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Leigh *Shwin* Erickson

"A Memory Resigned to Die" by Leigh *Shwin* Erickson

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This is yet another half (well, much less than half!!) work. It is about Garnor, a character of mine. This is another short prologue thing.
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←- A Stolen Song | Son of Light: Prologue-Part 1 -→
Sorrow emmeshed with crimson sky

Harsh memories resigned to die

Fueled by a heart refusing fate,

a soul fell prey to a fierce hate

that ordered thousands to be sent

to find the one without repent

and return him to Death to pay

the price for longing for the Day

Hope fell with sword drawn from cold sheath

contesting for Death’s crowning wreath

Grim warrior’s vie for nobler pain

‘neath sky bleeding cold, bitter rain

which cascades, chilling heart and bone,

upon the soul who walks alone;

Cast from his home, an exile scorned

He chose his fate, for life, he mourned

Traversing lonesome paths in pain

aware of nothing life could gain.

Driven by a desperate fear

that through his weakness one would hear

the truth, he hid, maiming his soul

a broken being never made whole.
←- A Stolen Song | Son of Light: Prologue-Part 1 -→

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8 Mar 200445 Meagan Weidner webmaster@mar...com<
I disagree with Amara where she says that your poems lack the elegance found in your stories. Though I've only read one of your stories (I know, I know, I'm hanging my head low - but I'm working on getting them read), I find it difficult to think that anything could be more elegant than the two poems I've read. I think this poem is beautiful. And you know what I think about rhyming cuplets! (Jack and Jill/Went up the hill/To fetch a pail of wah-ter) But you have certainly pulled them off excellently.

I, too, liked the line "Grim warrior’s vie for nobler pain." It just has this nice sound to it. Well, gotta go read some more. 1

~Meagan1

1 Leigh *Shwin* Erickson replies: "thanks!!! and to think this i wrote once again in just a wee bit of time12 me n' poetry have a love hate relationship... i don't even like this poem really12 it was supposed to go all ballad like... but yeah.. that didn't happen... could still do it... but i'm lazy... someday i will... well, thanks muchly for reading... and aye, i do know about the cuplets... so i doubly thank you for your comment there!"
8 Apr 200445 Lissa Rose
Oooh thats really nice rhyming skills, your style of writing is very unique, good job!

1 Leigh *Shwin* Erickson replies: "thanks muchly!!! i appreciate you're still about and reading! thanks so much for the comment!"
23 Aug 200445 Melissa
Okay *begs for forgiveness* I see my commenting skills have much improved, good rhyming skills...HA! I mean yeah, the rhyming skills are awesome, but thats not the point really. Your skills are unknown to some, i suppose, but not to me!! Unique like mentioned last April,12 but with more meaning now12 anyway, bye!

12 Leigh *Shwin* Erickson replies: "*fixes melissa's html* remind me to correct you on that^_~ you're throwing off my colour scheme!! ^_~ i love it... anyway... glad you um... reread it?^_~ hee hee... glad you seem to like it more i think? *grins* you just go get your emotions in check... has to be mad having your sis gone... me... i shall dive back into writing world *takes deep breath* *plunges in*"
24 Aug 200445 Melissa
; About....it's for gabbi. Got things we remember...trevor, hugs, things like that. *beams* i was so proud. And don't worry about crying for a brook of frozen glass....no worries!! I was kind of ready for it...12 you gave us the warning12 but anyway i sort of needed to cry, rough time....you know? well anyway, this should probably be on your main page, but im lazy today. It's so hot out, i picked a flower put it down to find more and then when i came back the flower was wilted!! yes wicked hot...not too good because i was cold last night, temperature changes...not too good. I was already sick and cold.....now im sick and hot....*sigh* hate sicknesses....*walks off holding many kleenexs for my unpredictable nose12*

2 Leigh *Shwin* Erickson replies: "awww!! that's so sweet!!! you going to show it to her then?
*HUGS* it's not too hot here... well what would i know... haven't been outside today... hang on *wink* *returns* ok, it's pretty warm^_~ but flowers wilting like that... can't be fun!!
*HUGS* aww... you guys are all in my prayers... how are you all doing? has gabs called yet? and i hope you feel better SOON! that doesn't sound fun at all!! and no worries on laziness^_~ i understand"
24 Aug 200445 Melissa
*too lazy for emails*
*shields eyes from leigh's bright monitor, shining across the country* You sure you didn't buy the sun inside the monitor??12 But you know if you did.....FREE MERCHANDISE!!! *throws confetti and dances around the sun* You know not very many people own a sun12
And sorry about the colour scheme....And, I'm making slide shows!!! *throws more confetti* yay! I figured it out all by myself!!! Gabs was supposed to teach me but....under certain circumstances *sniff* she-well, couldn't so i made her one by myself....she always learns these things on her own....and it made it special that it was my first times discovering things like that with no help whatsoever...*beams* *throws more confetti*I'm gonna run out soon!! *wails* *looks in confetti pot....* *phew* there's still a little!12
~news flash~
~random advice~
cough syrup tastes disgusting, stay away from evil cough syrup....and me too, because i have to use it *blech*

anyway, you do know of your many talents....why, of course you know!!
*throws confetti remnants all over leighs page and runs out giggling*

12 Leigh *Shwin* Erickson replies: "*a word of advice to the wise: put quotes around the font colour^_~* it helps tremendously^_~ *cough*
*chuckles* i know!! it is bright!! and the sun i would believe!^_~ *grins*
*grimaces* i'll remember that with the cough syrup... nasty stuff^_~ did like children's advil though^_~ and a slide show! yay!! what of?
still writing... *plunges back in* they're giving me a headache^_~"
20 Jun 2005:-) B Layne
*waves* Hello!!! I've decided to see if I can get to your library before you leave, yes. ^_^
hey^_^ {{grins cheerily}} heh... good luck and thanks! {{pleased/touched/honoured}}

Ah, poor Garnor... really sounds like a tragic character. I'm quite curious to learn more about him. The language and flow of this piece was beautiful. *nods nods*
{{grins}} i knew nothing of him when i wrote this you realise^_~ aye he is... thanks! {{appreciates, does!}}

On to the next piece!{{follows, curious}}
23 Jul 2006:-) Anna M. Mortensen
As a poeticly challenged person, I like nice simple rhyme shcemes. *sighs contentedly* I like it when I understand stuff...
{{grins}} thanks^_^

Lovely. Sad, but lovely.again, thanks^_^ i really do need to finish this one day... actually, i was going to write DT as one long epic poem but then that didn't happen and it became a story instead so this might not get finished but in any case, thanks for reading and commenting^_^
9 Nov 2006:-) Panu Karjalainen
I see parallels with Lonesome Traveler... the mood is largely similar, notwithstanding the effects the simpler rhythm creates. I don't know Garnor, though... does Garnor have a story?I find that the easiest form to write in, and aye, Garnor has a story- Death's Tears, though it needs severe editing^_~
Thanks for reading, Panu!
22 Mar 2008:-) Désirée Dippenaar
A very good poem - I like the imagery, and the words you used bring across the emotion very well. At times the rhythm was a bit off, but I don’t really have a right to say that since in my poetry the rhythm is ALWAYS off 10 The beginning line and the ending line were especially good; the first line really draws the reader in, and the last line I like a lot; it is so sad and seems to summarise the whole feeling of the poem.

I liked this poem; I’ll read more of your works sometime ^_^

:-) Leigh *Shwin* Erickson replies: "Hello! And thanks for reading! I do appreciate it! I need to go back and edit this... finish it even^_~ I’m glad you enjoyed parts of and I do apologise for the rhythm issues... I should work on that! I’m glad you stopped by and thanks for the comment! I will have to see if you have a shelf... "
7 Apr 2008:-) Katarina Ora Baralic
Another great work, I must say ;-)

:-) Leigh *Shwin* Erickson replies: "Thank you and thanks for reading!"
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'A Memory Resigned to Die':
 • Created by: :-) Leigh *Shwin* Erickson
 • Copyright: ©Leigh *Shwin* Erickson. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Alone, Death, Memory, Sky, Sorrow
 • Categories: Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc
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