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Colton Hamshire

"Trail of Hope" by Colton Hamshire

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A hunter searches desperatly for food for his ill family, but he soon discovers that his only hope rests in the hands on a relentless ogre.
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Trail of Hope

The hunter followed the blood trail through the woodlands. He rushed forward desperately, eyes to the ground. Like the wind he swept through the forest becoming part of nature itself. He paused at times when the trail thinned out across the earthen floor to insure he would not lose sight of the blood. He couldn’t afford to lose it. His ill wife and young child back in the cabin were starving, and the stag that he shot with his arrow was their only hope. He had hunted for days without so much as seeing a rabbit. Something wasn’t right with that. The forest used to always teem with life, but in the recent months that life became scarce, until finally it seemed nothing roamed the woods, even the owls were gone from the night. But when he saw the stag drinking from a rivulet the hunter wasted no time. With the stealth of the most accomplished hunter he sneaked silently toward the stag and made his shot, but only managed to wound the animal before it dashed away into a fear-driven flight.

Now he followed the trail of the dying animal. It could not be off far. He knew soon the stag would become fatigued and collapse to its death. It had to. He would find it and make use of its meat to nourish his family, its hide for clothing for the approaching winter, and its bones for weapons.

Suddenly, a monstrous roar came from ahead--a terrifying beastly cry of aggression that resounded above all. Fear halted the hunter abruptly. The roar faded, carried away by the wind. The hunter’s heart raced. It sounded close--too close. Slowly with the nock of an arrow on his bowstring, he crept forward, peering through the forest.

Light cut through the canopy in wide, dust-filled rays. The leaves danced in the breeze and the shadows followed their lead. The hunter inched farther along the blood trail. He followed the red line with his eyes and saw the stag sprawled out in a patch of briar, its chest rising and falling slowly. Relieved, the hunter dashed forward toward his family’s hope of survival, but a giant shadow fell over the stag, a shadow of a behemoth unfit to walk in nature’s realm.

A monster the height of three grown men and just as wide came into sight from behind a large tree. A creature with skin the color of autumn’s dying leaves and long thick oily hair that fell over its stalwart, knotted shoulders. Its muscle-bound legs and arms were as big as tree trunks and it wielded a tree stump like a club. It moved toward the stag, its grotesque flat face appearing ready to kill with a sinister, crooked grin. Thick saliva fell from its filthy mouth and onto the ground like stains on the earth. Oblivious to the hunter, the creature turned its back to the human and hovered over the stag, a tower of death.

The hunter recognized the giant before him before--and ogre! Though he had never seen one he could not mistake it. The ogre bellowed another deafening roar, and raised his club over the stag. Every muscle in the hunter’s body told him to flee, to get back to his family, but he fought against it. He had hunted for days without success while his family starved. He found the stag; he hunted it, not the ogre. His would not let his family die with hope within sight. That stag meant everything; it meant life, so the hunter did not flee. Instead, going against everything his body urged him to do he raised his bow, took aim at the ogre just as the creature brought his club downward with a powerful swing and fired. He knew at that moment only he or the ogre would feast on the stag.

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11 Mar 2009:-) Lindsay Verde
An interesting concept. I found the story choppy while reading (semi-colons are a writer’s best friend 1) - reading a peace out loud really helps to find those spots that don’t seem to flow just right. I agree, this left me wanting more and seemed a bit of an odd place to stop with it being so short, but there’s always room for more and I know the excitement of wanting to get a piece up here to let people see. Keep up the good work!
19 Mar 2009:-) Mandy marie good
i loved the details. the plot was pshycologically alluring and the protagonist was relatable. i wouldn’t be surprised to see one of your works in the local bookstore one day. keep writing.

:-) Colton Hamshire replies: "Thanks. I’d love to have my works on the shelves, in fact that is my one ambition in life: to become a publishe author. I’m working on a novel now actually."
7 May 2009:-) Syn Nykols
first paragraph, could be just me, but i am having trouble with the word "sneaked" it sounds wierd

:-) Colton Hamshire replies: "Yeah, I agree here too. When I look back at this I see it is old writing and there are a many things I’d change it. The feedback that everyone here offers me is quite helpful."
25 May 2009:-) Elizabeth emma hampton
You are a amazing writer! You use such powerful descriptions, I can all but smell whats going on : D keep up the good work!

:-) Colton Hamshire replies: "Thank you. Trail of hope is one of mine that I am proud of because I feel like I accomplished a lot when I wrote it. "
2 Jun 2009:-) Rodrigo hernan valencia
Late-sorry-i have read your hunter story and looked eargely for a second page even a third but no only the initial attempt to create a good story like most of sci fi writers except ... you would say
29 Jun 200945 Anon.
This is a magnificent peice of work. I absolutely love how you described the forest and his interactions with it. The only thing that I can pick upon is the use of couldn’t. I feel like couldn’t is more suitable in a dialogue than in the main storytelling. Otherwise, great job!!
21 Jul 2009:-) Nathanael Herald Eisner
Very good! You had me drew in faster than the arrow flew from the hunter’s bow! I stayed in, too, to the end! It was like watching a movie, only reading it instead! Very impressive piece of a story this is! As the other time, I think it needs expanding. One thing is, though, I don’t understand why you recommended this one to me? I see no connections about anything I am to this, unlike with ‘Second Dawning’. Could you help me understand what made you think of this story in reference to me?
1 Aug 2009:-) Anna Zebrastar Rose
Again, you wrote so well you left me hanging! Did the hunter get the stag or did the ogre?
5 Aug 2009:-) MT Starkey
This is really cool. A great setup for a bigger story. Do you intend to continue this one?

:-) Colton Hamshire replies: "Thanks for reading. No, sorry to say, I don’t plan on expanding on this one as fo right now. I wrote this scene as a practice a while back. I hope you get to check out my other stuff."
22 Sep 2009:-) Alexander Damien Gonzalez
Good work on the mechanics of writing. I liked that one could feel all the environment and really connect to the action happening right then, I love how you manage to do that!
But still, the story felt a little unfinished to me, since there wasn’t that much of a resolution to it, and I couldn’t see much of the character’s personality beyond his immediate actions.
Still, a good practice, and a good read.

:-) Colton Hamshire replies: "Hey thanks for taking the time to read the. I really appreciate them. It is good to hear from people that like it. I hope you enjoy the others!"
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About 'Trail of Hope':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Colton Hamshire
 • Copyright: ©Colton Hamshire. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Ogre, Hunter, Forest, Fight
 • Categories: Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Orc, Goblins, Trolls, Trollocs...
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