different fay in each verse. If that is the case, perhaps you should clarify that a bit. If you are talking of the same fay then perhaps you should swap one of the references to the wings into something else. Other than that, I really enjoyed it. It is very good for something scribbled out in 5 minutes. Any chance we shall see some more poetry?  Carolin Emily 'Dragoncat' Southern replies: " Thankyou for commenting. The poem is about a pixie watching some faeries, and yes every poem is about a different character. I think that yes, it could do with clarifying. I have written heaps more poetry, and I need to put it all up.I have a poem about phoenixes, a poem about repented angels, a poem about some random fantasy temple, a poem about shapeshifters, and possibly a poem about aquilaefelins to go up. I have also written a prose piece about some imaginary city I dreamt about called Star City, also, I have recovered and am editing Chapter 3 of Darkwings II: Saviour. Carolin " | |
| 11 Sep 2003 |  Rachael Evans | Loading... I don't know that it really needs clarified that you are talking about a different fay in each verse; I figured it out by the time I got to the end of the poem. You just need to think a little bit, that's all ^.^ I really liked this one!!  Carolin Emily 'Dragoncat' Southern replies: "Too clarify or not to clarify, that is the question. Hmmmm *Thinks* I know!A Vote! Everyone who wants it clarified post a comment saying "Please Clarify the poem" and everyone who thinks it is fine as it is and doesn't need clarifying post a comment saying "It is Fine as it is, don't Clarify"Carolin" | |
| 19 Nov 2003 |  Michael A. (Amujr) Upchurch | Loading... I think it is rather clear, if one thinks. By giving the first one the name "One with no name" and the second one "Fay of the night" or whatever, it was pretty clearly established in my mind... okay, that's not always saying much, hehehe. Carolin Emily 'Dragoncat' Southern replies: "Thankyou. So far two people say it's fine and one says it doesn't but I'll let this run a bit first. Carolin " | |
| 26 Aug 2004 | Melissa | Loading... I'm here I'm there! I'm invading your library  but it's that good! it's a cute little poem/tale. yeah okay i have to admit....some more work wouldn't be bad, but you know...no ones perfect and 'hakuna matata' no worries, it's still fine  Carolin Emily 'Dragoncat' Southern replies: ""Hakuna Matata, it's a problem free philosophy,Hakuna Matata!" I liked The Lion King... Any how, thankyou for commenting. I know I din't spend enough time on this one.Carolin" | |
| 17 Sep 2004 | Melissa | Loading... heehee- 'Hakuna matata, ain't no passin' craze, it means no worries for the rest of your days, its our problem free philosophy hakuna matata....hakuna matata hakuna matata hakuna matata hakuuuuuuuuunaaa matataaaaaaaa....' I'm weird.....and yeah i like the movie too, my little sister loves it! yeah....random nonesense- Carolin Emily 'Dragoncat' Southern replies: "The Lion King is a good movie. I still cry when Mufasa dies... I'm to old to be watching Disney movies, aren't I... " | |
| 19 Oct 2004 | Domida | Loading... From Domida,
This is a lovely poem and so like you. Please let me know about your e-mail address. | |
Jeff Burke
A.R. George