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"My Goddess" by Chelsea Castonguay

SciFi/Fantasy text 10 out of 21 by Chelsea Castonguay. ←Previous - Next→

A poem about a drow male who is slowly dying while his female, who was enslaved to him for centures (yes, a very strange occurance) considers the situation.

←- Helen of Troy | In Those Nights -→

My Goddess

Her breath came in short gasps

The cold hair slicing through her chest

and she held his head in her lap

praying she could make his passing easier

I feel as if I’ve lived a million years

he had told her the night before as he

held her tightly in his dark arms,

slowly drowning her in the moonlight.

I feel as if I’ve lived a million years

with you, she replied

He smiled and closed his eyes,

leaning back against her satin pillows

entwining her white hair between his

slender fingers

It will never end, he told her, his red eyes

squeezed shut against the silver glow he

had before praised, and now despised.

She held her hand over his eyes and kept

her face bent over his, her lips inches from

his that were speckled with blood

Neither expressed their love in words

For her it would be to admit,

Him in a sense to deny what he strove

To tell her for a century

And he knew she knew

My goddess has forsaken me

He whispered and she shook her head

I am your Goddess

You are my goddess

He repeats, entwining his fingers

in her hair and breathing his last.

My Goddess

←- Helen of Troy | In Those Nights -→

Date	Name	Comment
16 Jun 2004	Babe Bambi	Loading... I love it, so sad, it brought a tear to my eye, good job!! Chelsea Castonguay replies: "Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it."
17 Jun 2004	Rosie Sanderson	Loading... Aw that's really nice! I'm enjoying your foray into poems my sweet! Chelsea Castonguay replies: "Eh I hates poems!"
19 Jul 2004	Caitlin 'Cera' McLellan	Loading... Oh no! sniff I really did enjoy that, and I can't say that about a lot of poetry (especially those that don't rhyme). I love evil guys--and I know, he didn't seem evil...but to deny a person's liberty, you know. I really did appreciate this. Chelsea Castonguay replies: "Glad you did! Thanks for reading."
2 Aug 2004	Christa Nopp	Loading... This is wonderful! I'm a great drow fan. Actually I've written a whole bunch of stories about two of them (the stories are in German, though ...). This poem is really beautiful because there is tragedy but also this feeling of ... hmm ... coldness, I think. Don't get me wrong. There is a lot of emotion there but as you wrote - a drow would not admit it openly. The emotion bubbles beneath the surface, threatens to break out every moment but doesn't. The tension you create is amazing. Chelsea Castonguay replies: "Thanks, that's exactly what I was trying to get at. They DO care but even death won't get them to admit it."
10 Sep 2004	Josh 'Boo Boo' Walls	Loading... Very, very excellent. I love poetry, and I mus say that you work extremely well with creating it. I feel as though I can become either character. You put that much emotion into it. Great job. Chelsea Castonguay replies: "Whoa, that's too generous a comment, but thanks all the same!! You're too nice to me."
13 Sep 2004	Josh 'Boo Boo' Walls	Loading... That was neither "too generous" nor "too nice." If anything, it wasn't good enough. You may not see the truth in what I'm saying, but fellow writers can. You just need to see that I'm being a critic, just as they are. Chelsea Castonguay replies: "blushes yeah yeah..."
2 Dec 2005	Dan Shevock	Loading... Wow, such a caring female drow. very emotional. wonderful. love the style. great poem. Chelsea Castonguay replies: "Why, thank you a lot. I know, I'm surprised she cared as much as she did. I would've thought she'd just rip his heart out with her bare hands and be done with it but you know, drow are very confusing creatures."
25 May 2008	Zach "Draconis" Bamford	Loading... wow. that is just beautiful. love how you realy expressed the feeling in there. GREAT JOB!!!