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Charles Mills Trowbridge

"LookingGlass" by Charles Mills Trowbridge

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Like many of my peices this is a retelling of a classic myth. The ending seems a little forced to me, any advice on how to change it?
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When you look into a crystal, you see yourself ten thousand times reflected.

  Our tale opens in a glassblowing shop somewhere in the Old American Empire, long before the Great Fall.
  There was a man who knew the magic of glass, how to mold it, shape it. He could shape it into anything he desired.
  So strong was he with forming glass that he could even use air to mold it, without touching it at all. However he was disgusted with the world around him and would have no part in it. No wife, no children, totally apart from the realms of man he lived, happy in his seclusion.
  The way that humans clouded their emotions confused him. He wanted to see only the smooth and clean glass that surrounded him day and night.
  In time his loneliness overcame him, and he devised a plan to eliminate it forever.
  Late into the night he would work on his project, his ultimate expression.

  It was to be a woman. She was to be formed from the glass that he loved so much, clear and naked as to never be capable of hiding anything from him.
  When he finished his statue, he kissed it once, and with the breath of life he animated it.
  She was as perfect in mind as she was in form, but without words, for every thought that she had appeared in her head for the glassblower to read.

  They lived happily together to some time. During the day she would assist him in the shop, always careful to never melt herself on the blowtorches.
  One day, however, as the glassworker was spinning a piece of his magic to elongate it, she strayed too close to her progenitor, and the pipe from which the master was blowing hit her, and caused her to shatter into a million parts.

  He sunk to his knees crying, knowing that he had destroyed the only perfect thing in his world.
  He left her there, and went to sleep. Trying to put his worried mind at ease, so that tomorrow he could start fresh. Perhaps build her again, from better, stronger glass.
  That evening he awoke to a strange sound. It was like something was scratching agent his doorknob. He went to his door, to find something he never thought imaginable. It was a woman made of a million jagged pieces of glass, whose long talons of shattered glass that served as fingers now could not manipulate the doorknob.
  When he looked into his former creation's eyes, flat planes of glass, he saw his own face reflect ten thousand times in his head. Her mind now infused with his guilty conscious ten thousand times intensified, she could think of nothing except for starting over again, fresh and new. And so she cut him down, determined to build him new from scratch, just as he had been determined to rebuild her.

  Now, my children, you know the story of the glasswalker who haunts the ruins outside of the village. If you meet her when you play, or happen to wander into her den when you go searching for firewood, be careful of your own feelings.

←- Genisis | The Laugh -→

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29 Apr 200145 Marianne (Anne) M. Forehand
This is like the tale of Pygmalion and Galateia (however you spell that!) with a Thomas Hardy twist. It's so perfect! *Runs up to anne and gives her a huge huge* You got it! This was totaly inspired by pygmalion.
1 May 2001:-) Roman Roz
I thought of that too, while I was reading it! I want a hug 8 Heh, sorry about that... This story is really incredible though, I guess I can try and be cool too, and relate it to Frankenstein. Well....*shrugs and gives roman a hug* here you go mate....sense that _is_ what i based it on. I wasent a big frankenstein fan....dispite my love for steampunk and post-victorian scifi, marry shelly never realy thrilled me. to much scienc fantasy...yeah, i know, i like wells, who also wrote scienc fantasy, but.....yeah. No one said that love makes sense.
3 May 200145 Kitilz
I knew that sounded familiar! Yes, we sculptors are always VERY attached to our progeny. I'd die if Musugi or Dante were broken. You put too much of yourself into what you create. Yeah, i know that artists do. If you had the luxery of reading everything i've produced over the last 4 years and compared it to what i was into/who i was into/what i was doing, you'd see some pritty amasing trends.
20 May 200145 Alex Shadowcaller
woah, hard to find words to decribe the beauty of that story...and the irony. I would try to help, but....i'm not quite vain enough for that! thank you so much ^_^
1 Sep 2001:-) Katherine Pope
OOOOhhhh. I liked this one, someday I'll read it to my grandchildren, hehe. I really dug the pygmalion reference, one of my screennames I use is galateapoe (galatea from pygmalion and poe from the infamous edgar allen). Overall, I thought the story was marvellous... there were only a few bits that just didn't seem to fit-
"During the day she would assist him in the shop, always careful to never melt herself on the blowtorches." Ahh, some meaty comments *digs in*. Blowtorchs - I dont know what your on if they remind you of bank robberies. *laughs* As far as the note about ghost stories....there is no difference between them. Every ghost story, in the clasic storys, is a cautionary tale. It's only the modern mind that seperates them.
5 Dec 200145 Ali
Oh God Charley.......I can't even tell how how much I loved this story...wow, you are a great writer

:-) Charles Mills Trowbridge replies: "Thanks!"
22 Oct 200245 Jessica Heerten
Hey, back again. This is an awesome story. Have you ever read Robin McKinley's Rose Daughter? The part were he makes a woman out of glass sort of reminded me of it. I love the idea behind it, though apparently *looks at comments above* it's not completely unique. Still...
Everything about it, I think, is good, except the first few paragraphs sound a bit awkward.
10 Nov 2002:-) Marianne Cassidy
Weird. Someone with the same name as me took the impression of the same Greek myth from this story. This story feels like a fairytale, without being over sentimental or predicatble. Quite the opposite in fact, the twist at the end is pretty freaky. Moral wise, its a good as any of Aesops fables (minus the animals....Aesop had a thing with animals).

:-) Charles Mills Trowbridge replies: "Truth be told, the entire pedidogital ending for the story was all forced and I dident visualise at all in the writing of the peice. I wrote it in responce to a challange of "why dont any post-apcoliptic words have their own stories".......so i felt like I had to write somthing like that in there."
2 Aug 2004:-) Simone Michaux
I, too, thought of the greek story, and I thought you were going to be predictible & merely follow that story, and I was almost prepared to stop reading when the knock on his door sounded ... but I went on reading and ... well, that'll teach me to jump to such conclusions 2
Very nicely done.
27 Sep 200445 None of your business
our comment starts with a boo. and it ends in a boo as well. BOO!!!
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About 'LookingGlass':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Charles Mills Trowbridge
 • Copyright: ©Charles Mills Trowbridge. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Glass, Woman, Magic, Magical, Realism, Shatter, Glassblower, Man, Regret, Guilt
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Urban Fantasy and/or Cyberpunk, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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