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"Epic - Vertigo Beach" by Chris Michael Poole

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Prologue

A girl from split worlds wept,

As her family departed she wept,

In a city of Kings she was kept,

Having ponderous dreams as she slept,

Until finding their means she just slept,

And then after awhile she just leapt

Departure

In the night she awoke,

As her family departed,

In the night no one spoke,

Of their leave,

In a fright her world broke,

And her family departed,

With the tall man the girls took her leave,

Silent tears in her eyes the girl left with her uncle,

Silent eyes,

Silent tears,

Silent dreams,

Silent dreams of a place where she lived with her family,

Where she lived in her mind so it seemed

Truth

In the libr'ry she stayed,

Reading things about history,

In the books she found hopes of the truth,

What she'd hoped was a truth,

Wasn't more then a mystery,

Of an isle,

But she wanted hard proof

Leap

The girl went from her home,

In the library's walls,

The tall man had to disagree,

But she left from her home,

Leaving him,

Leaving all,

To the sands of the Vertigo Beach,

She awaited the isle,

To appear in the sky,

She awaited its foggy reveal,

And then went it came it came with a flash,

The debated was something quite real,

Then the girl with a step,

Got prepared and then leapt,

To a place that I can not reveal

Epilogue

Freedom

The sad girl took a step,

She prepared and then leapt,

From a world known to you and to me,

And she fell from the life that had troubled her so,

Now it's done,

She is finally free.

←- Entrapment | Macidermdale Chapter 2 -→

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20 Mar 2001:-) Joseph Rienstra
Marvelously mysterious! I like how her feelings and the confusion and bewilderment of her situation show up as the plot progresses. Mm, floating isles and libraries and lives that must be changed...
8 Sep 200345 Anon
I like this one, but somehow the rhyming takes away from it all, and the repeated words...But other than that its a wonderful poem, don't get me wrong, I just thought that might be useful. (Don't be afraid not to rhyme) The images are very well written, and I like the idea behind. Well done!!
16 Jan 200545 Anoria
Hi. Me again, if you've read the comments on the Thieves story before the ones here. I like the rhythm and the rhyme here, regardless of what others may say. It's unconventional, and structured without seeming contrived. Something I can never seem to achieve.

I'm curious - where did you find the idea of a floating island in the sky being something like another world? Only I've seen it before, and I'm wondering if it's a reference to where I've seen it, a reference to somewhere different, or just a coincidence. It's a cool idea, in any case.
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About 'Epic - Vertigo Beach':
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 • Created by: :-) Chris Michael Poole
 • Copyright: ©Chris Michael Poole. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Vertigo, Beach, Chris, Poole, Leap, From, Sad, Girl, Tall, Man
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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