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Melissa marie canaway

"Faerie Child(revision)" by Melissa marie canaway

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I started this * scratches head* wow, It must have been at least a year ago, I think...

Anyway, I started it a while back, and only finished it recently. Now, I've even revised it, making it as good as I can with the time - and patience- available to me.

 

It's about  someone (it doesn't mention a gender, and I'm not making one up just for this description) who, while relaxing in a familiar place runs across something less familiar-a faerie. When I wrote this I was pretty much thinking of "The Fair Folk' type thing, so if it seems a bit off to your idea of what a faerie should be...well, that's why.

Please comment, I'd like to know whether I should continue to bother posting things here or not!! (and if no one wants to read the stuff, then why post it?!)


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On the balmy banks of a distant shore

The homeland that I'll see no more

The lovely Isle of Caylareth

Stands a tree beyond all care

A gnarled trunk with branches bare

Lost in the shadow of death

Ohh, but what sweet memories lie there

Of spring-fresh days and sunlight fair

Oft-treasured times of mirth

Spent beneath that broad-limbed tree

Amidst the blossoms growing free

As sunshine warmed the earth

Twas there I saw the Faerie child

Clad in mystery, fey and wild

who, humming softly, knew no rush

'Til bright golden eyes espied my form

And as the still before the storm

All sounds faded to a pervading hush.

When I moved to get a closer look

She rose, and then my hand she took

Then whirled and spun, a wild dance.

Our feet, they flew, as did the leaves

So breathless I could scarce believe

Such a wondrous circumstance!

Such grace as I had never dreamed

Oh, how her hair in sunlight gleamed

I just couldn't look away.

She simply studied me at first

And then, as though it were rehearsed

She laughed, as only a child may

Looking up, with eyes so merry

she smiled at me, this child-fairy

'Til finally she spoke...

-her voice, it sounded sweet as syrup-

as a baby's cry, the young bird's chirrup-

The rippling gurgle of a brook.

The words themselves, were good and kind;

Tell me, good sir, what's on your mind?”

She softly, gently, warmly asked.

'tis nothing, fair maiden' was my reply

Nothing to worry you,” I sighed.

And so we sat, in sunlight basked.


I cannot know say long we stayed

But soon the light began to fade

Until, after a while, she slowly rose.

I grasped for her hand, to keep her there;

She simply looked at me, just stared.

As much as I yearned to hold her close

I then let go, I understood

And watched her head into the wood.

Her coming here had held a price;

I'd never see my sweet faerie again-

To try would only be in vain-

For no one sees a faerie twice.








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29 May 2009:-) Caitlin Dragondivine Swinford
"For no one sees a faerie twice" How sad. But that seems like one of those phrases the famous and all-knowing Everyone says. one of the "They Say" sorts of things that might actually happen opposite of what is said.
Anyway, good rhythm. I liked it. Congrats on mod’s choice.


:-) Melissa marie canaway replies: "Thank you:] and it does seem rather sad, doesn’t it? "
29 May 2009:-) Gabe Morrison
This is truly excellent, there is a real flow and melancholy tranquility to it that touched me. I especially liked the unique rhymes you have here. I really enjoyed it--a well deserved mod’s pick.

Just as a side point, in your description you state that your viewpoint character does not have an expressed gender. However, the faerie addresses them as "good sir."

:-) Melissa marie canaway replies: "yes, yes, you’re right. Sorry about that...I was really tired when I posted it(for the second time) and I suppose I wasn’t thinking...thank you for pointing that out^_^"
29 May 2009:-) Charlotte Simons
interesting!
I like it!

:-) Melissa marie canaway replies: "thank you: ) "
2 Jun 2009:-) Rachel K Rowlinson
This is so beautiful, it seems to have a wistful, haunting atmosphere. Definately deserves the mods choice!

:-) Melissa marie canaway replies: "yeah....In my head, the guy (as corrected by an earlier comment, he does have a gender...my mistake) was being forced to leave his homeland..I dunno why, but he was. He never sees it again afterwards, I don’t think..and it was meant to be as if he were looking back, remembering what happened..I don’t know if it worked or not, though."
16 Jun 2009:-) Katarina Ora Baralic
Wow, it’s beautiful! Great job! 1

:-) Melissa marie canaway replies: "Oh..emm, thank you^-^ Sorry I took so long to respond.."
13 Jul 2009:-) Amanda Jean Timmerman
I like the rhythm, and you did a great job evoking emotion by your word choices--it felt like it was speeding up when the guy and the fairy were dancing, then slowed down at the end where he knows he’ll never see her again. You definitely deserved the mod’s choice.

:-) Melissa marie canaway replies: "Thank you^_^ "
9 Aug 2009:-) Mark Boston
Marvelous3

:-) Melissa marie canaway replies: "thank you2"
10 Aug 2009:-) Daniela cabrera
"her voice, it sounded sweet as syrup-
as a baby’s cry, the young bird’s chirrup-
The rippling gurgle of a brook."

my favorite lines. excellent detail.

:-) Melissa marie canaway replies: "Thank you^-^ those were actually a pain to do...not many things really rhyme with "syrup" lol.
I’m glad you liked it."
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About 'Faerie Child(revision)':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Melissa marie canaway
 • Copyright: ©Melissa marie canaway. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Story, Fay, Fairy, Fae, Faerie
 • Categories: Dream Imagery, Faery, Fay, Faeries, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Juvenile, for Children, for Youth, Child, Children, Teens
Modpick •  Mod Pick at: 2009-05-29 07:53:24
 • Submitted: 2009-05-21 03:08:43
 • Views: 306


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