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Charles Mills Trowbridge

"The Laugh" by Charles Mills Trowbridge

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Here's the fourth revision of The Laugh to be published here on elfwood. This time I had a real copy editor go through and help me with it, so all of those pesky 'isents' have been spelled correctly and all of that! Hope you guys enjoy. Thanks for the help with it Whitman.
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  It's late afternoon, according to the sunlight pouring into the room. KC rolls over. "No use", she thought, "windows on two walls".
  With much effort she sat up, wiping sweat off her forehead, pushing her chair back. "Must not have ever made it back to bed", she mutters to herself.
  Another lonely breakfast at the dark, smoke-filled diner down the street. "The perfect start for my day", she can't help but mutter to herself again. Pushing thick plastic glasses onto her oversized nose, she stumbles over to her dresser and pulls out some cloths, a huge hoody and loose jeans. It's only a short walk to the greasy spoon, "and besides," she thinks it herself "it isn't like I could cook".
  Breakfast and the newspaper comfort her. New products and politics and promises all wrapped up in virtually identical packages for the masses to buy, she thinks. KC smiles wide as she walks home from the diner that afternoon, thinking about an article she read.
  She laughs again, then stops, self conscious about the sound it makes. Then she opens the lock on the building's front door, letting herself into the decayed front corridor.
  The boy from down the hall passes her as KC is walking by the mailboxes. He's so cute, with that synthtech hair and beautiful crystal eyes. KC trips over her shoelaces, and shakes her head disapprovingly at herself.

  Back up at her room she can't help but wonder why she's always so stupid around him, around beautiful people. Her mind drifts off to thoughts of actresses, adventurers on the screen who are always so dashing and heroic. The mirror offers KC her reflection, letting her watch herself sink into her chair and try to sink out of her body.
  Her eyes dart over to the deck on the table. "A little trip might make me feel better".
  Her bony fingers slide through the greasy black pageboy haircut until they hit the interface. KC's other hand reaches out and grabs the quarter plug and the stud's in.
  Booting up the deck, she takes a deep breathe and closes her eyes, waiting for the system to load. She can hear the click and whirl of the hard drive working, she grabs the keyboard and begins.

loading...
time remaining: (O)(O)(O)(O)(O)
time remaining: (X)(O)(O)(O)(O)
time remaining: (X)(X)(O)(O)(O)
time remaining: (X)(X)(X)(O)(O)
time remaining: (X)(X)(X)(X)(O)
time remaining: (X)(X)(X)(X)(X)
password: *********
logging in...
:
: /dialup
finding server
dialing...
1 206 555 1213
now connected
:
: /vmode activate

inside a whirlpool of colors can't breathe breath now air open up eyes inside and see the alerts no time to read now surge ahead inside the wire like a wraith through walls out past the civgrid with neon advertising lights stretching on past infinity zoom past outside now the badlands now floating in the corpgrid there lie the fortresses like shimmering spheres in the desert no pretty skins out here only raw data find one who owns that who cares anymore have some fun invisible I will overhear inside that sphere scans miss sideways shadow front door knock knock hard quicksilver parts like a run in pantyhose keep moving through the tear 411 3rd eye flares understand oh ironic fate leads me here inside the mainframe one more wall pass remove box borrow your bandwidth jumping board to the next level redrover i'm coming right over next level inside clean white perfect look around got 'cha reach into my bag of trix felix there we go ghostwriter should do the trick log out back out back door no time trace's started feel it like a noose getting tighter can't cut the wire bounce off the remote another 2 seconds gained back out with a broom behind nothing to follow to the desert outside now safe exit

:
: /shutdown

  KC reclines, breathing hard. Reaching back she pulls the stud out of her skull as the deck powers down.
  Pleased with herself, she decides to go out to dinner. Walking back to the diner, she takes her usual booth in the non-smoking section. The cook has the radio on in the back, and she orders, overhearing the news as it blares on the little box.
  "This just in, a hacker has tampered with the Seattle Times central computer. Changing the layout before it was sent to the printers, this computer criminal has literally made news. Tune in for more detailed coverage of this" The chef turns it off and KC giggles, pushing her thick black glasses back up her nose. A copy of the front page from this morning's newspaper stares up at her from the tabletop. "Compcrime Ends In Seattle" she reads aloud from the largest headline.

KC laughs again and enjoys her meal.

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3 May 2001:-) Christine 'BlackWidow' Landrie
Wow! I loved it. Although I didn't really veiw her character as being a criminal. I thought of her more as a mistivious child playing with and testing her limits. But I think in the end thats sort of what you were going for. That is what i was loloved about cyberpunk is that it has alot of style. My problem is the corprate-driven ultra hip style it's usaly seen(in movies at least, and many games included cp2020) as having. I am realy big into the concept of the cyberpunk as the outsider, the one who can never fit into socitiy for her mind and her body. Oh, and the idea of computer-mercenarys is almost comical to me. Shure, it could and does happen, but for the most part hackers are people who want to test their own limites, and who get a thrill from it. That's why you crack systems and hack programs, for the thrill...so i wanted to show that a very cool character doesnt have to be "oh look i'm so cool" and still totaly rock.
14 May 200145 Kitilz
if i had any sense of logic or ability to understand code in me i'd probably be a cyberpunk. But seeing as how i don't, i'll settle for drawing your cyberpunks as best i can. you should do more stories about KC...and maybe i'll illustrate a few pieces. gots idea for this one..but it'll have to wait til summer. Wait till summer? Yeah...i could dig being a cypunk myself, but, sadly i am not. So i guess ill just have to keep writing them.
19 Jun 200145 Liz
^_^ I got my KC study up...but I hate it. It's coming down.
I LOATHE that study. Makes me want to crawl into a hole and die just for drawing it. NEED MORE DETAILS!!!!!!! It's called artistic licence. Most people want it. I'll see if i cant think up some realy defined details for her.
24 Jun 200145 The Artful Dodgeress (aka Liz)
No no no...When I draw stuff for people I prefer to draw it as THEY see it..otherwise it just irks me because I didn't get it right. If I ever write a book...I will draw out all the characters so people know what they actually look like.
Not sure why that bugs me so much but it does. Virgo perfectionism from my ascendant kicking in, I guess. See, I am totaly the opposite when i write. I perfer to envoke each readers personal immegery into it so that it is more real to them. An example would be alice, the nameless waitress from Never Look Back. I want everyone who reads about her to draw on their own ideas on exactly what a junkie who's still pertending to live a normal life, so that it is that much richer for them.
15 Aug 200145 El Whitman
Hmm...you said you were updating /The Laugh/ "so that it made sense"...so did you do it? It makes sense...but I think it did before, too...? ANyway, it's either more polished now, or I'm just benifitting from rereading it, because I see it much more clearly now. Ver' coo'. Not to add redundant repitition to your comment list, but I strongly aprove of your "not beutiful" cyberpunk. We talked about this already, but for the benifit of our readers(man i'm sounding like a TV personality this evening), no, i hadent updated as of the time that you made this post. YOu just re-read it and it made more sense.
25 Aug 200145 Lil Aku
It flows much much better than before. It does what good tekkie does...carries you along with the beat and takes you for a trip, absorb you and carry you and install so much of yourself into the rhythm and beat until you almost get lost.

Which is exactly what good stories should do.

*s* You'd better be careful, Valmont, a less well-travelled person might get stuck in your threads and be forever tangled in them. Opposed to what, just become a junky *winks to liz*? Thanks though...i worked to make it easyer to read, becase before it was a little clumsy. Thanks for noticing!
1 Sep 2001:-) Katherine Pope
I didn't remember this one being particularly choppy... but then again I don't remember why I didn't comment on it when I read it before... So I'll just wing it. I liked it a lot, and I'll be redundant as hell and mention that I particularly liked the 'unbeautiful hacker' concept. Did you add the part where she sees the cutie in the hallway and trips over her own shoelaces? I didn't remember that detail, but it added depth to the character. She may not be someone in the 'real' world, but she is someone to be admired, someone with skill. What a great prank to pull on the outside world, to change their propaganda. I am quite proud of KC, so...thanks again. *gives KC a kiss* in anycase, yes, i did add the part about her tripping over her shoelaces...i wanted them to have just a little more interaction to realy drive the point home about her.
8 Oct 200145 Ali
Charley, I love this story. It's really really good. I love the style of writing you use. Keep up the good work and maybe you'll get another goodybag ^.^ Oh yay, another goodybag! Geez, the respect some people get. Thanks though!
10 Mar 200445 Jessie Heerten
Very ironic! I love irony! I like your stories because you don't say things straight out, you let your readers come to their own conclusion. It makes you want to reread it a couple of times to really understand, or maybe just to fully appreciate it.
27 Sep 200445 None of your business
Wow, i thought this one would have potential, starting early with a name. But she turns out to be a skitzo. Another failure is dropped on your head like a seagull's poop. Only more disgusting, cause its your own fault... Oh, yeah... Boo.
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About 'The Laugh':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Charles Mills Trowbridge
 • Copyright: ©Charles Mills Trowbridge. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Hacker, Chick, Girl, Cute, Kc, Computer, Crime, Data, Fortress, Program, Diner, Dirty, Smoke, Window, Wake, Up, Morning, Stark, Contrast, Netrunner, Electron, Highway
 • Categories: Techno, Cyber, Technological, Urban Fantasy and/or Cyberpunk, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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