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D. ´Emera´ Chien

"The Beetle-woman" by D. ´Emera´ Chien

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[2005] Not so sure about this one, but since I don't have much else to show in the way of fantasy writing lately, it's going up. XD; Does this even make sense? I have trouble telling if things are clear to readers other than myself.

It makes me a little sad that I rarely write rhyming verse anymore (when that's ALL that I used to write), but times change, I guess.

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The beetle-woman speaks, though

her lashes converse before she does,

a surreptitious tick and spark

chitin-chatter of

the many-jointed fringe

that borders her black, black eyes.

(Watch, in the cool dark of her tasseled tent:

she blinks again,

nictitates,

the chitin-framed eyes shuttering down.

Lash-legs meet, mesh,

then groom themselves

back to a feathery fringe.

Human again, nearly

Nearly beautiful, those questing lashes.)

She says, voice a tremolo scurry:

She’ll

tell your fortune in scarabs,

toss ladybirds for love,

locusts for luck,

lay you an opulence of opals

with wings.


She’ll tell you a tale of the sun-beetle

trundling his burning ball, ah!

so fine across that white-hot sky

or of the khepri who stole the king’s daughter,

built her a palace of flowers in a night.

In a voice vibrating with longing,

she’ll spin you a story of a beetle-maid—

the finest of her tribe! Skin like lacquer,

hair glossy as a wing—

a beetle-maid, she says,

who left her people for the soft-skins’ lands,

looking for life,

looking for love.

But that was many years ago.


Payment?

Arrah, none.

Just

tell her,

is she beautiful?

←- The Ancient Ones | The Tale of Bob and Hungry -→

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18 Sep 2006:-) Dan Shevock
*first comment dance* Well, this poem is like trying to hold a greasy baloon, just when I think I get what it means it ends with "just tell her, is she beautiful?" and I'm lost. Still, this was fun to read. Nice writing.

:-) D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "A greasy balloon? XD *amused* I'm sorry that it was confusing - I really didn't mean for it to be unnecessarily opaque."
26 Dec 200645 Anonymous
Oh wow! This is really great, i especially liked the part at the end, the beetle lady from the story is the beetle lady telling the story right? . . . I hope that made sense! Any way i liked it a lot, great imagery.

:-) D. 'Emera' Chien replies: "You got it! XD (well done?) Thanks so much for reading."
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About 'The Beetle-woman':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) D. ´Emera´ Chien
 • Copyright: ©D. ´Emera´ Chien. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Beetle, Woman, Desert, Khepri, Fortune, Teller, Gypsy, Poem, Insect
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters
 • Views: 256


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