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"Understanding Silence" by Charles Mills Trowbridge

SF&F Picture 2 out of 23 by Charles Mills Trowbridge

'Scream Chant Wail Ringing Whine Honking Shout Squeek' This little list was found at the top of this paper, the paper it's self being found in a box of old papers from along time ago. I figure that it constituted as a peice of writing (despite it not being much). I'm gonna guess that it comes from a creative writing class which was named Metamorphisis.

The oppressively warm air of darkness fills his lungs
Pain in his head, a river of blood falls over his brow like a waterfall of red oil obscuring his vision.
Piles of trash, rags and rotting food against huge buildings.
His mind starts to function again. Gotta move before who ever did this comes back to make sure I'm dead.
Standing and dusting himself off he starts down the narrow concert pathways.
No lights down here by the water, well none but the moon.
The wind's cool and salty, a refreshing relief from the summer night.
A woman's voice screams across the pathways of the breeze and hits his ears. Help. No. Stop. Help.
Sounds like the bodies who got to him found another victim.
He should help her, he knows that, but papa always said "There's a time for playing hero and a time for playing safe."
Nows a time for finding a room, curling up, and hoping it doesn't get infected.

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Date	Name	Comment
12 Jun 2001	Liz Nanney	Loading... Illustrating this one too. Maybe story board...@.@ Zach hasn't scanned any of my stuff and I _already_ have 3 other things for him to scan...stops, thinks, counts on fingers no, 5. >.>. I'm glad you like this one liz. it isent one of my favorites, but whatever strokes your tail.
15 Jun 2001	Rua Liz	Loading... ^_^ wags tail and yips I just happen to get a really excellent mental picture of what's going on, so it's easy to illustrate. I'm working on it now. I cant wait for the next 2 months(that it will take you to get the picture scanned of corse).
16 Jun 2001	Liz from Zach's computer.	Loading... HAHA! I just had Zach scan it. But unless you convince me otherwise, I'm not putting it up on Elfwood until you take back what you said about me bribing Zach the bad way. whaps you again Ok. I take it back. ^_^
19 Jun 2001	an outraged and in caffeine withdrawal Liz	Loading... grins Good because I was bluffing and already put it up when I sent the update through. ^_^;;;;; It was a big flipping update too...over 40 pictures altogether on Lothlorien and the Zone. _AND_ I have the _other_ one to show you. I'm sorry i havent finished commenting on everything yet, life's been interupting me. I'll get done before the 4th
1 Sep 2001	Katherine Pope	Loading... Why haven't I commented on this one before? I'm sure I read it... oh well. This is some great imagery here, for a few seconds, you're in this guy's head, living out a bad situation, then blink you're back in your seat. I really like it. That's exactly what i was going for. A very immage-istic sort of story which is more like watching a movie then reading. See, i realy wanna be a visual artist, i just dont have a stedy hand -_-
15 Oct 2001	Quinn	Loading... I love it, it is quick and painful. The one thing I could suggest is to elaborate more about how he is feeling physically. To puncuate the wounds more. How wounded is he? I don't care much about eloborating any more than this, because he isn't thinking to the level where anything but the pain would be in any great detail. Maybe the pain itself is just blurred, and he can't tell, but I want more of a feeling of how much he is hurt. How hard is it to walk? How easy would it be to give up?
5 Dec 2001	Ali	Loading... eep, i feel bad for saying this, but Charley, I didn't like this one very much. I thought it seemed kinda...forced, but that might just be me. I'm sorry I can't go on and on about how great it is, but I think you would rather I was honest
22 Sep 2002	Joy A. MacDonald aka ArrowsongElf	Loading... Um.. raises hand Did I understand correctly that he was attacked by corpses?! And what does it men by infected? How would a room get infected? And what would it get infected by? Or did he mean he hopes his wounds won't get infected? I'm confused. Charles Mills Trowbridge replies: "Really, it's just a peice of writing, and so by infection I mean just that: Infection. If you read it one way, and I ment to write it another way, who is "right"? I ment that I hope his wounds dont get infected, but after reading it, overall the peice is too unclear about that. Maybe that means I really ment that he hopes he isent infected by whatever makes people do that. A good auther never knows what they ment beyond the paper, because as soon as you put it into words on a page, it becomes just that. Trust you gut when you read, and you'll always get more out of it then trying to second guess a writer."
27 Sep 2004	None of your business	Loading... HA! first sentence is missing a period at the end! you fail! 0/100. Boo!

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About 'Understanding Silence':

• Status: OK
• Created by:

Charles Mills Trowbridge
• Copyright: ©Charles Mills Trowbridge. All rights reserved!

• Keywords: Victem, Apathy, Blood, Violance, Effects, Afterwords, Aftershock, Selfish, Man, Woman, Trouble, Opressive
• Categories: Urban Fantasy and/or Cyberpunk
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