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S. B. ´Kinko´ Hulsey

"A Poem from The First Alliance" by S. B. ´Kinko´ Hulsey

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The beginning poem, giving a slight bit on the plot of the story. Not much. But so you get the idea....I doubt that the very beginning of my story will be posted here, but I wish to do some poems instead for the moment....^_^
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Hear ye, good people, listen to my tale,

Of the nine creatures who fought the strong gale.

Consisting of all the strong evils about,

The strength of the righteous many did doubt.

 

Though they were mighty, it wasn’t enough,

Beating the evils would be very tough.

They knew that the good armies were far away,

That could not get there in time for the fray.

 

The different kingdoms needed to unite,

So that that good could then put up a fight.

Before all the evils would come like a storm.

‘Tween all alliances then had to form

 

Many things kept apart forces of good,

Allying was not easy as it should.

For differences of small degrees took their place,

Bad feelings ‘tween all were hard to erase.

 

So then the nine creatures went on the quest,

Fighting their hardest and just wouldn’t rest.

They went to unite all the kingdoms that stood,

Of all the creatures that fought hard for good.

 

Many things then did stand in their way,

But they would not bend their backs and obey.

They had to succeed or all good would then fall,

‘Tween chaos and peace they were the sole wall.

 

Hear ye, good people, draw close, listen well,

Tales of nine creatures whom nothing could quell.

From all different kingdoms and races they were,

Those that were evil the good did deter.

 

←- Eternity | A New Shade of Black - Chapter 1 -→

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18 Jun 2003:-) Zaikov
So it's a prologue 2

Where's the story? Show show.

Alright, same thing as the dragons...it's a nice flowy rhythm but the rhyme pattern is somewhat really simple...you know, aabb, ccdd, eeff etc...maybe next time you could try a different scheme.
Also, "creatures"...what about changing "creatures"for "heroes" here and there?
Anyway, it's an introduction...and now you need to go on.
I'll be looking forward to seeing more of it.
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About 'A Poem from The First Alliance':
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 • Created by: :-) S. B. ´Kinko´ Hulsey
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 • Keywords: Poem, The, First, Alliance, Very, Beginning
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