| 5 Dec 2004 | Bquirrel | Loading...I think its good.... but I think this style of poetry is btter suited as a short story instead of a poem. I also like the random use of shakespearean language.... very nice I applaude ur glory this hurts to type... good luck in the future of ur career. Peace my brother | |
| 22 Dec 2005 | Rochelle Leya Watts | Loading...I love the last line. The rhythm of this is very nice read out loud(my favorite test of poetry) so whatever word were removed were the right ones it would seem. | |
| 18 Jan 2007 | E. Levinson Carver | Loading..."While the Moon and the Stars are conveniently ours we'll carry on yet another day. Yes, carry on, without delay!" I LOVE that part!!!!! The rest is really well done, too. kudos to you, and to your friend who helped edit. And to you again for acknowledging your friend's help. a move of true humility--you should be proud. (hehe) Erik Hunger replies: "I pretty much lifted the style of that line from somewhere else but I completely forget where it originated... Something classical (yeah I know, that's just oh so specific)." | |