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"Toxic Angel" by Benjamin ´Dark´ Martlew

SF&F Picture 3 out of 3 by Benjamin ´Dark´ Martlew

I wrote this sitting in an English class quite a long time ago now. I didn't plan it at all, it just came to me so I scribbled it down. It's basically how I see our modern world. it's about corruption, tainting good things, and what may happen if the world doesn't wake up soon. A load of nonsense really :)

Toxic Angel

Smoke; winds and chokes

It's way along the streets.

The dull and regular clump of feet

And in the sky above the

Toxic, yellow air and light, and street girls

And drink, an Angel prepares to

Descend into the gloom.

A heavenly warrior - hesitating?

What fearest thou, O warrior of light?

Does your Master's creation appal you?

It does him.

Toxic Angel, coming down

Amidst the rust and razor-down.

Infected Angel, arriving now

Yet none of mortal world will bow.

Toxic Angel coming down.

Now he's here and what's he got?

Drink and girls and cash and rot.

Infected now and left alone

Toxic Angel can't go home.

We infected you and now

No more holy chorus.

Join us here and you'll see

The Toxic Reaper claim us!

←- The Fulibee and Me | Flittermice -→

Date	Name	Comment
2 Aug 2003	Rabekah	Loading... Well,just had to read on after Fulibee. I am amazed this work is SO different.Deep and interesting! Can't wait to read more.Well done and congratulations.Keep going, don't ever stop Benjamin 'Dark' Martlew replies: "Thank you again ^_^ dances the "first comment dance" with you. It is dark and rather morbid I think, but not depressingly so. I just hope I convey the images I see in my head. Thank you for your comment hugs. Dark xx"
7 Aug 2003	Gemma	Loading... Not really my taste,sorry. Benjamin 'Dark' Martlew replies: "shrugs"
3 Oct 2003	S. J. 'Stormy' O'Connor	Loading... I don't really like the start much... I'm not sure why, but something around the middle really catches me... something about the way it flows. Good job! Benjamin 'Dark' Martlew replies: "Thanks, Stormy. I don't think the start is too good either. Thanks for commenting."
8 Oct 2003	Carla K. Anderson	Loading... Could almost be lyrics... I like it though. Benjamin 'Dark' Martlew replies: "Thank you They may well turn into song lyrics... one day."
11 Apr 2004	Grace Parks	Loading... Oooh! Nice! Like what carla said, it could be turned into lyrics for a song, i think that would be so cool. It was dark, i think it was very fitting for the name of a toxic angel. It was very good. I really enjoyed both your poems! I really hope you update soon!
18 Sep 2004	Fatma S. Alici	Loading... I really like the flow, and the feel to this poem, till the last stanza. It just does not run in sync with the rest of it. This part, more than the other parts need a flow adjustment. Other than that it is very good, and very interesting. It paints some very strong images, as well.
2 Jul 2009	Meg J Milano	Loading... awesome concept. Glad I stumbled upon it