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"Harp of Bone" by D. ´Emera´ Chien

SF&F Picture 4 out of 14 by D. ´Emera´ Chien

[2003?] Hmm... one of my poems for English class. Not too sure about the title, since this was required to be untitled, so I had to make up one on the spur of the moment for my Library. ^^; It's fairly obvious, I guess. Anyway, I do like this poem. Prob'ly one of my favorites at the moment. *noddles* 8-line rhyming verse.

A wizened harper played a tune
Upon a harp of bone
He sang so well and charmed me through
I wished him for my own

I gave him gold, I gave him jewels
But these he would not take
Instead he smiled and took my bones
For another harp to make

←- The Tale of Bob and Hungry | Centaur's Wood -→

Date	Name	Comment
20 Jun 2003	Brian Buckley	Loading... You've really done a lot of things right in this short poem. You have a consistent rhyme scheme, a consistent syllable pattern, and even a consistent syllable stress pattern (not to mention a clever subject idea) - all very rare in Elfwood poetry! The sole standout is the last line, which unfortunately has one too many syllables; contrasted with how good the rest of it is, it kind of breaks the spell. I'd recommend removing the word 'For' at the beginning, since it's kind of implied anyway. Good work though. D. 'Emera' Chien replies: " Wow, thanks for taking the time to make such a nice comment! I think this is one of my better pieces, and I'm glad you liked it. You're quite right about the last line, though. I was too tired out at the time I wrote this to do any further fiddling. Bleh."
4 Jul 2003	Deepo	Loading... twitch Wow. wishes he could write such good spur-of-the-moment poetry like that Eek. Though it's a bit dodgy- it must hurt, getting your bones sucked out by a wrinkly old harp player, eh? =P Forgive me. I'm turning into a fatal combination of Aussie and Canadian. Right-o. =P Which reminds me of my "foon" poem...how did it go? reminisces What about the forgotten foon? / Unknown combo of fork and spoon? / Surely it's might will make you swoon; / Foon, foon, oh foon, oh foon. XD Alright, done being random. hops off to join Wyvern's Library D. 'Emera' Chien replies: " ......"
22 Nov 2003	D Joelle Duran	Loading... Neat poem! Very well written--I like the picture, too. Now I can't help wondering what a bone harp SOUNDS like... wanders off, scratching head D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "Ahmm... bony? XD Actually, I imagine it as sounding more like hammer dulcimer than harp. Sort of sharply resonant."
9 Dec 2003	S. 'Jadis' Gyory	Loading... I like this poem. Lots. It's very good. 'Nuff said. ^.^ I bet old prendre-deriere was afraid a POOR harper had stolen his eyebrows. D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "Ew, who would even try?!"
11 Feb 2004	Hans Liu	Loading... Ohh that's like..uber! And I mean that in the best possible way! (I don't think there IS a bad form of uber) Really superb, and coming from a guy who just started a Circus Club (as a prank that grew too big =D ) at his school, you know I HAVE to be telling the truth! D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "Circus Club!!! May I join?!"
13 Feb 2004	Robyn Petrik	Loading... Oh, that's rad! What a great idea, and the drawing adds so much. I even like the typical 8 line rhyme, you really pulled it off! D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "This WAS for an eight-line poem assignment. I think it's my first ever, actually. Usually I do 12 lines... Mwaha. ^^ Shankyuu!"
1 Apr 2004	C. 'Liari' Seidel	Loading... Ooh, nice! Imagery is wonderful here! Have you ever read the Riddle of Stars trilogy? You should. This reminded me of the harper in it. Sweetly succinct, and quite captivating. D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "blussssh Deth! Omigosh! I love Deth. x_x You just gave me one of the most spifftastic comments ever! Thank you SO much."
18 Sep 2006	Dan Shevock	Loading... hehehe. This poem is cute in a morose manner. fun. D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "Thanks - I definitely think it's my most fun poem."
23 Dec 2006	Caleb M. Svobodny	Loading... Good poem, very good rythym and whatnot. I like. D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "Thank you! Yes, my older poems tend to have a strong emphasis on rhythm."
31 May 2008	Anon.	Loading... U R SSSOOO GAY

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D. ´Emera´ Chien
• Copyright: ©D. ´Emera´ Chien. All rights reserved!

• Keywords: Harp, Harper, Bone, Necromancer
• Categories: Ghosts, Ghouls, Aparitions, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic, Wizards, Priests, Druids, Sorcerers..., Celtic
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