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"Ballad of the Fallen Angel" by Trent August Rayner

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Basically, I just grabbed a title name, and started to make things up as I went along, the end product being what you see before you. It doesn't necessarily reflect my views on religion, but it's always nice to look at things from both angles.

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I am the fallen angel.
Cast out because I believed differently than the others.
I lost my pedastal to a new creation.

I am the fallen angel.
They say I am dark, yet my intentions are as pure as snow.
Man could not resist the temptations I offered.

I am the fallen angel.
I shall war with my creator, for he is unjust.
Man commited sin, yet he was not punished like I.

I am the fallen angel.
I shall bring my forces to the gates of heaven, and reclaim my home.
Man wronged the creator, yet he was shown infinite patience.

I am the fallen angel.
And when the heavens are rubble, I shall confront HIM.
We came first, but Man was prized above us.

I am the fallen angel.
I shall confront HIM with what I know, show him the truths he blindly refuses to see.
Our lives were that of servitude, but Man was given something we were not. A choice.

I am the fallen angel.
And when HE has seen that he has wronged us, I shall end HIM as well.
Man cannot survive without HIM, yet he refuses to even believe.

I am the fallen angel.
And when HE has fallen, and I sit on HIS throne, I will give us that choice.
Man shall have his choice taken away, he will take our place at my feet.

I am the fallen angel.
This is my ballad.
Hear my song, and weep.

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Date	Name	Comment
4 Nov 2003	Miguel Francis Ettema	Loading... Random poem pick. I can tell you now, the second last stanza removes any chance of the last stanza ever being honoured by the reader Still, another nice take on a common theme. Keep Writing! Trent August Rayner replies: "Since it's written from good ol' Lucy's point of view, I feel that it's meant to more be read by fellow Angels and such, rather than us humans; So it's not really meant to make us weep... At least, that's my excuse, and I'm sticking to it. ^^ Thanks for commenting."
5 Nov 2003	Kali_Ava <seosborne2000	Loading... I disagree. I think that's purely personal preference. I tend to hate humanity... humans to understand and worship Lucifer even though he only hates them. It's derranged, but thought-procoking when you get into how human nature complies and reacts in different situations. I think it's a beautiful twist and critism... but then, I might just be slightly biased.
16 Dec 2003	Carondeleteleven	Loading... Veddy innerestink... Actually, your "excuse" puts the ballad into the perfect perspective (I must admit, it was not obvious to me on the initial readings that the ballad was directed toward the other angels) and makes it the work that much more evocative. Most interesting work. I look forward to what else you might share....
5 Jan 2004	Anonymous	Loading... I really enjoyed your poem 'Ballad of the Fallen Angel' although I could not help but notice you take --perhaps subconsciously, phrases from Bartleby's Epiphany from the movie Dogma.
8 May 2004	Anonymous	Loading... Captivating
9 Jul 2004	Anonymous	Loading... I think that your writing style is good, but I'd encourage you to go to God's Word to find out more about this topic.
10 Jul 2004	Jiselle	Loading... I really like this. This is excellent. I am pagan, so no "learn about God's message" crap that a lot of Xtians do. I am not a Xtain hater, but I do not appreciate their missionary-ing. Anyways, this is super-duper!
24 Jul 2004	Sami	Loading... I must say this is thought provoking, moving, and all together brilliant. And i do agree some lines do sound like Bartelby's epiphany from Dogma, but you use them so much better
10 Jul 2007	Allan Johansen	Loading... Nice poem. It’s one of those things that I’ve been wondering myself. If God is almighty and all-knowing, then why did he create the angels? He knew that they would fall from grace. And if he did not know that they would fall, then he’s not as omnipotent as he claims to be.

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'Ballad of the Fallen Angel':

• Created by:

Trent August Rayner
• Copyright: ©Trent August Rayner. All rights reserved!

• Keywords: God, Angels, Fallen, Devil, Sin
• Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy
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