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Chelsea Castonguay

"Helen of Troy" by Chelsea Castonguay

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A little poem about Helen of Troy...rhyming...egads forgive me!
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A quiet dropping of her sandles to the floor

Two shadows danced across the marble

and with a soft breath of consent

Her marriage bed she betrayed
Just wife to Menelaus she was no more

 

Menelaus waited for the wind to blow

Hoping Helen would remain chaste

Across the seas he would go

for his Beloved wife, when wicked

Eros showed her in anotherís embrace

 

Great Menelaus adverted his eyes and

announced the war would go on

For now there was a score to settle

With good Priamís son.

 

The blood of the virgin daughter on the altar

drying in the rising wind saw the Greeks

off to Troy to save the fair Helen

The tears of the sacrificed child drying

on her fatherís cheeks

 

For the face of one woman

thousands died on the beach

For Great Menelausí wife

men died, Achilles welcoming them

to the Elysian Fields just beyond their reach

 

Ten years past, her children became grown

Fair Helen stood on the walls of Troy

She could see Menelaus leading his troops

and her sons who were no longer boys

Helenís desire for Menelaus and Paris

only made her beauty more known

 

When finally Priamís great city of Troy fell

and Helen was rescued in the night

From the life she considered a paradise and a hell

Menelaus bore her away of a ship

with sails that shown bright


And home in Greece, Helen lay

still beside her great Lord

whom she could bend to her will

She prays for the souls wandering the world

Knowing their stories will remain untold

 

 

 

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10 Apr 2004:-) Daryl Cooper
An awesome poem, Chelsea. Sorry it took me so long to comment... *hangs head* No real excuse, I'm sorry.

Anyway, this is really good! It depicts the battle of Troy, and feelings of those involved, really really well! Some of it feels a little choppy, but I really like it. Awesome, Chelsea!

:-) Chelsea Castonguay replies: "yeah it is a little choppy, and will most likely be re-worked but I had to get something up..."
15 Apr 2004:-) Rosie Sanderson
Poeeeetrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyy

Sadly I know nothing about Helen of Troy or anything... Well yeah, it's noice

21 Chelsea Castonguay replies: "*DIES* YOU KNOW NOTHING ABOUT HELEN OF TROY?! ROSIE, WE NEED TO HAVE A SERUOUS CHAT, AND FAST!"
7 May 2004:-) Laura J. Korska
This really makes me want to go see Troy when it comes out!lol. One spelling mistake. It should be averted not adverted. Very nice poem!

:-) Chelsea Castonguay replies: "oh yea, I'll have to fix that...I'm VERY excited for the movie!"
11 May 2004:-) Matt J. Perry
Cant wait for the movie... have you read the novel of it, following the story of a young nurse who can see the Gods? I forget the author but its an excellent book.

Good poem/story, by the way. 2

:-) Chelsea Castonguay replies: "No...I haven't. It sounds really good though, I've read the story of Troy tho."
13 May 2004:-) Lyndsie Clark
YAY! I love greek stuff. this is really neat-o poem. don't worry about the rhyming - u did good. and besides, who ever said rhyming was necessary anyway? Keep on writing!

1 Chelsea Castonguay replies: "I'm not too worried about the rhymes...I'm not a fan so w/e lol. Thanks for commenting."
22 Jun 200445 Jenna
It's great to see the story of Troy from a non-male point of view. (no offense to the military men) Helen's is an interesting perspective, and you did a wonderful job with the rhyme. I loved the well-placed details, especially the reference to Iphigenia's sacrifice. It's probably Cassandra, though, who is my favorite figure of the Trojan War.
22 Jun 200445 Jenna
It's great to see the story of Troy from a non-male point of view. (no offense to the military men) Helen's is an interesting perspective, and you did a wonderful job with the rhyme. I loved the well-placed details, especially the reference to Iphigenia's sacrifice. It's probably Cassandra, though, who is my favorite figure of Trojan War.

:-) Chelsea Castonguay replies: "ah yes, Kassandra is my favorite heroine of mythology, next to Calypso."
23 Jun 200445 Nora Stel
Brilliant!

I'm a huge fan of Homer's work (just for the record: I was before Brad and Eric showed up in 'Troy')
And this poem you wrote is at the same time a new and original point of view and a recognizable retelling. It must be very hard to accomplish such a thing, yete you did it fantastic.
Your word choice is subtle and strong. It makes this poem special and a very nice read.

Keep up this good writing!

:-) Chelsea Castonguay replies: "Thanks, I really enjoyed this poem."
26 Jun 2004:-) Fatma NaharaVensar Alici
I really like this poem, because not only does it show Helen's persceptive, but it shows that to the greeks, Helen was the evil one in the legend.

12 Chelsea Castonguay replies: "I have read so many things where Helen was evil, and I don't really think she was. I think she was just a woman doing what she had to do to survive, which really IS the point of this poem. Thanks for reading! 12"
4 Jan 2005:-) Kate Inquisition
I adore it.

:-) Chelsea Castonguay replies: "Merci."
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'Helen of Troy':
 • Created by: :-) Chelsea Castonguay
 • Copyright: ©Chelsea Castonguay. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Fight, Helen, Menelaus, Paris, Ships, Troy, War
 • Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles, Romance, Emotion, Love, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins
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