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Danny Staten

"My Curse" by Danny Staten

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Umm, I was bored one slow evening at work, and I had this kind of disturbing idea runing through my head.
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Some would say it is a curse, others a blessing. I rarely have the courage to leave my room, and then only if I carry a pocket mirror.

“It’s time to wake up.” My mother gently shakes my shoulder. “You’ll be late for school if you don’t get up.” The blur of grogginess slowly recedes. I never flinch or draw back in fear at what I see. It has always been that way. Life is never as my eyes see it. The burned flesh on my mother’s hand strokes my hair. The raw crimson of burnt flesh stretches from her cheek down her body. As she turnes to leave the room, I see her beautiful face in the mirror; healthy skin, long flowing hair. The photo of the family I keep on the dresser doesn’t show my mother’s burns, nor my gunshot wound. Photos and mirrors are reality to me. I have never told anybody. I don’t want them to ask me. I don’t want to have to tell my mother that she will die in a fire, nor my father that he will die of cancer. The visible tumors and lumps greet me every morning. The lucky ones only have pale faces and blood-shot eyes.

I had a cousin I never saw except in photos and mirrors. When they showed me his photo in a Marine’s uniform I understood. His chopper was shot down. They never even found his dog tags. I wince every time my mother lights a candle, or my father pulls out a cigarette. I can’t even look at guns, not even the toy ones.

I think it would be best if I never meet you face to face. It is easier for us both.

←- Sins of the Fathers Chapter 1 Forgotten Adoption | Sins of the Fathers Chapter 2 Starless Nights -→

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3 Dec 2002:-) R.E. 'Riibu' Kankaanpää
Excellently put. It didn't dawn to me at first, but now... oh I must say, great! Well done! Bravo! (and so on, you writer you.)

And I also liked the story.

:-) Danny Staten replies: "Thanks for the comment. Sorry I took so long to reply. I am glad to hear you liked the story as well. I figured this would get more comments because it is shorter, but I think my story is a much better piece overall. This was a lot of fun to write one evening at work when I was bored and my mind wandered to the disturbing idea."
3 Dec 200245 Stephan P. Calloway
This is OUTSTANDING writing!
My compliments.

:-) Danny Staten replies: "Thanks. Sorry it took so long to reply. I enjoy writing, but wish I was better at it, and more prolific with my keyboard 9."
3 Dec 200245 Jukka Bushtail
Woah! I love the opening to this. I don't see a typo either. The first two lines are great! Do you mind if I nick them?

:-) Danny Staten replies: "Thanks for the comment. It is nice to hear you like these insane ramblings of my mind 9. I really don't care if you use the first two lines as long as the rest of what you write is very different. Sorry it took me so long to reply, by now you probably have alredy used the lines or moved on to other stuff. Anyway, thanks for the comment."
20 Jun 200445 Megan McGrath
Oh wow....that is brilliant. It was cool how it kept me guessing what the world he was talking about until almost the end, also. Brilliant idea, I bet you could go a lot farther with this....but something tells me you don't want to. ;-) That happen with all my story ideas.
18 May 2009:-) Anna Moonfrost
wow this has made me want to read anything else you’ve writen... Wow....
26 Aug 2009:-) Matt Roach Koger
Very nice. Dark AND creepy with a borderline reality me likie ^_^
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'My Curse':
 • Created by: :-) Danny Staten
 • Copyright: ©Danny Staten. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Death, Horror, Premenition, Psychic
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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