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Désirée Dippenaar

"Merina´s Lament" by Désirée Dippenaar

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It is their last night together. Counting the hours before her wedding the next day to a cousin she hardly knows, when she'll have to leave Theodore, the human boy she loves. She can only hope that somehow, sometime, they can be together again... but all that hope seems lost. Elves can live thousands of years. By the time her husband dies, it will be too late...

I just love making Merina's life hard ;)
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Take my hand.
Never let me go.
I want you to know
I love you so.

Don't go away
Until this night is over.
Don't go away
Until the crickets' song ends.
Don't go away
I don't want to lose you.
Never let me go.

Everything they've taken from me:
Father, mother, sister, brother;
Now they want to take you too.
Don't go away;
Don't leave me alone.

Promise me now
That you'll always remember.
Promise me now
That you will never forget.
Promise me now
That you'll always love me.
Never let me go.

They want me to love another,
But I know I love only you.
They want me to give to him
What I will only give to you.

Take my hand
Until this night is over,
Until the burning sunlight comes;
Until they force me at last to leave you,
To take a place I never chose.

Take my hand until that hour
That I have dreaded all my life.
Wait with me till that time comes;
Till I belong
To someone else.

Take my hand.
Never let me go.
I want you to know
I love you so.

Never let me go.
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7 Feb 2008:-) Mike j Wagner
very nice, kinda depressing but good.

1 Désirée Dippenaar replies: "Thank you! I’m glad it was good~ Usually I don’t write many depressing things, but for this character always! 1

Happy Chinese New Year~"
15 Feb 2008:-) Aaron "Ren" Yeo
It is a lubble poem and it describes exactly what Merina is going through.. Somehow someone wants to be Merina now.. hahaha.

I enjoyed reading this the first time and I will forever enjoying reading it as it makes the heart feels sad but also pitiful for the dear Merina. If I was her, I would not want to have any other person whom I love, for I only love you. *abit of quotation from the poem itself*

Hehehe *post comments* ^___^

Ren <3

:-) Désirée Dippenaar replies: "Yay~~ Finally comments again! ^_^

Heh, it IS rather sad, a bit depressing maybe 10 It’s funny how sometimes I get these crazes where I write a lot about Merina and Theo, and then other times I get completely disinterested again. But I’m glad you like this one. ^^"
8 Apr 2008:-) Vilde D. Ulriksen
I haven`t read the story about this poem, but I think it is really beautiful... and sad, of course...
And very good rythm too!

:-) Désirée Dippenaar replies: "Thank you! ^^ These are my ’tragic characters’ - I love to make them suffer 14

Thanks for reading! ^_^"
10 Apr 2008:-) Leigh *Shwin* Erickson
Hello! Sorry it took me so long to get over here >.< I do appreciate your commenting... but anyways, on to your poem...
The plot itself reminds me of a Khalil Gibran story- The Broken Wings, perhaps? Such a tragic happening to be uncontrollably married to another... you captured it well, I think. The repetition is very effective here. It flows well as well.. I don’t really have much to critique on as free verse-ish poetry is largely up to the author. I’m not sure if there is another way to write the line about the crickets’ song- I think that’s the only thing that stood out to me as something I would want to fiddle with. I’m not sure why- helpful, aren’t I? In any case, enjoyable read... and hey, tragic characters are fun^_~

:-) Désirée Dippenaar replies: "Don’t worry about taking long 2 I always take long-er 14

I’m glad you liked the poem! You’re right about the cricket line... ah well, I’m not sure I’ll be bothered to change it anymore; this is one of those poems that I write on a whim and can’t bother touching ever again hahaha~

Thanks for reading and commenting ^_^"
26 Apr 2008:-) Natalie Adams
oh...i want to cry now, no really, i am moved to tears!!!!! I’m in awe!

1 Désirée Dippenaar replies: "Wow, I’m glad you liked it~ ^^ I tend to have a low opinion of my own poems, so I’m glad it had a good effect 14"
4 May 200845 Dreamer
man....that waz beautiful *wipes away tears* you are a very talented person. keep it up!!!1

:-) Désirée Dippenaar replies: "Thanks! I guess most of my talent comes with boredom or procrastination... I actually wrote this poem once when I was supposed to be doing homework o.O"
26 May 2008:-) Mike j Wagner
its ok... kinda jumpy but ok...

:-) Désirée Dippenaar replies: "Haha I know... I don’t really like this poem anymore really, I wrote better ones when I was 12 14 Thanks for reading!!"
9 Jul 2008:-) Michael pixie john
hey merina

betrothed to an elf
in love with a boy
be true to yourself
so shy and so coy
believe in the love
that destiny brings
the fates and the graces
the stories they sing

i love the sentiments in your poem
and the persistent pleading of the hurting elf girl
its kind of heavy but beautiful

:-) Désirée Dippenaar replies: "Thanks! I’m glad you like it 2 This is my long-suffering pair; I have hundreds of versions of their story and I can never quite figure out which story should be their actual one - because all of those versions are actually quite conflicting! 14 Thanks for reading~"
16 Jul 2008:-) Kelsey M. Graham
Beautiful poem. I usually don’t like poetry (can’t write it either), but this is wonderful, even if you don’t like it all that much anymore.

:-) Désirée Dippenaar replies: "I’m glad you like it! Me and poetry are in a love-hate relationship. Usually once I’m done with a poem (or actually even prose stuff) I love it to pieces. Then as soon as I’ve uploaded it onto Elfwood and it’s sitting in the ticket queue I wonder why I ever was so stupid as to show such a rubbish piece of writing to the public 14 And then a few months later I love it again. It’s crazy! 2

Thanks for reading 2"
31 Oct 2008:-) Jess L Rhapsodos
*Sniff* After recently watching Titanic for the first time in my life (very shocking, I know) this is very sad for me. I know it is about your characters, Merina and Theodore, but I just picture Jack and Rose. *Wipes eyes*

Very good poem, well written. Really sad though.

Thanks for checking out my page. Glad you liked my carrot roasting dragon.

:-) Désirée Dippenaar replies: "I’m glad you liked it! Hm, now that you’ve mentioned it, it does seem to kind of suit Titanic a bit. 14 I haven’t watched it for years ahaha~

Thanks for reading! ^^"
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About 'Merina's Lament':
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 • Created by: :-) Désirée Dippenaar
 • Copyright: ©Désirée Dippenaar. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Arranged-marriage, Love, Wedding, Elf, Human, Parting, Poetry
 • Categories: Elf / Elves, Romance, Emotion, Love, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc
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