|10 Aug 2001|| Norma Peters|
This has such an authentic atmosphere, like an ancient manuscript, and told with the great diginity of a professional storyteller. Wonderfully written. ^_^Thank you! This is a fun story to write, simply because it's so unstructured- Rhian was telling it under the direction of Rosie, a six-year old, and I myself was making it up off the top of my head- no re-writing whatsoever. Ah...writing is my joy...
|11 Mar 2002|| Shewhotalkstotrees|
I suppose the writing itself is ok... and I love the concept of the heroine doing most of the work instead of the hero... but the story line is a little overused, the first part in particular. Can we have an ugly princess? Or a cowardly hero? Something to make the characters a touch more believable. Charis M. Ellison
replies: "This was written off the top of my head, with no planning whatsoever. So it's very stereotypical. But that doesn't mean I don't love different viewpoints ('The One Who Failed', 'The Story Without End'), but they don't come into this story. The characters aren't meant to be believable. But thank you for commenting!"
|29 May 2002|| Cadenza|
Wonderful stuff. I loved the way you wrote it in such old language, with such overused stereotypes. It makes the whole story really believable--not as itself, but as a legend of a group of people. You think that perhaps Briyann and entourage really existed, but that over time all the bards changed it around until it got really mixed up. Utterly cool. Charis M. Ellison
replies: "There, you've hit exactly on what I was trying to do with it. Thank you very much!"
|29 May 2002|| David Grant|
It's been said already, but i'll just echo their already-placed remark on this particular piece: "Wonderfully Written". Charis M. Ellison
replies: "*curtsy* Thank you very much! "
|2 Nov 2002|| Anonymous|
nice I like with the names. I plan to become a member here for writing but my stories have the worst names ever. ohh like said twice "wondefully writen." Charis M. Ellison
replies: "Thanks very much! When you're a member, come back and visit so I can return the favor "
|2 Dec 2007|| Dan DC Peterson|
That was totally ridiculous. Do you realize that not even an adult man can cut the head off of a horse with a sword, and you think a woman could chop off the head of a large dragon? Do you even know what reptile scales are made of? It is called Keratin, and it is as hard as bulls horn, and scaled up to "dragon size" it would be impossible to cut with normal human strength and weapons. And how do you imagine a person could get close enough to a dragon to cut off its head when it could outreach the human with its claws? Sorry, but this story was so unrealistic I had to just stop at that point. You ought to do some real research about animals and human capabilities before dreaming this stuff up instead of relying on bad movies and comics. You would probably be a good writer if you did this, for the style and grammar are quite good.