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Dabao ´The Monkey´ Jia

"Battles Gone, Lives Reborn" by Dabao ´The Monkey´ Jia

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Battles Gone, Lives Reborn

        The elven soldier squinted through the thick curtain of rain at his opponent. None other stood on this battlefield but them, the last survivors. The one to walk away alive form this would bring news of victory. The other, would not walk away at all.
        With a blood-curdling battle cry, the thick shouldered enemy hefted his battleaxe, charging menacingly towards the elf. Quick reflexes saved him form the killing blow. He swerved to the left, twisting and leaning his weight on his left leg while bending his right to plunge his bloody blade into the other’s leg. Crying with anguish, the other used the flat of his axe and knocked the elf across the head, bowling him over and causing him to roll away painfully, warm blood dripping silently down his temple.

        He watched as the orc gripped his leg, pain crossing his vision as he fell too. Neither were anything special. Neither of them were generals, lords, or even captains, just the regular soldiers one may see, taking the first blows in battle. The elven lord fell in the heat of battle, beheaded by an axe. The orcish chief faired no better in fate for he endured an arrow through the heart in the beginning of the battle. Both were just normal warriors, carrying the burden of an army.

        The elf was brought back to reality by the orc, screaming in pain as he put strain on his injured leg just to walk over and continue the fight. He obviously wanted to end this fast, whether death beheld his future or not. The soldier plunged his sword deep within the charred soil and pulled himself upright. Too deep did the blade sink, so did the elf draw his knife from his belt marvelling yet disgusted by the sheen in which the weapon bathed in the blood-crested field. He felt ashamed. Killing a life did not do too much harm to nature, for there was always another to take its place as long as another life still remained there. Yet here, not one-single other life, plant nor animal stood under the darkened clouds.
        Flashes of lightning flew across the sky above, the roar of thunder following immediately behind, intent on catching up to its brother lightning. The elf did not see the hideousness his race saw in the others. He saw another victim to bloodlust. Understanding flashed momentarily between the two. It did not last long though.
        The elf was the first to recover, lunging forward swiping almost blindly with his knife. Blade clashed with axe, eyes locked with eyes, both warriors grunting with effort. Suddenly the orc turned aside sending the elf falling over, losing his balance. Turning around, the orc hacked down with the axe, and what was the elves right leg was now a stump.
        The elf screamed. He screamed like never before, tears swelling in his eyes and pain coursing through his body. Now all the elf wanted now was death.

        But the orc did not finish him off, for he was pointing at something beyond. The elf stopped long enough to look where the other was pointing. It was a flower.
        Dewy rose petals wavered gently in the serene breeze, basking in the sun, for now the clouds scattered leaving the sun alone in the clear, blue sky, shining down upon the lone flower with rays of brilliance. This was life. Just one, but one was enough to start more life again and turn this land into a beautiful land of lush flowers and golden meadows. It took just one.
        Both soldiers shared the moment together, no longer enemies. And with a last breath, the elf closed his eyes, the steady rising and falling of his chest finally stopping.

        The orc blinked. The warrior turned to examine the flower, then in turn gazed at the elf, then viewed the flower again. Slowly shambling to the knife the elf dropped, he picked it up, seemed to examine that too then dropped it, disgusted as the elf had. Then he clutched his heart, the last drops of his blood dripping forth. So he too fell that day, understanding what many others should have learned a long time ago. He fell that day, knowing…

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25 Jun 2005:-) Raoul Meuldijk
Well-described fighting scene!
I did get lost in the somewhat poetic descriptions halfway through, but the ending was spot on again!

20 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Well, I was experimenting with the poetic type stuff and decided to make this story poetic-like except not too poetic like because when I do stuff too poetic-like it starts to sound cheesy (if u know wut I mean). Thanks for the comment!"
25 Jun 2005:-) Julia Anna Rill
i have to agree with jessica. i didn't expect the ending either. actually i expected the two to stop fighting and leaving the battleground alive. But your end is much better! i like it!

14 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Thankees! To tell u the truth, I didn't expect the ending either...I kind of usually just write and write and make stuff up as I go along so sometimes what I write surprise me too!"
25 Jun 2005:-) Jessica Warner
Oooh, you can do good action scenes too! I like this a lot, I wasn't expecting the ending. One sort of expects the elf to win, but "there are no winners in war" is literally true here. Except the flower! This is a perfect length too!

1 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Thankee! You have just made my day *gives thee thy 'onourary "You have just made my day" award* Congrats!"
8 Jul 2005:-) Jess Hyslop
I really, really liked this. The understanding between the two of them... It was so emotional. And yet, it wasn't cheesy at all! Heh, well done! The fight was described really well - you had a great use of vocabulary so it didn't get repetitive or boring.

2 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Yay! Thanks! I was worried it might be cheesy, but it turns out that it wasn't, or is it isn't? O well! 10 Hurra!"
16 Jul 2005:-) Bianca ´Bia´ Tangermann
Hmm...*waves, to start with* You don't know me yet, randomly stumbled in to read a few stories.
Strange take on a battle scene...I can't say if the "choreography" was any good because I'm not too fond of battle scenes. The thing with the flower did come unexpected, but in my (humble! 2) opinion you should've made a little clearer what was actually happening, you only hinted it and it was kind of lost in the poetry.
The ending, now that was brilliant!

12 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Thank you! Now I shall "randomly stumble" upon a few of your stories."
20 Jul 200545 Monsa Xi
WOW...
*speechless*
I didn't know you could write like that...
Keep it up!!!!!!!!
*resisting the urge to pet, must resist!*
*runs away*
Resisted, good...

7 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "I can write like that if I tried (I tried). I could write better if I tried harder. I could write my best if I try my best. Unfortunately, I only try...I kinda developed the habit over the course of this year. Nothing I couldn;t handle in english or math. The science teacher didn't really teach, just gave us projects over the WHOLE year (no offense to the science teacher). I was never really interested in french so of course I didn't REALLY try. Gym, I relatively tried. History and Geography I fell asleep (in my mind). You get the picture."
31 Jul 2005:-) Marloes van Drie
Hmm, I find it very hard to comment on stories, but this one I truely liked very much. I am allways into stories about battlefields or elves, and this is the best combination ^.^. Your style is very good readable and yeah... what to say more. You tell me when you have new work here?

1 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Alright. Thanks for the comment!"
6 Aug 2005:-) Brendon Adam Shapiro
Good story! Usually I hate when characters wind up with leg stumps, but for some reason I didn't mind this time. (Probably because I didn't really get to know the character.) Anyway, nice job on this! I can't write short stories... I always make them so long... but you're very good at it.

1 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Hurray! Thank you! I usually can never make long, short stories. Instead, I do short, short stories. I don't really write a lot, just when I feel like it, and sometimes it actually turns out pretty good. Just like this one. Anyway, I shall be visiting u soon, so expect some comments."
15 Aug 2005:-) James 'Jimbo Fett ' Inwood
Yeah, good action scenes and I love the ending, reminded me of the poppies of WW1.

:-) Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Ya it does don't it?"
14 Sep 2005:-) Kazz Leer
Hey, love this story just the right pace, and the flower was the perfect touch. And you did the best ending ever, where no one wins. Definetly a masterpeice.

13 Dabao 'The Monkey' Jia replies: "Why thank you. I'm writing this short story write now that I hope will top this one ten times over. 10"
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About 'Battles Gone, Lives Reborn':
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 • Created by: :-) Dabao ´The Monkey´ Jia
 • Copyright: ©Dabao ´The Monkey´ Jia. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Battle, War, Orc, Elf, Pain, Life
 • Categories: Elf / Elves, Fights, Duels, Battles, Romance, Emotion, Love, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins
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